Writing Feedback / "Why people attend college?" To fulfill their dreams! [3]

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for
example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge).
Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.
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In present society, Colleges and Universities are viewed as an Educational institutes which have proper curriculum and provide educational degrees which are required to pursue future career. Everyone come to college with different needs in mind.

Now days, when companies are receiving myriad of resume for every job position, competition is cut throat and sometime leads to job insecurity. Everyone wants something shining in their resume to make it distinct. Due to this competition, a need to get a decent degree which can secure job leads many people to college. Also, A good degree makes the job hunt somewhat easy. If we observe present trend, the famous courses in colleges are which provide more job security. These courses also provide college placements which attract many people to college.

Apart from degree, some people come to college to do a formal course that can polish their skills. There are people who have double major degrees and still studying another course. These are the students who come to college for knowledge and want to achieve excellence in their field of study. For them, number of degrees is not important, refinement of skills is more essential. These people crave for knowledge and see college as a way to fulfill it. These are ones who become scientist, researcher, ecologist, environmentalist etc.

College education not always relates to job pressure and knowledge builder, for many it is a way to have the experiences different from school. In college, we feel more freedom, meet new people and come to know the different views and prospective. It makes us more update about our society and outer world. Some people attend college to be more aware and to be a part of current culture. These are the people who emerged as Leaders, Poets, Writers, Socialists.

In the end, many people come to college to fulfill their dreams and achieve something in life. For some, the reason is to get a degree and then get a job. For some, it is a knowledge. For some, it is to get the feel of an energetic environment, sense of freedom and to be a part of it.

Writing Feedback / Topic: Books can lead us and give a heads up on some topics [5]

topic :
It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books."
Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

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Books are considered a good source of knowledge. They apprise us about already known facts and concepts. But there are various things for which books do not come very handy.For example, we can't learn swimming by reading it from a book. We have to practice in a pool to get perfect on it. Like swimming, there are many other things which we can only learn by our experiences. And, I think our experiences give us more applicable knowledge than books.

In college, we have books available for every course and have teachers to help us. Still many students, who follow only the books to get good grades, meet failure later in life where their bookish knowledge won't help them in practical world. We have many examples from current world where dropouts from colleges are running big multinational companies like facebook or Microsoft. They don't have a formal degree but they still improvised their ideas through personal experiences.

Nowadays, to make study more applicable, colleges start introducing practical classes in their courses. It's motivating students to do projects and assignments using their own findings and to not completely rely on books for studies. Books can be prove vital in the fields like history, geography etc. where facts are well established and do not change very often. But fields like science and maths where concepts are more intricate and transient, we need to do practical to understand it properly. The students who learn through practicals gain more clear knowledge of academic concepts. It says that Thomas Edison had used and wasted thousands of bulbs before inventing light bulb. This shows how important the personal experiences are.

When we are in job, these experiences serve as a pool of knowledge. Many times at our work, we come across new situations which can not be directly solve using the books so we try to find the solution using nontraditional approaches. Generally in office, we need to complete more work in less time which many times requires out of box thinking which might not be mentioned in books. This is the main reason that people with more years of experience snatch the bigger salary package in corporate world.

Experiences become very vital in management jobs which require daily customer interaction. People in these jobs deal with the markets which change hurriedly and give strict competition. They can't afford to stick to old bookish principles so they keep on evolving their strategies with their fresh experiences. Even federal governments also follow the same kind of plans. They keep upgrading their laws on the basis of experiences and feedbacks they receive from people.

So in conclusion, I think that Books can lead us and give us heads up on some topics but to gain the actual understanding we have to dig the concepts in practical. It is same as we can never learn to ride bike by reading any amount of books. We need to ride it several times before learning it.

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Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] 'Announcement of opening of new restaurant in locality' [3]

It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built
in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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When I heard the news about new restaurant opening in our locality, I was happy and excited because I have already tried all the existing restaurants and tired of going to same restaurants every weekend. But then I thought of other issues that might raise by this announcement those need to be prior resolved.

As I am a food lover, my first response toward this announcement is to first enquire about what's kind of cuisines will they serve. How they will be in taste? Also, my neighborhood has a lot more cafes than the formal restaurants. So, I will obviously appreciate any good restaurant opens near our home, since dining in restaurant much more savory than eating in a cafe. Other from the personal reasons, i think it will also provide jobs to the locals. Students, generally, look for part time jobs during summer so this restaurant might provide them few options.

But there are other big factors as well which can't be ignored. Most important is the hygiene. Restaurant should have good health rating and should fools all the parameters of full hygiene. I I will check it's other branches, if it has any in other towns, to see their hygiene standards before supporting the new restaurant. I will expect from these branches that they should be serving healthy food in clean surroundings with approved health rating.

Mostly people in my neighborhood live with their families so it is very important that new restaurant won't create any kind of disturbance to anyone. It's working hours should not be too late because many families have kids go to school early in morning. Also, crowd come to restaurant should be decent and civilized. Restaurant should not welcome any foul group of people because it will be unsophisticated for the families live nearby. There should not be any kind of noise pollution like loud music and noises due to restaurant.

Restaurant will be equally responsible for preserving the neighborhood so it should apply all majors to keep it's surroundings neat. There should be a proper parking provided to the customers by the restaurant so that they won't crowded the streets with their vehicles.

In conclusion, there are many personal reasons to support the restaurant but there are equal number of caution points which can't be surpass. So, I will support the restaurant only if it shows concerns about the neighborhood worries and respect the surroundings like other locals.

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Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Every experience always gives us something to learn and keep for life [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences
in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for
the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.

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I agree with the statement that our life seems tough at the time but those difficult experiences of life become important lessons for the future. My opinion based on the reasons that Every tough experience makes us more skilled, improves our decision making and makes us more compatible for life.

The best example of it is how babies learn about basics survival habits during their childhood. Every day comes with new challenges for them like walking, eating, etc., but those challenges of their initial life teach them important survival lessons which help them for whole life. For example, when they tried to learn walking, they stumble and hurt themselves many times. But they slowly tune their technique and learned to walk.

All inventions and experiments are based on many unfortunate observations. No known scientist has success in first attempt. Scientists try and test many specimens before they get they want. It was said that Thomas Edison tested around 10000 bulbs before inventing Light bulb. So, all the initial experiments would be difficult and frustrating for him but he searched for more options and learnt new findings with each experiment even when he was failing in his attempts and finally found break through.

Our difficult experiences also make us robust and strong unknowingly. We might be facing a toughest time of life at the time, but when we think back about those moments later in life, we feel more confident about our decisions and about ourselves. When I moved to college hostel after school, first few days were very unsettling for me because first time I was away from parent and staying with people I had not known. I had felt very fragile and emotionally distracted, but then slowly I started adjusting with roommates and built connection with them. I also became more casual and social with others, this experience increased my communication skill and social speaking skills.

Therefore, To conclude my opinion on this statement, I want to mentioned that every experience in life whether it is good or bad always gives us something to learn and keep for life. Good experiences give us good memories and bad ones teach us lessons for life.