Writing Feedback / Popularity of London attractions per month in summer 2013 (in thousands) [4]

The graph shows the comparison of London museum visitors from June to September in 2013. Overall, British Museum was the most popular among others. However, the Science and National History Museum decreased steadyly.

From July to August, the British Museum had a significant downward trend from 750 thousands to 500 thousands visitors. It increased again between August and September 2013 to 650 thousands visitors.

From June to July 2013, Natural History Museum decreased from 550 thousands under 400 thousands visitors and between July to August 2013 the Museum visitors was constant under 400 thousands. The Science Museum decreased steadyly from June to August 2013 from 400 thousands to 300 thousands visitors. Both of the Museums visitors grew slowly again in August to September 2013 the National History Museum grew from 400 thousands to nearly 500 thousands visitors and the Science Museum increased from 300 thousands to more than 500 thousands visitors.

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Writing Feedback / Parents less skilled, but are the best teacher, agree or disagree? [5]

Each person has their own opinion about parents are the best teacher or not. Personally, I agree with the idea that parents are the best teacher, because I believe some factors make them are the best.

On the other hand I agree that parents are the best teacher in order to teach daily life activity. For example when I was a kid my parents teach me how to pray, how to take a bath, how to brush my teeth, how to eat by myself, and etc. Parents are more beneficial to help children reach their future.

However, there are some reasons againts previous idea. Firstly, parents are less skilled at teaching skill. In any case, parents usually can present only viewpoint of the world, while good teaching should be based on different attitudes. Secondly, parents can be negative impact to children and some parents also teach children how to commit crime. Many incidents show that children will be thief if they see their parents are thief.

In conclusion, the things we learn from our parents are important to our lives and their contribution are much more important than traditional academic teachers and that's why I agree with this opinion.

Writing Feedback / What do you think about advantage and disadvantage of living in a small community? [4]

In the past, peopl e who live in small community society are peacefull. But, today they are move to the cities and become selfish and not interact with the others.

There is a benefit living in small community. We can learn how to share from the good neighborhood . Just like any others there are many of them like to share foods or experiences. For example the community can make somekind of festival that we can tightened the relation between us. As a result we can live peacefully without any problems. Therefore, make a good relation with them can gain their sympathy so we can ask for help to them anytime.

However, there is a drawback. There is they could not get appropriate formal education because almost all people have to work in farm or field. In many case villagers mostly are farmers. For example a few number of formal schools make it harder for them to get a good education from educated teachers. As a result their track record for some subject are lower than people that lives in the cities. Therefore, proper education is one of the hardest thing to found in small community.

In conclusion, disadvantages and advantages living in a small community are the people viewpoints to get a better quality of life.

Writing Feedback / The graph applicates the gathered statistics of children born by women aged from 40-44 years old [2]

The graph applicates the gathered statistics of children born by women aged from 40-44 years old in Australia. The date is given since 1981 and it illustrates the figure of 1981, 1986, 1996, and 2006.

Overall, the woman who had given birth to three children or more had considerably plunged and mother who had no children were surged each year.

In 1981, four or more infants were born by women with the percentage 27,6 percent but it had downward trend from 1981 to 1996 and finally fell to 11 percent in 2006. Likewise, the maximum proportion of women given birth to three children was 27,4 percent and 27 percent in the year 1981 and 1996.

Furthermore, in 2006 and 1996 more women were give birth two children. It was closely correlative to each other 38,3 percent and 38,2 percent, while 29 percent of women birth two children in 1981. However, the number of women had fewer young children in 1996 and 2006 from 12,8 percent to 15,9 percent, but women with no children decreased slightly from 9,7 percent to 8,5 percent in 1981.