Writing Feedback / Comparison of the society growth and urban areas [2]

The line graph illustrates society growth from 1800 to 2100, and the bar charts measure the population of urban in developed and developing areas. Overall, the highest world society on global and developing regions in 2040. However, the developed regions more or less stable.

In 1800, the number of society stood at 1000 millions of people and increased gradually until 1960. Moreover, it had inclined dramatically to 8000 millions of people in 2040. Then, the graph experienced decreased in the following six decades from approximately 8000 to 6500.

On the other hand, figure of the developing regions populations started at more or less 2300 millions of people and steadily inclined until 2040 with an increase less than 500 millions of people per years.

Despite, Developing areas and Global population have the same peak in 2040, their are different of the number of started point and at the end of the period. Furthermore, the developed countries had the same number at approximetely 1200 between 2015 and 2040.

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Writing Feedback / Mothers in Australia over forty years old. Essay Writing task 1 [5]

The table report the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia from 1981 to 2006. All in all, it can clearly be seen that the women did not had baby and the women had one child also the women had two children were an increase in all of period. However, the women who delivere baby at three and four or more children had decrease in all of period.

In 1981, the women who had two children saw the highest proportion at just above 25% every year, whereas female who had one child and the women who did not have a child showed a gradual increase at less than 16% in all years. Furthemore, it was clearly seen that in the end of period, in 2006, female who borned 2 children reached a peak at 38,3%, while both of women who had one child and women who did not had a child witnessed a good performance in the end of period at 13,2% and 15,9% respectively.

In 1981, the women who ever born three, four and more children had a decreased trend. In starting point, The women had a three and four or more children had a relatively same proportion for above 27%. Nevertheless, the women had a three childrean in every periode from 1981 to 2006 gradualy increase from 27,4% 27,0%, 24,6%, to 21,5%, while the women had a more three children significantly decrease from 27,6%, 18,9%, 13,1% to 11,o%.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 The Pie Charts represent the precentages of changes in the annual dependents [3]

The Pie charts represents the precentages of changes in the annual dependent such as Higher Education, Transportation, Environmental Services, K-12, Health and Human Resources and Others by local government in several lands between 1980, 1990, and 2000. All in all, higher education was the highest precentage from start point until the last period. However, others in the following years significantly decline.

In 1980 until 1990, higher education was the highest precentage from 35% to 45% and at 2000 decreased became 40%. Transportation in 1980 was 16% and decreased became 6% in 1990, but in the end period was increase became 22%.

Every periods, environmental services always increased respectively from 4%, 5%, to 9%. K-12 Education had a decrease trends in every years, from 25%, 20%, to 18%. Health and Human Resource had a some trends with higher education that increased in the middle years from 14% to 20% and decreased at the end period became 10%. In 1980, others was 6% and the following years decreased from 4% to 1%.