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huyenanh1508   
Jun 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY- Graphic describing; Differences of an island [7]

The two maps below show differences of an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Before the construction, there was noone living on the island. Coconut trees situated on the west and north side of the island. Sea covers around the Island.There was a beach, but there was nobody swimming.

After the construction, the island is highly populated. People have also built a pier, in order to improve its tourismus. Now people from the land have the chance to explore a newly founded island. All kind of boats such as sailboats, yachts, ships and so on can anchor on this pier.While staying on the Island, tourists can accomodate in the local hotel and enjoy seafood in the local restaurant. For relaxation purposes, they can swim on the beach, which is not so far away from the hotel.

The economical situation of the island is now improved. This island is not a wild island anymore. The nature here is now being used for commercial purposes from the people. It is now up to the people, whether this island can conserve its good wilderness or not.
huyenanh1508   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Letter to a friend - request to look after my sick dog Pooh [3]

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you're on Holiday. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter :

give contact Details for when you're away
give instructions about how to care for your pet.
describe other household duties.

Dear Ian,
I'm greatly appreciate that you have agreed to help me. I will be leaving on 2nd. Juli, which means a week more from now. My staying in the south of the Country lasts for five days.We can always Keep in touch by using my mobile number in case of emergency.

First, as you know that my dog, Pooh, is sick. He Needs to take medicine once a day after eating lunch. His medicine solubles in water, so this is a very easy mission for you.There is one important thing you must remember, that Pooh only eats and Drinks water from his own bowls, which have Pictures of Winnie the Pooh on them. Moreover, he eats three times a day: breakfast before 9 am, lunch at 12 am and dinner after 6 pm. I have bought enough pet Food for one week, so you just have to pour it onto the bowl for Pooh. Second, Pooh is a trained dog. He knows where his bog is when he Needs to micturate. Then his bog must be cleaned. Last of all, when you go out for a walk or to Drugstores nearby,take him with you. He also needs to excercise.

Now on the household duties. All of the chores have been done. Only when you stay here, you have to Keep it neat. If possible, please don't invite your friends to come over and stay overnight. Otherwise there would be complains from my neighbors about loud noises Problems.

In Brief, I am thankful for your kindness. If there wasn't you, I wouldn't know who to ask for help. Please let me know if you have questions about anything. One last thing: Can you come over this Weekend in order to get to know Pooh and to take the house's key?

Love you
Anh Truong
huyenanh1508   
Jul 4, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'growing concern'; Work or travel for a year beween high school and university [6]

However, I personally believe that should children concentrate on their studying due to the fact that they can have better opportunity to enjoy a better life after graduating when they will have more time to travel from one place to another or do his or her job in an effective way.

when they have more time
huyenanh1508   
Jul 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY: IMPROVEMENTS OF THE TOURISM INDUSTRY [5]

The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last 50 years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it.However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

The tourism industry is one of the most important aspect of the economy.Through tourism,hotels are built,roads are repaired in order to attract visitors. This has created both negative and positive affects to the native country.Personally,I think that tourism brings wealth to the country but also partly destroy its nature.

The most important reason is the tourists' bad behaviors.Young people usually leave trashes everywhere they go.Nowadays these trashes are mostly made of undissolved materials such as plastic of metal, so this not only makes beautiful sightseeings ugly but also pollutes the environment.

A second reason why I am partly opposed to the growth of the tourism industry is that money plays an important role in controlling actions from the government. In a village in Vietnam, thousands hectares of farm were levelled for playing golf. This has caused serious consequences: farmers loses their jobs and the native people do not have enough rice to eat.

On the other hand, tourism also brings wealth and fame to the country. For example: Mallorca is well-known to european citizens for its beautiful beaches. Another good example is Los Angeles. If people want to visit movie studios, the Hall of Fame or to see movie stars, Los Angeles is the right place to go. When they stay at the local Hotels, they have to pay for the services and food, which benefits the country.

However, there are places which are unaffected by tourism such as suburbs, forests or mountain areas. The reasons are :First, these places are dangerous for people.Second, there are not remarkable tourist attractions, where visitors can entertain or eat specialties. In my opinion, improving the tourism industry of one place is not an easy mission.The government must have strategies or plans in order to achieve the goals it wants.
huyenanh1508   
Jul 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY: IMPROVEMENTS OF THE TOURISM INDUSTRY [5]

your writing didnt carry much mistakes but lack the attraction power that must be the real colour. you need to make a bit changes only. if you think you need other peoples' help, this forum, members and moderators can do that. meant not to criticize but to help because i am an ordinary writer myself...!! BEST OF LUCK!! :)

what do you mean by this ?? I don't understand what i have to do
huyenanh1508   
Jul 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / Describe a museum in Iraq [7]

I have visited three popular Iraqi museums twelve years ago

I visited

The three types are popular here

The three popular types are

Visiting museums is important to know more and more about our civilization, history and heritages.

Visiting museums is important because we have the chance to know more and more about our civilization, history and heritages.
huyenanh1508   
Jul 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY : WRITING A RESPONSE LETTER TO A COMPLAIN ABOUT NOISE [3]

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter:
. Explain the reasons for the noise.
. Apologise
. Describe what action you will take


Dear Irina,
I would not know that the noise from my houseflat has caused so many problems if it was not for your letter. Recently my water pipes have broken down. I can not cook or shower because of lack of water. Then I had to call for a plumber. By boring he has found out that too much hair was the reason for the problem.

I have been really cautious about the boring time. The plumber can only bore on weekdays' mornings after nine am and bevor twelve am and evenings after two pm and bevor five pm. If this still disturbed you, I am so sorry about that.

I have intended to replace all of my old water pipes with larger ones so the plumber must work for one more week. But since the noise has caused complaints in the neighborhood, I can tell him that he can only work in the mornings and he has to work for two weeks more. Please understand my situation because this is the only solution to solve this problem.

If you are still not satisfied, please let me know.
Best regards
Anh Truong
huyenanh1508   
Aug 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / GRE Issue:Education institution should dissuade students from pursuing area they ... [2]

There's a claim that suggest education institutions persuade students to chase their studies towards the direction which seems to be more possibility to success instead of those they unlikely to be outstanding

There is a claim that suggests education institutions persuade students to orient their studies towards the directions which seem to have more possibility of success instead of those which give them no chance to be outstanding.
huyenanh1508   
Aug 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay : effects of advertisement on daily life [3]

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really don't need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point do you agree with ?

In modern society, machines work mainly in the production progress and humans only have to control it. Therefore, there are more supply sources than demand on marketplace. To prevent an economical crisis, advertisement was born to encourage people to buy things which are sometimes unnecessary for them.

I was once told not to believe in advertisements because they are not true. First of all, advertisements on TV or images on the streets are always well editted by using photoshop or professional programs before they are represented to consumers. A case in point is clothing advertisements. Beautiful models wear fashionable clothes. Everyone wants to buy these clothes because each style is created for each typical group of customers. Employees in the marketing department are taught how to seduce consumers to buy their products.

Second, in order to avoid products being left in the stock and not being bought, there are methods such as sale-off programs for many reasons: end of season sale-off, sale-off on national holidays... We-customers are always tricked to spend our money more and more.

Advertisements have always been a tool to stimulate consumption but overuse it can lead to serious consequences. For instance, many people believe the effectiveness of some cosmetics brands with the aid of their flawless photos. Their models always have perfect skin, they always look stunning despite their age.But effectiveness of cosmetics depends on its compatibility with the Skin. If the skin and cosmetics are not compatible with each each other, the use of cosmetics can lead to allergie. Another example is medicine. Some medicines are advertised to contain lots of vitamins but in fact they do not.

One way to avoid spending too much money on unnecessary things is to make a list of what to buy before going shopping. Let's together be conscious customers.
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