Writing Feedback / A situation of the government schools and their students [2]

Hello everyone,

While I start my topic, it is a request to correct my sentences and not just how should the essay/topic be. This is because telling me how an essay should be written will not tell me how should my sentences be. I hope you can understand.

the condition of the education

In general, In most of the governments schools, you may not find all teachers available for their respective classes to teach the students. Generally, the students do a self study and pass the exams. One of the reasons that the teachers don't take the classes is because the students are not interested, however, it doesn't make sense at all.

Based on the interest the teachers and the staff has to teach and guide the students, mostly students waste their time in useless things or bunk the classes. They are unaware of the consequences they might face in the future. Just because 2-3 periods were taken by the teachers everyday, the students cannot afford to attend 7 or 8 periods in a day in the school. sometimes when the principle becomes very strict and pressurizes the teachers to take the classes, in such cases all 7-8 periods are taken by the teachers and as a result, students gets exhausted. They feel like they have no energy left in them and they don't want to listen a single word related to study after the school is over.

They are very energetic when it comes to sports or any sport's competition. They just don't want to spend much time in study but you can ask them for any sports or games, they are always ready for that.

When it comes to a government schools, the first thing that comes in everybody's mind is that the student of this school would certainly not be a sharp student in study. He/she would definitely not know good english and would hesitate to face the public if a situation arises. As a matter of fact, this is not their fault. The people have such mentality about them because of the school environment. They teachers neither pay the required attention on students nor they involve them in such activities that they can speak in front of anyone confidently.

The only thing they get is the school. They can tell anyone that they go to school and they have their report card so that they can go for their further studies.

Kindly mention the wrong sentences and then yours with the correction if required.
Thank you so much.

Writing Feedback / One who pretends to be a friend but he/she is not, so called a fair weather friend [4]

Please make a required corrections, so that I can construct my sentences in a more correct way.

what friendship means?

You might have seen various types of friends i.e., close friends, best friends, hi-hello friends and so on, however, there are few who pretend to be a good friends but in reality there are not. It is better to have an enemy than a foolish friend, because you are sure that if you encountered with an enemy, he will try his best to harm you, however, you never know when your foolish friend can harm you or put you in a serious situation due to his foolishness. Similarly, one should also restrain himself/herself from a fair weather friend.

One of my friends told me a story about his best friend who studied together with him since childhood. He told me that he had always been very helpful to his friend. He would correct him whenever he saw him making any mistakes, told him the dressing style, called him his home as he was a part of his family and whenever he got anything new, he shown that to his friend first, in fact he gifted him things from his saved money.

Things were going fine, there were no conflicts between both of them. My friend told me that one day his friend told him that he bought a new plot and he would make a four story building on it and out of four, he will gift one to him. He just heard him saying it and then started talking other stuff.

As the time passed, my friend got married and then his friend after 2 years of his marriage. My friend would live in a joint family. One day, my friend's father decided to build home in a way that each of his brothers including him can have one single flat/apartment so that they can live comfortably, however. his father put a condition that he will only build up the structure of the building and rest everything will be done by an individual.

As the offer was quite decent, so all his brothers agreed to it, however, my friend was quite financially week, it was almost impossible for him to spend 3-4 lack rupees to complete his flat/apartment.

He tried his best and invested all he could to complete the flat/apartment, however, he would still need a big amount to complete it. He then decided to take a help from his friend and hence requested to lend him some money. To be specific, he requested to lend him 1 lac rupees for which his friend denied. He said that he could only lend him 50,000 rupees and not more than this, even a penny.

My friend agreed to it but forgot to inform that he would require some stuff from his shop while fixing doors and windows at his flat/apartment. Anyways, the time came when my friend needed some stuff from his shop as he had no money to buy those things. He went to his shop and gave a list of items he needed and his friend also gave all those things to him thinking that he would pay him for all the stuff he bought today or by the end of the day today, however, when my friend reached his shop in couple of days, he said that I could lend him only 50,000 rupees and the things you bought from me were not included in it. He said all this in a very rude way which no best friend could ever said to his/her best friend.

Just to inform you that his friend who lent him money is quite rich, he has multiple plots, own shop which cost around 20-30 crores and so on.

He made my friend realized that friendship has nothing to with money and money is more important than his friendship. Though there is a verbal bond between both of them that his money will be payed back within a specified time and he was fully aware of his situation that how financially week is my friend. He also knew that my friend's wife works a lot in a joint family and it wold be the best option if they get separated, however, he still suggested not to have doors and windows in the apartment/flat, just live on a rough, raw floor and when you get money with the time, build it.

So, from my understanding, he can never be a best friend nor so helpful. Keeping the fact that my friend has given him a sense of how to live a life and imparted knowledge as per the phase of life they went through can never be compared with money that he tried to be rude with.

Kindly correct me wherever I made a mistake in forming the sentences. Thank you so much for your help.
(Tanveer).