Scholarship / Why Clark? I am already a Clarkie in my dream. [10]

The prompt is: A full tuition, room and board scholarship is a good reason for anyone to have an interest in a college, but what other things about Clark University and about your own personality and values have prompted you to consider becoming a Clarkie? Why Clark? (Word limit is 400)

Is there any grammar errors, uncommon phrases, and tone and style issue? Do you think I can answer to the prompts?

my personality has prompted me to become a Clarkie

Why Clark? Maybe if I spent two thousand dollars and flight to the USA to visit Clark campus, talk all day with the current students to get a sense of "an engaged learning community," or what it is like to experience LEEP at Clark, which liberal education I cannot get from my country, I would give a really strong answer to this question. Sometimes, I frustrated for the fact that the school that I want and the place that I now live are isolated by two oceans, Atlantic and Pacific. Maybe if I dig through the earth, I would land more easily at Clark or If I had a flight superpower like John Hancock, I perhaps would be writing this essay next to the Freud statue on the Clark campus, one of the few people that I admire. Unfortunately, I haven't born with this power but a power to dream. I dream of Clark that I am talking all nights with my roommate, writing a paper on macroeconomics for Econ Class, studying the relationship between psychology and economics, and working on a project with my professors. I dream that I am spending my leisure time, seeking adventure, playing club soccer and conducting the Spectator, a mutual improvement club for a wide range of knowledge. I dream from trivial to impossible as if I am there, feeling everything with my heart and five senses. As a result, my friends often call me an idealist. However, I believe that both idealist and dreamer are able to imagine an outcome that is better than anything otherwise conceive of. It is true that sometimes their ideas are impractical, but the ability to recognize an outcome is the first to making it possible. Even when their projects scatter in front of their eyes, they move forward to the best so they embrace the challenges. They also impact the community with their fresh perspective, question the reality, and act on their insights, and therefore, they change the world for goodness. I am already a Clarkie in my dream, and that is my personality that has prompted me to become a Clarkie.

Undergraduate / The idealist perspective. Why do you think Earlham is a good fit for you? [4]

The word limit is 200. And EPIC is The Earlham Plan for Integrative Collaboration. what do you think about this essay? Thanks in advance.

An idealist full of ideas

"What we call a person who has a full of ideas and passions to make a change but their ideas are impractical?" my friend asked me sarcastically even though he knew that he was talking about me.

"An idealist," I said
Is being an idealist a bad thing? I don't think so. I believe that idealists are able to imagine an outcome that is better than anything otherwise conceived of. It is true that sometimes their ideas are impractical, but the ability to recognize an outcome is the first to making it possible. Even when their projects scatter in front of them, they already start to see new ways of doing it. They are also leaders of a community because they can question the reality and sees how the world could be made better, and therefore, an idealist changes the world.

Earlham values the idealist perspective and helps their ideas become a tangible outcome in or out of the classroom. This is why Earlham is a perfect fit for me because I hope that I can contribute my "idealistic" ideas to EPIC collaborations so that creating a more diverse community to view significant national and global challenges of the 21st century from a different perspective.

Undergraduate / For aliens, my life may seem like a dead plant. [12]

Please respond to the following prompt. Your response should be 250 words or fewer.

sweet onions

One thing Walla Walla is famous for is sweet onions - they're not only tasty, but also multi-layered. What's a layer of your life not highlighted in your application that would add to Whitman's community?

Can my essay relate to the prompt?

I grew up in a small town [name of the town], which is the (country subdivision) of (country Province) in western (country). With a population approximately 2000 people, only one authority department, one kindergarten, and middle school (kids go to [country Province] for secondary education,) and five grocery stores satisfy all the demands of inhabitants. My home was located at the center, and our building was a traditional apartment with no central heating. When my parents went to their jobs in the morning of cold winter, I was left alone in a bed. Getting up, I fired the chimney with coal to warm the freezing room. While I was running to the well to get water in two 25litr small canisters, people from ordinary citizen to the mayor of town greeted with my full name. Getting back home, I made a tea for my parents with the fresh water that I got from the well. Then, the complete silent covered the entire town while I was going to school.

For aliens, my life may seem like a dead plant. However, the reality is an exact opposite of it. Most of the time, I got outdoors, playing football on the street and feeding the appetite for fun. Having limited materials and places to go, I used my imagination to know the world that I see. Learning to entertain myself with from dull tasks such as chopping wood to intense works such as walking one kilometer with 50-liter water in canisters every day taught me the importance of enjoying "the present."

Undergraduate / An unknown place, where I was born. Writing Cornell supplement essay. [5]

Why are you drawn to studying the major you have selected? Please discuss how your interests and related experiences have influenced your choice. Specifically, how will an education from the College of Agriculture and Life Sciences (CALS) and Cornell University help you achieve your academic goals? (Please limit your response to 650 words.)

Returning to Jargalan

I was grown up in an unknown place. There is no information on Wikipedia - except (here is little starting information about the place I was born) At 3683 square kilometers with a population approximately 2000 people, (the born place) is one of the smallest subdivision of (Country). My parents, grandparents, and relatives have been living there for their whole lifetime as a half-nomadic, a lifestyle in which economic activity is based primarily on livestock. Returning to (the born place) to visit my parents, I was taken by my uncle, who lives twenty kilometers away from the sum, to his home.

Dawning was taking on the mountain as we rode on a motorcycle. We were heading to the east on the earth road. Whenever we encountered with small rocks, we bounced like a ball. The smelling of dust, mud, and the marsh made my stomach sick. And when we finally passing over the marsh, the soft rain dampened us. We continued rolling with a crazy speed of an 80km per hour, but the endless steppe seemed too big and too far to cross.

As overwhelming as the steppes, my mind was occupied with the lives of people like my uncle. The structures of nomadism are barely changed from that of the ancient times. A herder owns a horse, sheep, cattle, camels, and goats and travels regularly for foraging grass. Running into diseases of livestock that the nomads have no resistance or into climate change which kills livestock entirely are the most difficult conundrum. Health, education, and information services are still unchanged from what they were like decades ago. In addition, every year I see hundreds of poor parents selling their entire livestock to educate their children in Ulaanbaatar who in return have no job to support his parents and even themselves with their college degree. Wool is only the "gold" because it is used to produce cashmere to be exported. Milk, meat, and other goods are abundance, but their productivity is far below efficiency. Because there is no sustained growth of income for rural people, migration from rural to urban areas has increased dramatically last decade for the desire to obtain access to better social services, particularly health and education, causing the crowd in the city.

Still, we have 60 thousands of livestock wandering on the steppes for four seasons, and approximately 35% of the workforce today is directly dependent on the livestock sector. Despite the abundance of resources and employment, it has been a decade since our government has overlooked its development. "Should we get rid of the rural life?" or "Is there a solution to lead this unique lifestyle to the prosperity?" I want to ask from everyone.

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Undergraduate / To save money. Writing on the explanation of a gap year in commonapp's additional info section. [13]

Hello everyone, Thank you to anyone reading this. I omitted some names for privacy issue. Also, I have already written about how the gap year and learning English affected me on my personal essay. So in this explanation, I tried more to shed a light on why I took a gap year and what I accomplished and get benefits. As such, I'm not too confident about my explanation's content, style, tone, and grammar.

Starting from here------> Additional Information on a gap year

I took the gap year AFTER graduating high school.

Graduating my high school in ____, I was then accepted in (finance school in my country). At the edge of seventeen, however, I had no idea what I want to do in rest of my life. Getting into finance school seemed as if I got in because my parents value the economists as a substantial money earner. So I decided to take a gap year in order to get the increased ownership for my own life-direction. Had been trying to "good" student my whole life, I wanted to make my own decision and build my own life. Also, even though my parents were willing to pay my finance school's tuition, they were actually stretched financially by working tirelessly to fund my siblings' education cost-XYZ studying in A university and XYZ studying Master degree in B university at the moment. Putting my college degree aside for a moment, I thought, I could be of great assistance in supporting my family's financial burden.

From the start, I wanted my gap year to facilitate growth and progress on myself instead of to harness life skills such as working and saving money or experience adventure such as traveling. I thought my journey to inside me would help me not just improve myself but also more successful in my future careers.

I set a goal to master English that I couldn't make it enough during the gap year. As my skills increased gradually, then I was exposed more to the new world filled with an abundance of information and opportunities. For example, attending the conference of the former USA school alumni talking about how they studied at their school, I discovered my new desire to pursue my undergraduate degree in the USA to experience liberal education.

The gap year also gave me many opportunities that I'd have never experienced if I stayed in the school. As soccer enthusiast, I spent three months participating in the conditioning program at ____ with professional players under professional English manager_____. I have also created my own club the Spectator, a mutual improvement club for students who are passionate about being Versatilist but in my country, they couldn't make it because of the inflexible school system. I also volunteered in ________ and met with many new people come from different background. All these experiences have helped me to grow as an outgoing person who has found his voice, appreciated teamwork, understood different perspectives, and welcomed high-level responsibilities.

Please see my essay to know more about how my gap year experience affected me.

Other gap year benefits

ˇ Gained immersed linguistic experience.
ˇ Go to college with a purpose, not arbitrarily because it is what society recommends.
ˇ Identified and eliminated interests to best direct a major study that results in a deeply invested college-to-career future.
ˇ Evaluated personal values and identified my own 'best' way of living.
ˇ Explored comfort zones and myself by doing something challenging. Pushing comfort zones allowed me to better understand myself and truly know what I am capable of.

ˇ Creative problem solving as a form of taking any challenging situation and turning it into an opportunity
ˇ a profound contribution to my personal development.
ˇ Owned the increased responsibility for my deeds
ˇ Highly motivated, self-driven new friends and acquaintances