Undergraduate / 'the field of biomedical engineering' - UPenn Supplement [8]

It is a good and interesting essay. However, I feel that you could further improve it by adding some information about a specific club at UPenn that intrigues you. Iy would show the admissions that you really did do your research and you have thought of a variety of aspects of the college that appeal to you.

I would also appreciate it if you could read over my common app essay.

Undergraduate / "Don't send me to America!": Evaluate a significant experience [14]

This essay will definitely make an impact!
A few lines could be added that describe a little more about you and your hard-work towards the end. It will really get across more of your character.

Undergraduate / 'Do you enjoy running?' - common app short essay [6]

the essay is okay. it needs gramatical changes as shown by the others above. In terms of content, it needs more substance because it doesnt show why you like running or why it is your passion. also it might be helpful to add your participation in a team like track or cross country.

It would be great if you could have a look at mine!

Undergraduate / 'academic excellence, location, small student body' - Why Tufts? [5]

you could also talk about the jan month where you can travel or pursue something you normall wouldnt have. otherwise its good!

I would appreciate it you could take a look at mine!

Undergraduate / MIT - Personality Essay [4]

I'm going to apologize in advance for being harsh.

The essay itself is good but the personality you show comes across as arrogant. College don't want to learn about how perfect you are or how much better you are then everyone else, thats up for them to decide. They want to see that you are a person and they want to learn about your character, so it pays of to be slightly humble in these essays. I suggest instead of 'perfectionist' you use the world 'meticulous' to show that you want to make sure that you completely understand a concept when learning.

I would also appreciate it you could take a look at mine!

Undergraduate / Common Application Extracurricular activity-Environmental Issues [3]

the transition between your introduction and rest is a bit choppy. maybe consider just 1 question instead of 2. this is good but i suggest you talk a little more about how you have gained from it or what it has taught you.

I would appreciate it you could take a look at mine!

Undergraduate / 'My Carnival Prize' - interests and learning materials [3]

this is good. interesting activity! interms of content you could mention something about what you have learnt form it and how it has helped you. You could say how your approach to certain things changed or something. if you can get a little more across about your character it would be really help you essay.

I would appreciate it you could take a look at mine!

Undergraduate / Celebrate My Nerdy Side! A sneaky prompt from Tufts. [8]

this is nice and effective i like the ending.
"parallel lines are antisocial" this implies that you are also antisocial which may not be the best thing to tell a college admissions officer

also you should make the connection between being nerdy and attending a prestigious new england university clearer.

It would be nice if you could give some criticism on my college essay.