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florazhou   
Apr 22, 2009
Writing Feedback / What essential skills young people should have in our complex society? [14]

Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize - do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there is ...

It is My rework one

2009-4-27 10:27
Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize

There has been much public debate in recent years over what essential skills young people should have in our complex society. Contrary to the opinion of many people that young people should strive foremost for recognition, it is my heartfelt belief teenagers should hone their planning and organizing skills.

To start with, plan and organize abilities help students to master their time orderly and upward their study efficiency as while. A general survey among premium students conducted by officials demonstrates that the skill of plan their time assist them get good mark and still have time to enjoys their interests. For example, when to go to take courses, what time to go to library check out a book and where to see a movie? They all have a weekly schedule. For instance Monday learn Spanish from eight a.m. to ten a.m. Tuesday do exercise in the afternoon with Jim and on the weekend attend a promenade. Everything goes systematically.

Planning and organizing abilities help students to master their use of time, distribute it appropriately among their studies and improve their study efficiency as well. A survey of successful students conducted by school officials demonstrated that those who planned their time well got the highest grades, but still had time to enjoys their interests. Some examples of what to plan would be, when to take the courses, what time to go to the library and check out a book, and what extra time is available to see a movie. All of the successful students surveyed had a weekly schedule. A good schedule example is, Monday 8-10AM, learn Spanish, Tuesday exercise in the afternoon, and Saturday to Sunday attend a promenade. It is important hat everything is done systematically.

In addition, the skills of plan and organize are to young people what the foundation is to a skyscraper, water is to fish; the heart is to a human. These skills teach students know how to communicate with each other, how to work together and how to challenge themselves. the college is going to hold a ceremony. The student who has these capable will to assist the holder to plan and organize this activity He will work with his partner, since they have different tasks, sometimes they will work independently, and sometimes they help each other. During this process they need to communicate with each to complete both of their tasks perfectly. The more frequently they communicate, the more harmonious the relationship between them, and the more things they can learn from this mission. Such as who drew the posters, who contacted the supporters, and who make decision to invite which people. The youth who did not satisfied to be a participant can challenge himself by to be a organizer in this activity.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that the students are the future masters of the world. Only when Only when they have mastered the skills of planning and organizing, can they be confident to say they are fully prepared to manage the world The parents and the teachers should help students to realize the significance of plan and organize, and cultivate them to provide more chances for the young people to practice these abilities. And what is more, the greater these abilities the students have, the stronger a nation will be.
florazhou   
Apr 22, 2009
Writing Feedback / What essential skills young people should have in our complex society? [14]

Dear Michael

Thank you for your suggestion

But without the word "in addition,finally"how can I build a clear structure of an essay?

Thank you !

Dear Kevin

Thank you for your advise.

when I sort through all this, I will repost the essay.

If I do not use the sentence like this "We may point out the astonishing fact that "like this

How can I conduct an Eg without use " for example","for instance" all over my eassy?

Thank you very much!

:)
florazhou   
Apr 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Another school in Washington Personal Statement[transfer] [4]

Hi anella
well I think you have so many sentences start with" I ".I know this is a PS,but them make your essay not coherent very well.

And you need more specific example to show your unique aspect

Good luck
florazhou   
Apr 23, 2009
Undergraduate / Essay for FSU (From Belgium to New Jersey) [6]

This is my viewpoint of the 1st paragaph

My life is guided by multiple values; they are reflected in my every day demeanor. "Vires, Artes, Mores," the Florida State University motto, literally translates into "strength, skill, character." These three Latin words closely denote my personal values. Through personal introspection, I have come to understand how I too embody a strong balance of these values. I possess all three qualities which make me a true FSU Seminole. All three together make me the person I am today.

I had wrote this essay before,good luck!
florazhou   
Apr 23, 2009
Writing Feedback / University students should be required to take history classes - essay [6]

University students should be required to take history classes even they are not part of the field of the study. Do you agree or disagree with the statement. Give the specific reasons and examples to support your position.

There has been much public debate in recent days among students over whether college students should learn history no matter what field they study. Contrary to the opinion of many people that learning history is useless and people should live in the present It is my heartfelt belief that all college students should take history course. Because History enables people to understand the past and help us predict the future.

First and foremost, some minor disadvantages to learn history both of a lack of time and no sense of future life. some college students deem that they are over swamped with their major course, they could not make some time to learn the history class which not have any connect to their future career, otherwise they consider given all the demands that press in from living in the present and anticipating what is yet to come, why bother with what has happen?

Later on even though there may be one or two drawbacks to require all students learn history, the benefit far outweighs them. The history course helps prepare young people for college studies, international experience, and active participation in civic life. It helps get them ready for the roles they will inevitably play as citizens of both their country and the world. For example, how can we evaluate war if the nation is at peace, how can we understand genius, the influence of technology innovation, or the role that beliefs play in shaping family life, if we do not use what we know about experience in the past? The case is not rare, It is typical of dozens I have had concerned

Last but not the least, history education helps us better understand how and why the world got to be the way it is. It gives attention to the histories of nations, civilizations, and other groups and the differences among them. But it particularly emphasizes the history, problems, and challenges that humans have shared simply because they are humans. History course contributes to our cultural literacy. Human beings, unlike other species, have the gift of language, that is, symbolic thinking and communication. Communicating intelligently in any language, whether English, Spanish, or Vietnamese, requires that we share a common fund of knowledge, information, vocabulary, and conceptual tools. We need shared knowledge and understandings partly because we live in a world where people in specialized occupations and professions tend to use special words, terms, and concepts that "outsiders" do not understand.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that University students should be required to take history classes even they are not part of the field of the study. Only through studying history can we grasp how things change, only through history can we begin to comprehend the factors that cause change. While school can provide different level's history course, students can choose what level they interested in.
florazhou   
Apr 24, 2009
Undergraduate / Essay for FSU (From Belgium to New Jersey) [6]

My view of the last para,hope this helps!

"I now know we acquire the strength we have overcome. That is why I believe that the value of "Vires" can best be applied to me. I managed to find the strength in my moral outlook and my destiny of building the character of others. I am not sure where my education is going to take me, but with the strong sense of self I have gained and the drive to help others, I 'm sure I will go far and would love to take the next step by attending Florida State University"

\(^o^)/
florazhou   
Apr 24, 2009
Undergraduate / People face a dilemma where do they get the best suggestion from? [10]

Do you agree or disagree with this sentence?Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than friends with your same age.

First and foremost, It would be possible to take the views that acquire advice from the friends who at the same age is more valuable.The main reason is that the people have similar age they grow up at the same Era background;

In daily life so many problems are worth considering carefully. when people face a dilemma where do they get the best suggestion from? Contrary to the opinion of many people who deem that the best advice comes from friends of the same age, it is my heartfelt belief that getting advice from friends who are older,is wiser.

It would be possible at first to take the view that acquiring advice from friends who are at the same age is more valuable. The main argument is that people of similar age, grow up in the same era and have similar background, so they can communicate and understand each other easily; for example they may have watched the same cartoons, have the same icon, have numerous common topics, even the way they think about the current phenomena are the same. When people ask help for the friends at the same age, It seems to ask themselves, indeed, and the friend just like a mirror, reflect the answer That they are consider about in the deep heart.

Considerable though the advantages that getting counsel from the peer at the same age result in, are they cannot compete with the benefit that obtaining exhortation from the older friends brings about when mature perception and abundantce experience are taken into delibconsideration. He will find out how to refuse others unreasonable demands with leaving no traces, such as help friend cheated on a test, keep one lie to his parents And the across-the-board advice will expand one's horizons and let one consider the problem more comprehensive. For instance, a student could ask his professor, the older friend, which course could he learn more knowledge and obtain a good GPA, in the end of this term.

In addition, iqually important to the ripe inspection is the well-rounded veteran. We may mention a common example of choosing major in the university. this issue is much complicated one, it is determines what the student will learn next four years and what he will do during the rest of lifetime it can be the most significant decision in his life. The major is to college student what the foundation is to a skyscraper, water is to fish, and the heart is to a human. at the cutting age of life the college student should get exhortation from the older friends who have had go through this before, the same-aged friends are fac this dilemma too, the advantage of acquiring advice from older friends went without saying.
florazhou   
Apr 25, 2009
Writing Feedback / Spend more time working hard on jobs or stay with families? [10]

Do you agree or disagree the following statement: it is more important to spend time working hard on jobs than being with families?

In daily life, so many problems are worth considering carefully. when family is in conflict with working. Which one you will pay more attention to and spend more time on? Contrary to the opinion of many people who believe that people should spend more time working hard, it is my heartfelt belief that nothing compares to taking time with families enjoying a cozy afternoon.

It would be possible at first to take the view that the young people should pay more attention to their jobs. The main argument is that the young people are longing for the lead position in their company, such as project manager or satrap. They are eager to obtain the insurmountable achievement in their vocation, because they are young and they have promising futures.For example the discovery of new technologies and exploitation of new medicine saves lives. So they worked through the night and morning, neglects his meals and sleep, and even forgetting their parents' birthdays, they focus on nothing but their career.

Wonderful though, the advantages of spending more time in work may be, they cannot compete with the benefits that enjoying time with families, the importance of communication with families should be taken into consideration.

The more frequently people communicate with the families, the more harmonious the relationship among family members is.The families are the reason why people working so hard, the families are the right ones who can share the happiness and sorrows with and the families are the impetus why the people pursuit the better life. The important of the families to a human can never be exaggerated.

A general survey conducted official demonstrates that the number of autism children have more than tripled as compare with that of last year. Working takes up nearly all daytime of the parents, they devoid themselves to their jobs. After working all day their exhausted and, they don't have any energy to play with their children, even to take care of their children's physical and mental health. So the child stays home alone day by day, he always feels lonely and only can talk with his toy-he does not know how to communicate with others. If things continue like this the child will develop a weak personality. This adversity can be avoidable, if the parents taking more time with their children, the fact may goes to a positive way. so the advantage of spending more time with the families goes without saying.

Although I consent that there may be a few virtues that come with people paying more attention to their career, I feel that the merits of enjoying time with the families are more meaningful. From what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it is more important to spend time with families than working overtime.
florazhou   
Apr 25, 2009
Writing Feedback / Spend more time working hard on jobs or stay with families? [10]

Dear Kevin

Thank you for your advice, but I do not know why this para is a bit jumbled?I just want give some details to explain what kind of the people insurmountable achievement ,they maybe apply themselves to do.Please help me!

I want to know the different between deem and believe,when I put forward an idea

Thank you very much!

This is the new draft
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florazhou   
Apr 27, 2009
Undergraduate / 'in love with the stage' - Common App--Elaborate an Activity [13]

I fell in love with the stage at the age of 13 and have enjoyed every aspect including acting, play writing and directing, but have most enjoyed directing. Director a drama was challenging. I had to orchestrate the whole team and oversee the entire play production, from proscenium to backstage.

Hi,Stefanie
What about give some vivid details?
Like" Music is my passion, my motivating force, and the element that keeps me grounded. Theater is my escape from reality, the chance to be a different person, the chance to shine.Art is a wonderful refined form of expression that has truly shaped my life."

Hope this is hopeful
florazhou   
Apr 27, 2009
Research Papers / Thesis Statement with 3 points (global warming) [15]

Hi hope this helpful!

the reason cause global warming!

Greenhouse gases

zimbio.com/The+Greenhouse+Effect/articles/4/Metha ne+Contribution+Greenhouse+Effect

Ozone depletion
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Global_warming
florazhou   
Apr 27, 2009
Research Papers / Observing or studying animals could teach us a lot about human nature: research [5]

Do you agree or disagree that: observing or studying animals could teach us a lot about human nature.

In daily life so many problems are worth considering carefully. Can we learn a lot of human nature by observing or studying animals? Contrary to the opinion of many people who believe that people cannot learn human instinct from the animals it is my heartfelt belief that, animals are good teachers to human beings.

It would be possible at first to take the view that along with the evolution of human being the weakness of character had changed for the better. Nowadays people become more intelligent than ever before. However, the animals are still low forms of life. For instance human beings have a totally different solution when others provoke them compared with animals. People understand how to sopite the problem in a rational way. Some animals may show their bestial character when other's show hostility to them or they are chasing their quarries. It is their nature, not ours.

I cannot continue!

I need both advantage and disadvantage of observing or studying animals could teach us a lot about human nature.

Thanks!
florazhou   
Apr 27, 2009
Research Papers / Six Characteristics of Life [8]

Hi
Try to use google!

Then list all the elements together to edit them!

Good luck!
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