Writing Feedback / Balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential [8]

It is apparent for almost all people that children need to know more and more about electronic gadgets and how to use them as long as they want to keep pace with modern life. On the other hand, some parents are concerned about the way their children are getting used to spend their time with computer and electronic entertainment for the sheer amount of time while they do not even care about outdoor activities. It would be useful if we know more about plus and bad points of both views.

Not being out of touch with modern life, children are supposed to use computer and watch screen media and since they could be really tempting, they might end up working with them for a long time. Meanwhile, schools assign more and more homework that children are not able to do without using computer and it is plain, the more children use computer, the more they become addicted to it.

In contrast, direct exposure to nature and doing outdoor activities are essential for children in order to get to know more about both the environment and how to communicate with other people. In addition, parents should encourage their children to spend some time outdoor, playing with their friends and working out, provided that they are concerned about rise in obesity in their children.

As it was mentioned above, it is clear that parents cannot stop their children using modern gadgets since they live in a modern world. On the other hand, being in society and among other people are crucial for children. From my point of view, parents are supposed to help their children to make balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential.

Writing Feedback / IELTS-Smoking kills and hence should be banned! [5]

IELTS-Task 2-
Topic : It has been proved that smoking kills. In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places except in certain areas. All countries should make these rules. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Probably as everyone knows, smoking threatens both smokers' and second hand smokers' health. Since it is plain for all people how bad smoking is, something is supposed to be done to reduce smoking or at least does not let smokers to smoke wherever they want; therefore the best way to prohibit smoking is to make it illegal for people to smoke in public places in all countries. In next paragraphs I will mention some plus points of smoking ban.

It is clear, the less places be available for people to smoke, the less they could smoke., as they have to find the places which are allowed to smoke in and since they are not able to reach them easily, it is a nice way to smoke less.

Furthermore, seeing smokers can smoke freely even in public places, young people might tend to smoke. Therefore it is actually better for young people, especially teenagers, not to see many smokers around themselves.

Moreover, it would encourage smokers to give up smoking provided that they are restricted to just smoke in limited places.
In addition, non-smokers might not be endangered of respiratory disease as long as they do not be in exposure of smoke; as a result, parents can enjoy going out with their children without being concerned about consequences of being in places which some people smoke. Therefore it should be added that a large number of people are supposed to be in favor of smoking ban since it ensures both their own and their loved ones health.

As it has been mentioned above, there are a huge number of good points in smoking ban since almost all people benefit from it. I personally believe, governments are supposed to make smoking illegal in public places as soon as possible provided that they do care about people's health.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - It's better to learn how to communicate with opposite sex before entering universities [4]

IELTS-Task 2-
Topic : It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Actually, these days, some people think it might be better for girls and boys to study in single-sex classes. In contrast, there are some people who disagree with it. This might be fruitful to know both plus and bad points of these two views.

Studying in single-sex classes, boys and girls, especially teenagers, could concentrate better on their study, as they are at a difficult age which they would be distracted easily by their opposite-sex classmates.

Moreover, since some students live in either religious or traditional families, the parents might be fond of single-sex classes, as they are not in favor of co-educational ones.

On the other hand, some people would believe it is discrimination provided that girls and boys study separately, since both girls and boys are supposed to study equally, therefore it could be better for them to study together in the same condition.

Furthermore, the students who study in co-educational schools can communicate better with their opposite-sex classmates at universities without hesitation, as they got used to study well with them, as a result they neither distract nor find it difficult to study in this situation.

As it was mentioned above, study in both single-sex and mixed-sex classes have some plus points and they both are appealing for different groups of people. However I personally believe, it would be much better for students to learn how to communicate with opposite sex before entering universities, therefore the best way to accomplish it could be study in mixed-sex classes at schools.