Writing Feedback / Companies should allocate a certain percentage of job positions to women. Do you agree? [3]

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Question as I vaguely remember: Companies should allocate a certain percentage of job positions to women. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

Women, who have been deprived from working in certain fields in our history, have found themselves excelling in different industries today. De-mystified by our current society, females proved themselves to be integral part of any work force conceivable. In light of this, some people suggest that companies must be compelled to assign women to high-level positions - which, according to certain individuals, is a position monopolized by men. However, I sincerely do not believe that this will have a beneficial effect to any parties. This can even negatively affect gender equality as it forces a group of individuals to assume a certain role without considering their own self-determination. On the other hand, education and performance would be suitable gauges in determining who deserves any position - may it be low- or high-ranking.

Gender equality is an ideology that essentially seeks to break limitations set by archaic stereotyping and to provide a society where opportunities of any genders are all equal. Requiring companies would then set a minimum limit of women allowed to work in an institution which in effect, force the society to create a new for of stereotyping: women are required to fill-in a high-level position.

Furthermore, education and proven track record are better criteria in appointing company employees than percentages of any kind. The goal of the company is to maximize its productivity therefore they must choose those who are able to demonstrate great adaptability from extensive knowledge in their field and a discernible past record that shows their excellence, regardless of sex roles.

In an overall perspective, forcing corporations to hire females just because they are compelled to is an offensive gesture affecting not only the company but our society as well. Nevertheless, there are other methods to determine who gets appointed such as educational background and past experiences.

Writing Feedback / Do you agree that women should be given equal chance to participate in the military? [2]

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Women has excelled in so many fields in today's world. They have asserted their competence proving themselves capable of competing with men's best representatives. Politics, science, and academe are some of the fields they excel in. Whist some people disagree with women's participation in the men-dominated army, navy, and air force, I strongly support the argument that they should be given the same chance as men to unquestionably participate in military service.

Our modern world has evolved so much that even in military, physiologic supremacy is an obsolete requirement for soldiers. Varied positions are now available which can be filled in by any qualified personnel regardless of sex. A good example would be piloting drones.

Another argument to assert women's right in participating the army is the fact that women tend to be better organizers than their opposite counterpart. Military is not just about muscles, in fact it encompasses extensive discipline in following strict protocols. A study has proven that women are 20% more likely to adhere with defined standards of their assigned tasks; this is a strong evidence, putting women ahead of the men in terms of service efficiency.

Lastly, cognitive ability is considered an important aspect of military personnel in relation to completing missions requiring extraordinary measures. The latest survey of the Department of Secondary Education has proven that more girls pass highschool competency exams than boys. It would indicate that women are more suitable in military works which need intellectual prowess.

In conclusion, there are so many reasons why women's contributions in military must not be doubted, but praised since they surpass men in some areas in military service.

Scholarship / Primary versus Secondary Education - Advantages of Teaching Foreign Language [4]

Greetings. Please judge me harshly, for my own benefit.

I was asked if the advantages of teaching Foreign Language to students in secondary education outweigh to that of teaching the same subject to students in the primary education. Did I phrase that question correctly? I basically understood it in a way that I have to do a comparison between them and take a stand at the end.

All throughout the human history, Education has consistently evolved in response to our society's needs and resources. One major subject that has been affected constantly by the evolution of education is Foreign Language. Some would question its essence and relevance, arguing that it should be taught before pupils reach secondary school. Though there might be a considerable amount of advantages and disadvantages, I personally believe that Foreign Language can be most effectively taught during primary education.

It can be argued that secondary school students have higher awareness on knowledge consumption making them more receptive in learning new languages. Whilst younger students in primary school tend to be unfocused academically rendering average teaching strategies ineffective. In relation to this, a survey has found in 2014 that high-school students are 30% more focused academically compared to elementary students. This is an apparent disadvantage of teaching Foreign Language earlier than secondary education.

A strong advantage of introducing secondary language to primary students is that linguistic learning happens more effectively during school age. Though focus is not their greatest ability during school age years, elementary students possess juvenile left brain hemispheres capable of picking up new vocabularies. A novel example would be the current phenomena where Filipino kids already know hot to speak conversational English without formal education. Apparently, they have learned that this is an evidence worth noting of.

In general perspective, injecting Foreign Language to the curriculum of either primary or secondary education entails certain positive and negative outcomes. Although, I personally think that teaching secondary languages should happen as early as possible. It is when children are curious and interested with their linguistic abilities.