Writing Feedback / [TASK 1] Changes planned for a town center. [2]

the town center will witness a few more improvements

Question: The maps below shows the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its developments

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The diagrams illustrates some changes planned for the center of a place named Islip.

It is clear that the town center will undergo significant renovations and five new features can be seen in the second diagram. The main developments are that people living in Islip's town center will benefit from more infrastructure and the transport will be more convenient.

Looking at the maps in more detail, we can see that the shops in the north of the area are expected to be knocked down to make room for several new buildings including a bus station, a shopping center and a car park. Other physical features that will be added to the place are two housing complexes. One is anticipated to be built near the car park in the north-eastern area. The other will be constructed near the park which will be considerably narrowed.

As well as the new developments mentioned above, the town center will witness a few more improvements. Specifically, the main road will serve pedestrians only. Besides, the residential area in the middle of Islip will be relocated to the south-west. Finally, the countryside will be erased to make way for a dual carriageway which will separate the area from the school and the accommodation infrastructure near it.

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Writing Feedback / [TASK 2] Being friends with colleagues or not? [4]

Question: Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life. Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:

social life inside or outside the workplace

Whether social life should be built inside or outside the workplace is questioned by many. While some claim that being friends with individuals they do not work with is a better choice. I would argue that the profession that a person chooses can offer them both financial support and countless opportunities to develop their social relationships.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why a few individuals think that social life should be built with people who work in a different organization. Firstly, being acquaintances with ones working in other fields might broaden a person's knowledge that possibly help them resolve a number of their problems at work. For instance, a teacher can learn how to deal with disruptive kids effectively by asking for advice from a friend who is a child psychologist. Additionally, social relationships developed outside the workplace tend to last longer than those developed inside. In other words, since many employees have difficulties working in harmony with their workmates due to peer pressure, it is challenging for them to maintain purely true friendships. Therefore, by building social bonds with someone not employed by the same firm, people might avoid unexpected competition at work in terms of chances for promotion and distribution of responsibility.

On the other hand, it is my belief that not only does an occupation bring people financial stability, it also allows them to benefit from the social contacts developed gradually overtime. To begin with, it is an indisputable fact that most individuals obtain financial security from working. In fact, the money that a person receives on a monthly basic enables them to cover their daily expenses as well as improving their living standard. What is more, workplace friendships can either enhance a person's working productivity or contribute positively to his career prospects. That is to say, as friends at work often know each other's strengths and weaknesses, they can provide feedback and even recommend them for more promising jobs at other corporations.

In conclusion, while there are reasons why people should better have social life with ones outside their workplace, I believe that the job a person does can support them financially and more importantly, bring them fruitful relationships.

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Writing Feedback / [TASK 1][CAM 12-TEST 8] The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity [4]

geothermal energy as a base for the new electricity

The diagram illustrates how electricity is produced by using geothermal energy.

It is noticeable that there are five major stages in the process of manufacturing electric power, from cold water to the electricity that is used everyday by people all over the world.

At the first step of the process, a certain amount of cold water is pumped down into the earth at a depth of 4.5km. After that, it is put through the injection well then the Geothermal zone which contains hot rocks. In the next stage, the water continues to be passed into the production well and becomes hot water which is pumped up to the condenser.

The process begins with hot water being condensed to turn into steam. Following that, the steam has to go through a machine where it is rotated in a turbine and then generated to produce the final product which is the electricity.

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