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MelindaLinda

Sep 19, 2017

Writing Feedback / Clear indicator of a great nation is the common well-being of all its people. [3]

@nikhiltinder

1) "Great is a term depicts...": it should be "a term which/that depicts"
2) "general citizen": it's "general citizens" (plural)
3) "there is a castism": there WAS a castism (you're talking about BEFORE 21st century)
4) "scientist, artist..": use plural
5) "with the every citizen of the nation": "the" isn't necessary
6) "by cherishing its people and take care of them": "and TAKING care of them"

MelindaLinda

Sep 19, 2017

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 - Debatable Issue of Genetic Engineering [5]

@ditoaji
You have introduced your opinion in the beginning of your essay, but you haven't expanded it at all. You have just discussed the two sides presented in the task.

MelindaLinda

Sep 13, 2017

Writing Feedback / The methods used by three countries in order to deal with harmful waste products [3]

dealing with chemicals

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries.

The charts illustrate the methods used by three countries (Republic of Korea, Sweden, the UK), in order to deal with harmful waste products.

Overall, it is observed that hazardous waste products in Sweden and the UK are mostly buried underground, as opposed to the Korean Republic, where the majority of them are recycled.

In detail, underground burial of dangerous waste products accounts for 82% in the UK and 55% in Sweden. With regards to alternate ways, 25% of Sweden's harmful waste products are recycled, while the rest 20% is destroyed by fire. As for the UK, 8% of its hazardous waste products are either thrown into the sea or treated with chemical methods, whilst a mere 2% goes through incineration.

Turning to the Republic of Korea, more than half of its harmful waste products are recycled, whilst 22% of them are buried in the surface. Additionally, a smaller portion of 9% is burnt in flames.

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MelindaLinda

Sep 13, 2017

Letters / The quality of a reference letter addressed to the Chevening Scholarship [4]

@Anwar Al Behadil
I think "by his passions" should be "by his passion" (singular) and "for his being" should be "for him being". I can't see any other errors in this letter

MelindaLinda

Sep 13, 2017

Essays / What will you contribute to YYAS community Essay [4]

@jason321
You could paraphrase the prompt. Write it in your own words, without changing the meaning

MelindaLinda

Sep 12, 2017

Writing Feedback / The plans for a school's development within a 20 year period - diagrams/maps [2]

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

School in the past and in the future

The diagrams depict the plans for a school's development within a 20 year period, 2004 to 2024.
Overall, alterations have been scheduled regarding the number of students, the buildings, the parking lot and the road, which will be increased. Contrariwise, the size of the sports field will be significantly smaller.

In 2004, the school consisted of two school buildings, separated by a path. On the north east side, there was a large sports field, while a parking lot and the main entrance can be seen on the north west. Additionally, a road on the south west led to the entrance and the parking area, whilst a considerable part of the site was covered by trees. The school was attended by 600 students that year.

Compared to the initial form of the school, an additional building will be constructed on the north east side of the other two buildings, while the size of the path will be smaller and will connect the first with the third building. One more parking station is planned to be made besides the third building, in conjunction with a longer road linking the two parking lots. As opposed to the mentioned developments, the sports field will be relocated to the north east side of the second parking and its shorter size will make space for more trees. Furthermore, the number of students will rise to 1000 in 2024.

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