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Posts by AbIk
Name: Abdullakh Mansurov
Joined: Mar 17, 2015
Last Post: Mar 24, 2015
Threads: 3
Posts: 8  
From: Uzbekistan
School: MDIST

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AbIk   
Mar 18, 2015
Writing Feedback / Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test other products [3]

Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to
test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments
should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while
others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In our days most medical and other products are tested on animals. Some people dispute that it is not right and desire to prohibit this method. Although others approve these experiments and think that this is advantageous for humankind. In the following paragraphs I shall discuss both opinions with benefits and drawbacks.

First of all, it is said that all experiments are done for welfare of humanity.

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AbIk   
Mar 18, 2015
Writing Feedback / People's activities have been changed as the way of serving food becomes an instant. [2]

it does not need too long time for its preparation
fast food can harm the human bodyhealth
affects to people lifestyle.
use advanced technology to help themthemselves
While in the past to make this dish some people needYou wrote "in the past". After this You must write needed or just remove this sentence

By using the presto cooking tools it help the chef to reduce time for processing the bandeng bones becoming able to eat, namely presto process.With presto cooking tools chef can reduce the time needed to cook this dish and it is called "presto process"

However, changed our behaviour to eat fast food is not always good for our life. getting used to eat fast food can affect our health

It is difficult for many cooker in nowadays cook some food without using monosodium glutamate in order to become more delicious whereas this substance brings many drawbacks to our life. Such as to make slow the children development, to create damage to our brain, and to make many a person become an obesity and cancer disease.In our days it is difficult for cookers to cook meals without for example monosodium glutamate, because it gives dish better taste. Thus, this product has some drawbacks such as retardation in children development and obesity

many people still use it sincebecause this flavour can give delicious taste to fast food.
however the people understand that it contains many poisonharmfulsubstance causing some illnessthat can be cause of healt problems
Hi niddumakhi) You should learn express your thoughts clearer. You can reach this with practise. Also you should at least reduce grammar mistakes. mostly grammar mistakes were corrected. You should avoid repetition! I'll be happy if my suggestions are useful:)
AbIk   
Mar 18, 2015
Letters / The internship in the Human Resources section opens wide opportunities for me [3]

Ability to keep informational confidential ( you should write: ability to keep informational confidentiality or ability to keep information confidential )
Being a leader is to influencing others to attain goals.
means that the person needs to
motivate

I hope I could help you:)
AbIk   
Mar 20, 2015
Research Papers / The impact of sunscreen - what it does after it goes into the ocean? [3]

Therefore , people have to fight against with fierce ultraviolets ( I think you should writehowever instead of therefore)
people's skin will have to suffer the pain ofdue to sunburn that is hurts, itchs and inflames.
sunscreen is linked with skin cancer because it containswith ingredients,
Even so ( I think you wanted to write even though ), its ingredients cause the coastal pollution.
she mentioned that the studies in Switzerland found two chemical ingredients that are spread in cosmetic products are inside the body of fishes.
AbIk   
Mar 21, 2015
Scholarship / Not Going to Give Up - I gave it my all, and my honesty, whatever happens, happens. Scholarship [4]

It has been about three weeks of deleting and rewriting,
The context I gave grown up in taught me that there are a lot of teen moms and drug dealers
I recieved "C" after "C" after "C" ( I think triple after "C" is overdoing)
I am the cashier, as well, as the clothes folder/washer, and night cleaning staff.
might not be the best of Questbridge applicants, but I do have my undying optimism.(can you tell me what it means? I didn't understand)
AbIk   
Mar 24, 2015
Writing Feedback / Nowadays people get married and have children after the age 30. Is it good or bad? [3]

Nowadays people get married and have children after the age 30. Is it positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples based on your experience.

Today it has become popular among people to make a family and have kids after the age 30. This action has both benefits and drawbacks.

[...]
AbIk   
Mar 24, 2015
Letters / I believe that my undergraduate studies have set the foundations for a successful Master [2]

On the one hand, I was delighted to read about the University's Problem Based Learning system which I found that entirely suits my learning habits and, on the other hand, I'm keen to experience the international atmosphere at X University and to be able to connect it to my studies.

I chose to pursue a career in engineering because I have always been interested in structure( I think you meant constructing or if you meant buildings you should write structures), geometry,

Early on in ( you must write neither on or in) secondary education subjects like Physics, Mathematics and Informatics

The faculty I chose was X because it is the best combination of my passion for theoretical Physics with practical application in Informatics.

I learned a lot of interesting concepts about processes, structure and operations of the National Power System.

This experience helped me to realize what I really want, which is to further development of my studies abroad, where I could interact and work with students coming from different cultures and backgrounds.

I am certain that studying two years at X University will be a great opportunity to gain solid knowledge as well asalso valuable expertise ( Did you mean expertise or experience ?)

which are living examples of the art of electrical energy systems, and, secondly, to continue a process of lifelong learning in the field of X.
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