Writing Feedback / "Reasons to smoke" I wrote this essay for tommorow's class [2]

Reasons to smoke

How many people do smoke your around? You, of course, can't count it, because they are too many. Smoking statistical data have shown us that one in five people smoke in the USA. The most of us know that smoke is bad for our health and environment, but they still smoke or they start to smoke. Why do people start to smoke?

Most people begin smoking as teens, generally because of peer pressure and curiosity. Also, people with friends and/or parents who smoke are more likely to take up smoking than those who don't. For example, I tried to smoke first time when I was eighteen years old with my friends at my friend's home. It was children's impish behavior. One of us has already been smoking since eight grades, and she always had cigarettes. This day we met in a café, and just chilled out. After that meeting we arranged to stay at my friend Erka's home. Although my friend who used to smoke didn't stay at Erka's home; she forgot her cigarettes. So we were interested to smoke and tried it at balcony, because we bewared Erka's parents. After we smoked, our heads were sick, and mouth tasted stinky. I thought I will never again smoke, and I don't use it again. But unfortunately my friend has been smoking since this time, because most of her family members smoke, and her boyfriend smokes. I conjured to her a lot of times to quit it. But she answered me, "I can't".

Another prevalent influence in our society is the tobacco industry's ads and other promotional activities for its products. The tobacco industry spends billions of dollars each year to create and market ads that show smoking as an exciting, glamorous, and healthy adult activity. For example, in our Mongolia back side of most taxi's window affix cigarette's ads picture; it affects a lot of people who smoke or want to begin to smoke. Some part of people who smoke in Mongolia often smoke "ESSE", which are Korean cigarettes. An advantage of this cigarette is a promotion. For example, if you smoke ten pack of "ESSE", you'll take some small promotion things such as napkin or lighter. Or if you smoke fifty pack of "ESSE", you'll take big promotion such as a small television.

For other example, famous people advertise cigarettes in Mongolia, because cigarette companies sponsor them for a lot of money. If you watch our Mongolian some comic show, you listen to many times about cigarettes. In recent years in our Mongolia "Landus", which is Korean cigarette, is broadened. This company owner made a contract with some show makers or stars. One time I saw a comic show about drinker's interlude with my cousin. In this show, drinkers were use to smoke and they acted to find cigarette "Landus" from outside. It was big advertising for this company, because there were a lot of people. After that show, my little cousin asked me, "What's 'Landus'? Is it good for us? " It was expression that they can affect us.

In conclusion, there are a lot of reasons that people begin smoke. Most of those reasons began in our wrong acts. It promotes and rises to smoke. Of course it affects very bad for our future, economic and development etc. We need to realize it now on our mind. Just try to determine it for a good way.

Writing Feedback / "Smoking Weed" essay [2]

Smoking Weed Essay

I have three best friends. Two of them are studying in Mongolia. One of them is falling in love with a guy who was studying in Beijing. I know a little bit about this guy. They did not have a relationship when I was in Mongolia. After I came here, they fell in love with each other. The guy, who is my friend's first love, is independently wealthy. His name is Toroo.

Yesterday I called my friend in Mongolia, and I heard a lot of bad news about Toroo from my best friend Khulan, who loves Toroo so much. Toroo came from Beijing to Mongolia last summer, and he went out with my friend Khulan. He likes her very much. They were happy together.

Toroo's friends are rich like him. One day they tried to smoke weed. They liked it very much. Since this time, they always smoke it. Because Toroo and his friends are irresponsible and independently wealthy, they don't worry about anything. They have plenty of money to buy weed. Since Toroo began to smoke weed, his behavior has changed.

It was Valentine's Day. My friend Khulan wanted to surprise him and she invited him to a very expensive restaurant. The bill, of course, was high, and she paid it all. After that, she gave him chocolate in the shape of a heart that she made herself. But Toroo said to her "Oh it's easy to make it, so I don't want to eat it." On top of that, he didn't give her any gift for Valentine's Day, because he didn't have any money to buy a gift for her, because he had spent all of his money for weed. My friend was hurt, but she still loves him.

After two weeks, they met again, and Toroo asked Khulan, "Can you give me twenty dollars? I am planning a surprise." Khulan did not believe this, but she gave it to him anyway. She didn't see him that night, and there wasn't any surprise. She cried the whole night. She called Toroo, who was at his friend's home with his friends, and they were smoking weed again. How could he do this? I can't understand this: of course he spent Khulan's money for weed!

Khulan forgave him again; she gave him one more chance. It was International Women's Day. They were going to meet with their friends at the Detroit Cafe at 8 o'clock. Khulan and her friends arrived at the Detroit Cafe on time. Toroo and his friends weren't there. They were all waiting for them.

Finally, Khulan called Toroo. He said, "I'll be there in one hour." One hour passed; but he didn't come. Khulan called him again. He said, "Okay, I'll be there in one hour."

Toroo and his friends arrived at the Detroit Cafe at last; however, they were still smoking weed. Khulan was very offended and she screamed, "Get lost". Toroo's response to Khulan for screaming was, "Hey why are you screaming at me? What did I do wrong? We have a lot of celebrating for women in the world. It's enough. Let's breakup."

Khulan was very upset. She decided that she wanted to be smoker like Toroo. She tried to smoke weed; unfortunately, the weed made her sick. She hated it and never tried it again.

If Khulan would have liked the weed, she would be a smoker today. How dangerous that would be! I'm afraid that Khulan will want to see Toroo again. I am worried for my friend. I wish I lived closer to Khulan; she needs my encouragement. I did talk to her on the telephone and I advised to her to meet Toroo's parents, and tell them the truth. If you don't tell, it will be harder for Toroo to quit smoking weed than it is now." She accepted my advise. I don't know what will happen in the future. All I can do now is pray for them.

Smoking weed has ruined Toroo and his friends' lives. And it has badly affected Khulan and her friends. If you are smoking weed or considering starting to smoke, you should realize that you have nothing to gain by smoking marijuana. In my opinion, the single best way to protect your family and your loved ones is to quit smoking or better yet, never begin.

Writing Feedback / "Location of schools" - my compare and contrast essay [2]

Location of schools

Location of schools is important thing to choose your schools. All schools have their own addresses and locations such as countryside, a center of city, or a suburb etc.

If you live in countryside, it has mostly one college, high school or elementary school. So you don't need to worry about location of schools in countryside. Schools of countryside are cheaper than schools of city. And small town or city is more safety and silence to study and live. But if you want to study in a big city, you encounter problems about location of schools.

Everything has advantage and disadvantage. Advantage of schools that located center of city is near to bus station and metro station. So you don't need to worry about how you reach your school; after class you are easy to come to what place you need to go such as your job or shopping. People who live in city are fashionable more than countryside people. You can see development of big cities. Disadvantages are more expensive than other rural and suburb schools, and school's environment is noisy. If you have a car, parking is expensive.

Schools where located except center of city are a lot of advantages. There are: parking is cheaper than other schools, and silent environment that is good to study, not much any traffic. If you live in around your school, there might be apartments are cheaper than down town's apartments. So you can save your money a little bit.

Things to affect in school tuition fee are out of district and out of resident. If you live in around your school, it'll reduce your tuition fee.

When you choose your school, you have to thing a lot of things about your location of schools. Example: tuition fee of schools, transportation, apartments which you will live and your job etc. If I would be in big city, I'll choose in center of school.

I like to walk and like to go by transportation I'm international student; I'll be come back in my country after my graduation. So I don't need to buy a car. So I would be choosing in center of school.

Writing Feedback / What did I learn at Oriental Institute? - essay [4]

thank you for helping me, i extended my essay because it was called 3 full pages essay, could you check it ?

What did I learn at the Oriental Institute Museum?

I have only been to a museum once since I was child. I had almost forgotten what museum is. I saw the Oriental Institute Museum the first time in America with my friend. I was really excited to see the fascinating sights at the museum. There were a lot of wonderful, incredible, and beautiful exhibits. My friend and I learned a lot of things while we were there.

The museum shows the history, art, and archeology of the ancient Near East. You can gain knowledge about ancient people, such as how did ancient people originate, how did they develop, what tools did they use, and what did they do. Unbelievably enough, many ancient people had already invented some of our modern items; they invented the first coins and written script, they built houses, and played games.

Ancient civilizations developed step by step. You can see the structure of the first village at the museum. As they started to live in settlements they needed a leader who could maintain control; therefore, ancient empires originated. There were many ancient empires which had their own customs, rules, and territories. The museum galleries are divided into different empires. There are Mesopotamian, Assyrian, Egyptian, Persian, Nubian, Megiddo and Syro-Anatolian galleries. Each of them has their own distinctiveness. I want to mention some of the exhibits that interested me the most.

They did not have paper and pen, but they could write. I was surprised to learn about writing in ancient Mesotopotamia. Their scribes wrote in cuneiform script for more than 3000 years. And there were the some script of cuneiform.

They wrote scripts on wax, clay, and stone. They could organize the complicated world around them. There was a board which named development of cuneiform, and there were some words when used in ca 3200 B.C- 600 B.C with explaining. It was funny when my friend and I read it. For instance, if you want to say "eat a food" or "drink water" in that past, you would be said "ku ninda", or "ku a". What's more, there was the code of Hammurabi. The tall stela is inscribed with their 300 laws. The laws, written in cuneiform, are carved in short vertical columns arranged in horizontal rows. The stela of Hammurabi is a collection of legal verdicts that were probably ratified by Hammurabi during his forty years of rule.

Ancient people described their life, rules and gods on stone. You can see many of them in the Assyrian and Anatolian galleries. Those galleries also contain artifacts connected with the beginning of two important eras, the Bronze Age and the later Iron Age. The Assyrians were the first to use iron extensively in weapons, and ingots from the birth of the Iron Age (about 900 B.C.). And they had some objects of bronze such as tools, weapons and figurines.

When I saw some showcases in different empires, most objects were a similar. It might be that they had interacted and adopted each other's styles.

Most of the museum's showcases have interesting sculptures made of stone and wood. They all have their own history and meanings. Example, models of workshops where located in Egyptian gallery was placed in tombs, because it was believed that the tiny figures in the model could provide for the deceased in the afterlife. In the tomb model, workers are preparing all the bread, beef, and beer needed for eternity.

During my tour of the museum I was scared by the mummies and carcasses in the Egyptian gallery. I've never seen a mummy or a carcass before. It was fascinating. And many animals lived in ancient Egypt, so there were many pictures and statues of animals such as lion, baboon, and hippo. Have you ever think about how ancient children did play? Egyptian children sometimes played with wooden toys shaped like the animals that lived nearby in the Nile River, such as hippos and crocodiles. These toys often had hinges that allowed the mouths to move up and down. They also enjoyed physical sports, such as juggling and playing board games at home.

Another interesting thing was that I saw a cosmetics container and many beautiful pieces of jewelry. They created cosmetic containers in the Iron Age (900-550 BC). It makes me feel that women could take care of their beauty even in ancient times. I like that, and am proud of it.

I've been advising my friends to visit the museum. I hope they, too, will like it. And I'm thankful to my teacher who told us to go see it. I efficiently spent my time well with my friend.

Book Reports / Gilgamesh epic and Noah's Flood [2]

Gilgamesh epic and Noah's Flood

Religions are explained their history, and origin by their gods and believers. Indeed, we cannot say who is god, where he from is, and what were the true story. There are some similarly story in different religion and country- Noah's flood by genesis, and epic of Gilgamesh by Sumerian history.

These two stories are both about flood that send from gods to destroy all mankind for man's sin and wickedness , but few amount of mankind could survive to follow hero's advice that used a big boat which made pitch.

Each story has different heroes, and little bit different description such as shape of boat, height of boat, name of hero and duration of flood etc ...

Why the meanings of story are familiar? May be upon the time there was real flood on the earth and, people talked about it-to used different version and different situation, thus the real history of flood was changed.

Writing Feedback / What did you learn when you read "The Allegory of the cave"? [2]

This article has many meanings. It also makes me think about a lot of problems, which we face every day.

The first page makes me think about people- friends who were at the same level and the one of them became successful, and after that others started to envy him, because of the bad energy he came to the same place as the others. Thus, some people who lead the same life from the beginning doesn't change their life styles, because they are afraid to explore new world.

While I was reading I like this saying: "... by a change from light to darkness or from darkness to light; and he will recognize that the same thing happens to the soul." I'll make an example that first came in my mind: " There was a person who were reach from the birth, who ate,drunk, wore, and used all the good things. One day he lost everything and became a bum- who doesn't have place to live nothing to eat, drink and just the clothes that he had on him. After this situation he couldn't adapt to that environment and hardships. He might suicide himself." This example explain how you would change from light to darkness. "There was a person who was bum from the birth. He didn't have any money to spend on him, and he didn't have place to live, nothing to eat, drink and wear. But one day he became reach, he got problems how to spend his money right way. His eyes are dazzled from all of the money that he hadn't seen before. he couldn't adapt to richness that's why he looses everything." It explains the change from darkness to light.

These two example means " those two kinds of people can't adapt to each others world", but if it will be several times, they could study each others world. At the end they can live in both worlds.

Book Reports / litarary analysis about shakespeare's sonnet 19 [4]

hello, im writing literary analysis about shakespeare's sonnet 19. it's my first time, so it makes me hard. and i know there are many mistakes, because i don't know how to say some phrase and words. please help me to check, and give me some advice.

Analysis of Sonnet 19

When we face a hard problem or get our hearts broken, we can calm ourselves, knowing that Time can heal everything. Time goes fast, and all things are changed, forgot, or ruined, but forever love never vanishes; it will stay forever in our poems and songs.

The first quatrain is conceived that no one can outdo time's erosion. He chooses massive, hard, and forceful words: "pluck", make, and burn; also, he uses strong, colorful animals that described to succumb to the ravages of time. He even alludes to the mythical phoenix that notes "it is mythological creature that is unique and consumes itself in fire from the ashes of which another phoenix is born, because it regenerates in this way". (Simon 593)

Therefore, the poet tries to show how strong time is. Time is passing; and strong animals, those who are slashing and wild, have died out. In The second quatrain, Time not only can ruin strong animals, but also it can fade and destroy all beautiful things at the earth. The speaker challenges Time to create happy and sad seasons as he fleets by. The speaker even supports that Time can do whatever he wants to the whole world and everything lovely that vanishes with the passage of the seasons and years, but the last line commands that the speaker forbids Time to touch his love, and says it with passion: "But I forbid thee one most heinous crime." (7) He can just forbid, cannot stop it to destroying his love and arts.

- "In the first two quatrains, the poet issues a series of commands, ordering time to devastate and ruin the world age- as time will anyway, with or without his will. (Emma 18)

But he tries to refuse and commands Time not to touch and fade his love's beauty, in the third quatrain; also poem's tone becomes more poignant and emotional. The speaker says what heinous crime is, and begs time not to age his beloved.

The first two lines are direct commands that forbid touching the beauty of youth, but it is not actually beauty of youth; it represents his love and his arts. The poet declares by exact words what does he forbid. Generally, the speaker doesn't want to fade his love as the young people don't want to be old and get wrinkles in flowing time. So he demands that time let go untainted for his love.

- Because the poet lacks any actual authority over time, his irrelevant commands only highlight his impotence. The poet finally acknowledges his powerlessness in the third quatrain, as his commands slip into pleas. (Emma 18)

The last two lines are softer than first two lines. The speaker tries to explain why time cannot devour his love, and he implies that if it wouldn't be destroyed, it would be remain perfection of beauty for future generations to admire.

The three quatrains relate Time, and it is felt like Time is the strongest one, but in the turn to the couplet the poet changes his tone; he starts to be confident.

He says, that go ahead "old Time," and do what can you do such as destroy his love and his art, even though time is enormous, but "My love shall in my verse ever live young."(14) His love is untouchable by time, and it will stay forever young in his poem.

- As Laurie notes "Don't spoil my lovers beauty, Time, even if you do, my love will live forever in my poetry." ( 362)

Do his love and his art stay really in forever? Could Time destroy his love what's more his talent and arts?

Although Shakespeare was born in 1564, we still read and learn from his artistry throughout the world. His talent and ability have stood throughout generations. His love and talents are never devoured by Time.

Essays / Could you give me the idea of thesis statement about Othello? [4]

i'm writing litertary analysis about Othello by William shakespeare. and i wrote the thesis, how was is it? pls help meeh.

As Mongolian proverb which means "if you will follow someone who is good mood, you will be the light of the moon; if you will follow someone who is bad mood, you will be the poisoning of the snake", Othello is followed and trusted Iago who is an evil, and he ruins his great life by himself.

and i translated mongolian proverbs by my self, so there is might be so many mistakes. one more proverb:
As Mongolian proverb which means "if you didn't erected the hill, by where can sit the jay bird, Othello isn't provoke Iago, he couldn't be confronted his tragedy.

could you check it too? tnk u :)

Writing Feedback / "Pattern's of Medieval Life" - about the presentation in class [2]

Pattern's of Medieval Life: What did you learn during the presentation?

First of all I have never taken a presentation to whole class for one hour. It was my first time, so I had met some problems to take it. First, the hardest problem was my language skill, because I'm an international student who is living in America for one year and half. So my speaking language hasn't been improving enough as someone who can speak Native American. I cannot read some hard words, so I scared how to get to students to understand my presentation. Second, I had to read and learn a lot of documents and pages because of the time to take presentation is a long and my chapter what I chosen was long too. But I had needed to take the presentation to confront to those fears and problems, and I did it.

My chapter's topic was "Pattern's of Medieval Life". My topic contains a lot of different themes and subjects. I tried to find more information from other source's to each theme. If it would possible, there was a theme that I could speak more than an hour; in other hand, most themes have very wide meanings.

However, those themes are related to each other, so it was easy to understand. They were many interesting themes what I didn't know. Generally, each centuries and years had their own leadership who were imperious and smart in the past c.a 500-1000. A leadership had own tribe or empire which had their own culture, arts, science and technology, law and literature.

My chapter's beginning is about Germanic tribes, and most interesting part was the Germanic arts, because there were so beautiful arts that I can't explain by words. The remarkable metalwork items found at Sutton Hoo were gold buckles, shoulder clasps, and the lid of purse designed hang from the chieftain waist belt. Those objects are adorned with semiprecious stones and cloisonné- enamelwork produced by pouring molten colored glass between thin gold partitions. Also, the zoomorphic (animal-shaped) motifs found on artifacts at Sutton Hoo. We can see it from the purse lid.

Another interesting part was the Germanic literature about the epic poems such as Beowulf. I searched about Beowulf from an internet, and I found a movie which called "Beowulf." The movie was presented at 2007. This movie is a little bit different the real epic poem and it was really interesting to watch. I could imagine well who Beowulf was, and how he was a valiant since I watched the movie.

My next amazing part was about the king Charlemagne, and his Empire Carolingian. Charlemagne was a person who was interested in education and the arts. He established schools at Aachen, in town centers throughout Empire, and in Benedictine monasteries such as that at Saint-Gall in Switzerland, where monks and nuns copied religious manuscripts, along with texts on medicine, drama, and other secular subjects.

One of his best ideas was built the Palatine Chapel at Aachen, Germany. It has been described as a "masterpiece of Carolingian architecture". Now it is a building of great historical, architectural and religious importance.

After Charlemagne's death, known as feudalism was originated in medieval society because of no one could lead to the empire like him. Feudalism was a medieval contractual relationship among the upper classes, by which a lord granted land to his men in return for military service. The feudal class monopolized land and power within medieval society. Serfs who were an unfree peasant represented more than 90% of total population. The serf was the one who did all of the menial work, and in time of war, was expected to fill ranks of foot soldiers. He was not trained in war, and most of the casualties during that time were serfs. The rest of the time the serf did all of the manual labor. Under feudalism, your lord had the right to tell you who you would marry, what you would do for a living, what you would charge, if you could have permission to even go to another place for a visit. Thus medieval society was changed.

That moment Christians and Muslim religions was strong in Medieval West, so the Crusades started. The Crusades were both a cause of economic revitalization and a symptom of the increased freedom and new mobility of Western Europeans during the High Middle Ages (ca. 1000-1300). Despite the failure as religious ventures, it has enormous consequences for the West: the revival of trade between East and West enhanced European commercial life, encouraging the rise of towns and bringing great wealth to Italian cities. Following it, literature's tone changed.

The Crusades contributed to the birth of medieval romance, a fictitious tale of love and adventure that became the most popular form of literary entertainment in the West between the years 1200 and 1500. Medieval romances are stories of adventure in which the chief parts are played by knights, famous kings, or distressed ladies, acting most often under the impulse of love, religious faith, or, in many, mere desire for adventure.

Moreover I learnt many things about Medieval Life such as how they lived, what they invented, how did they structure their society, and what did they compose. I'm glad that I gained many knowledge about Medieval West, and I was happy to take the presentation because of I had opportunity to share it for my classmates. So I did it to outdo my fears. It could little step of my life.

Essays / Othello is a fool and jealous man - the outline, is it good? [2]

Othello by william shakespeare

Thesis: Othello is a fool and jealous man who couldn't believe his fair and attractive wife.
I. Othello's outside looks strong and honest, but his internal side is a weak, and diffident.
A. His accomplishment shows that he is strong.
1. Because he has risen through the ranks of the Venetian army through his hard work and success in a battle.
2. And he is in great demand by the duke and senate, and he looks respected person.
B. Indeed, his vision is not good to see a far.
1. As a Mongolian proverb says, "In order for the jay birds to sit on the hill, you must first erect the hill." If Othello didn't provoke Iago, he couldn't be confronted his tragedy.

2. He couldn't see that his wife is a fair; besides, he kills his wife Desdemona by ransom of his weakness.
II. Desdemona is a smart and a strength woman who has capacity to fascinate others.
A. But she really loves her husband who is he.
B. She just wants to help Cassio who serves under Othello, because she is a sympathetic person.
III. Iago is a main character who controls the play, and he is someone who can admit himself.
A. Iago is able to manipulate others to do things in a way that benefits him and gets him closer to his goals.
1. Most characters are influenced by Iago such as Cassio, Roderigo, and Othello.
B. He can show who is Othello, and his weakness to others.
IV. If Othello has ability to see anything by other side, or his internal good outdoes his internal evil, all things would have been different, but he couldn't be like that. So Othello's sin against Desdemona is as heinous as Iago's sin against Othello.

Book Reports / First half - Iago guilt paper [3]

Othello
In Shakespeare's play Othello, Iago seems guilty for all of Othello's tragedies, indeed Othello is a wellspring of his tragedy by himself. People think him a good leader, but he is the leader who has no ability to distinguish who is bad and who is good. He is a weak and jealous man; at least he could not believe his fair wife.

Othello's outside looks strong and honest, but his internal side is weak, and diffident. He is a respected person who is the pride of Venice. His fame, and his age is enough to realize and to understand what happens, but he can't. He hasn't any confidence to believe himself because of his skin color and the differences between him and Desdemona. He himself suggests that because he is black he shouldn't be with Desdemona.

"Haply for I am black
And have not those soft parts of conversation
That chamberers have, or for I am declined
Into the vale of years-yet that's not much-
She's gone. (3.3.262)"
"Iago's ploy to string Roderigo along is his assurance that Desdemona couldn't contrary to nature, long live a black man. Even his manipulation of Othello depends on the Moor's own prejudice against his blackness and belief that the fair Desdemona prefer the white Cassio." (Emma 221)

Before Iago begins his scheming, Othello already has his doubts about Desdemona because he said "she lov'd me for the dangers I had pass'd." (I, iii, 167) He is unsure why Desdemona loves him.

Othello is insecure with his personalities, so he allows himself to be influenced by Iago. Generally he seems innocent and believes that Iago is his true friend. But if Othello absolutely trusts Iago, why wouldn't be he chose Iago instead of Cassio. He starts his tragedy by himself.

As a Mongolian proverb says, "In order for the jay birds to sit on the hill, you must first erect the hill." If Othello didn't make Iago annoyed, he wouldn't confront his tragedy. Iago raged Othello, so he said to Roderigo:

"Nonsuits my mediators. For 'Certes,' says he,
'I have already chose my officer.'
And what was he?
Forsooth, a great arithmetician,
One Michael Cassio, a Florentine... (1.1.15)"
On the other hand, Othello hasn't any reason to not believe his wife Desdemona. She is a smart and a strong woman who has the capacity to fascinate others, and she truly madly loves Othello for who he is. She proves it on the senate floor. She says confidently to her father and a duke:

"That I did love the Moor to live with him,
My downright violence, and storm of fortunes,
May trumpet to the world (1.3.248-250)."
In spite of Desdemona's father content, Desdemona married Othello, so Othello should respect her. She is a sympathetic person. That's why she wants to help Cassio to recover his lost position as Lieutenant.

Otherwise, she wants to see how loves Othello to her. If you will request to your lover some big thing that only can do your lover, your lover will do it; of course you will be satisfied what you can do and how much loves you your lover. Similarly, might be Desdemona wants it. So she asks many times to put back Cassio his old career.

"For if he be not one that truly loves you,
That errs in ignorance and not in cunning,
I have no judgment in an honest face:
I prithee, call him back (3.3.45)."
If Othello loves Desdemona better, he would forgive her. he did not choose evil over good. But we cannot exonerate him. Othello's sin against Desdemona is as heinous as Iago's sin against Othello. Othello proves it with his own words:

"Desdemona: Kill me to-morrow; let me live to-night!
Othello: Nay, an you strive-
Desdemona: But half an hour!
Othello: Being done, there is no pause.
Desdemona: But while I say one prayer!
Othello: It is too late.(V,11,80)"

Writing Feedback / short essay about presidential election, pls help me this essay [NEW]

Why it is important for American citizens to participate in presidential election

First of all I'm not American. I've been living here for two years and half; I don't know much thing about politics in America. I just know America is a huge and powerful country, so American citizens need to choose right person who can control that one great nation and fifty states.

Second, America is one of the most influential countries in the world. If America will go down, most countries will go down too. Example: Recently, many banks felt into bankruptcy in America. It has had a strong impact on other countries. It shows how strong America is. That's why the country is needed a smart president who can lead right the country; it will also affect other countries. So it's really important that all American citizens to participate in presidential election.

Third, America is the most Democratic country on the face of the earth. My first expression of democracy is that all people have equal rights in democratic society. It means all member of society have an access to equally participate in politics and civic life. So all American citizens must vote in presidential election; that time it will show that America is real democratic country.

Finally, this powerful and democratic country's all citizens have to participate in presidential election for their country and other countries. And I want to finish my essay John Kennedy's quote, "Ask not what your country can do for you-- ask what you can do for your country".