Scholarship / Need help understanding the questions for a scholarship; AUSAID SCHOLARSHIP [6]

I am applying AusAid scholarship, and writing essay at the moment. There are some questions that I dont understand what the scholarship provider mean.
Please clarify it or me.

the question is
1.What areas can you identify that the applicant would benefit from further development, in order to successfully complete their program?

Thank you
Bee

Scholarship / Community Services Work course ; Australia Scholarship / 3 Responses [2]

I am applying for AUstralan scholarship , It would be great if you could give me on my essay. There are three essay as below, please give me on ideas, grammar strcuture and correct my English as well. Essay number 3, I have made two versions of essay, pleae give me which one is better ideas, and also grammar correction on both.

1. Please provide details and evidence of your service to the community. Unpaid service within your field of expertise, or unpaid community service in outside capacities (Maximum 200 words)

I have involved in variety of voluntary community service work. However, there were two striking programs last two years. First program, I have involved in flooding protection program in 2012. In this program, I took an important role which was the team leader of the young people. My main responsibilities were to ensure the tasks have been done properly. Therefore, I supervised the youth in the team and coordinated with other communities' responsible zone. The main tasks were to place sand bags on Mekong river bank to ensure the water will not overflow into the town and communities near by. Another program was the campaign program named Clean Up Vientiane in 2011.The program aimed to raise awareness of the rubbish storage and separation. I played a role as a voluntary group leader. My main duties were to lead the team to the public place educational institutes namely primary and high schools and university in order to run the campaign and distribute rubbish bags to these public places and households as well. Both programs were the short period of time, but I gained a great experience on working with diverse communities and the importance of team leader role.

2. Summarise in words that can be understood by a person outside your own field, what your proposed study, research or professional development is intended to achieve, why you would like to undertake the proposed program, and how it is related to your prior experience and/or future career goals. Please also provide details, including proposed dates and locations of any proposed fieldwork you plan to undertake as part of your proposed program. (Maximum 300 words)

I selected Community Services Work course as my study program. This program aims to provide skills, knowledge and understanding to work in a range of community support programs and services. This course is designed to address the social, behavioural, health, welfare, developmental and protection needs of the community such as family work, education, youth work, alcohol and drug and, employment services. Graduation from this program can work in the community services sector for government, non-profit organisations and private sector with variety of positions such as community, family support and welfare worker, case manager, program coordinator, support facilitator,

Thank for previous and current working experience that have provided me an opportunity to work on community development projects. Variety of positions from these offices, fieldwork research assistant with Institute of Research for Development (IRD) for the project "Urbanization, governance and health disparities " between 2005 and 2006 and Technical and Social Development Officer and Project Manager with non profit organisation called Institute for Renewable Energy, from 2008 to 2011, have allowed me to see an importance of community work in urban and rural area. This gave me opportunity to travel and see the real situation of development work in many places in the county. In my office, I take a role to coordinate with local community on the impact of the projects and help them to find new suitable location out of projects area. However, lacking of academic background in the field of community development work is challenging for me. Therefore, I want to gain academic background from overseas to fill up with a qualification. On the other hand, I believe that this program will fulfil my career goal which I want to work with international development organisations such as UNDP, UNCEF and Aus Aid in particular.

3. The benefits of the proposed Program for the applicant's home and host country.

The program that I proposed, Community Service Work course, is a good program providing a wide range of community services programs and projects. These projects are embedded in every sector and national wide. Therefore, qualified people from this field would be recruited in any sector where confronts human resource shortage. Additionally, the educated people will bring the language skills and academic skills to the country which would assist this country to work strongly with international development partners such as Aus Aid. Moreover, the community service work is one of development field which Australia has strongly committed for long time ago. Therefore, it will increase an Australian leading role at international level in development domain, and reflect on their commitment on development. Finally, it would be a concrete example for other donor counties. I believe that he will be an asset to your program.

3. The benefits of the proposed Program for the applicant's home and host country.

I think this field of study will be very useful for the country like Laos, because the majority of population relies on the development programs. However, my country does not have sufficient people with an academic background in this study field. People from development programs, they might have skills from work experience, but they do not have the academic background. Therefore, this study program would produce skilled staff for the nation. Furthermore, these skilled people could create number of staff through capacity building program and provide benefits for large amount of people.

On the other hand, this study program would also benefit for the host country, Australia. Firstly, it will increase higher profile of Australian education via productive work from educated people from the country. Secondly, Australia is a one of the main donors conducting several programs or projects in this country. Australian organisations would receive benefits from this program in terms of finding qualified local employees and they would assist theses organisations to run projects more effectively.

Scholarship / Education will bring a bright future; Personal Statement/ Endeavor Award [2]

I am applying Australian awards scholarship, please help me to give any feedbackincluding grammar, ideas and so on.

The question is :
Your statement may detail your personal history, influences on your intellectual development, the educational and cultural opportunities (or lack of them) to which you have been exposed and the impact of these experiences on your proposed program.

1. Please provide a personal statement supporting your Endeavour Award application (Maximum 200 words)

I remember that when I was six years old, my father decided to move from small village in remote area, where high school and health care were not available, to bigger city. He believes that only education will lead to the bright future and improve the quality of life. My father has worked very hard to support children education, however; financial hardship of the family, only a few members went to university.

I have the same belief as my father that education will bring a bright life. I have a dream of working with international organisation, because I believe that it will improve my quality of life. Additionally, good quality of life can help me to support my children for education as my father has done for the family for several years. Therefore, I decide to apply for Endeavour Awards, because it is a good scholarship program, as it is organised in Australia, native English speaking, and high standard universities. I believe that benefits of this scholarship will minimize my language barriers. Importantly, it will increase my profile of education. Therefore, I believe that this program will fulfil my career dream.

Scholarship / No community service work course; SCHOLARSHIP/ Proposed study [5]

Please provide details of how your proposed study, research or professional development will benefit your home and host countries, including potential for ongoing linkages. (Maximum 200 words)

Many study fields provided to students every year in Laos, but there are not yet community service work course, while human resource requirement in this field has increased more and more for national development. Therefore, skilled people from overseas from community service work course could fill the gap of lacking of human resource in this field to help national development projects in both, urban and rural areas in Laos and play an important role in increasing a number of human resources in the study field through capacity building program. Furthermore, counselling skills from this study field will help the country to minimize the social problems, mental health in particular. Besides, the community service work will also benefit the donor country, Australia. Firstly, this program will benefit educational institutions to attract the students to study in these institutions through global professional network of this field. Secondly, the success of program will assist Australian's role in development domain at international stage, as it will illustrate a strong Australian commitment and a leading in high quality education and training provider, and research and innovation. Importantly, Alumni network of this program will be tools to tie the bilateral relations between two countries.