Writing Feedback / Could taxation decrease fast food consumption? - IELTS - Writing Task 2 [2]

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

higher taxes on fast foods?

In the Western World, the percentage of diseas caused by unhealthy food habits is constantly increasing. The development of fast food chains has worstened the situation, creating the need for governments to do something to solve the issue. Some people, for instance, believe that an increase in taxes for this type of food will help. However, I do not agree since there will be a scarce impact on fast food consumption.

Firstly, it is necessary to analyse and identify which are the drivers that influence the choice between healthy food and fast food. For example, people often prefer to eat fast food to save time and not to save money. Consequently, an increase in price would not affect their choice. Instead, if people could find restaurants selling healthy food, such as vegetables and fruit salads, ready-to-eat and available for take-away, they would prefer this kind of food rather than hamburgers and fried chips.

Secondly, an higher taxation on fast food would be perceived by only a small portion of population. A full lunch at McDonald, for example, costs around 8 euros in Europe and even if the government will increase the price of 20%, it will cost less than 10 euros. Also people with a low income will consider this price as affordable and in any case cheaper than the usual price for a lunch.

To sum up, I do not believe that an higher taxation on fast food will help governments in decrease disease due to the scarce impact that the change in price would have on people's nutritional decisions.

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Writing Feedback / Passengers on London Underground per hour, from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. - IELTS Task 1 [2]

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

My answer:

The graphs shows the number of passengers in the London Underground Station per hour, from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. It is easy to see that there is quite e great variability of passengers' flows.

During the day, there are two peak of affluency, at 8 a.m and at 6 p.m, where the number of passengers is around 400 per hour. On the opposite side, it is possible to identify the lowest levels, with only 100 passengers, at the beginning of the underground service at 6 a.m and at 4 p.m. Moreover, looking at central hours of the day, from 9 a.m to 3 p.m, the numbers of passenger fluctuates between 200 and 300. Finally in the evening, after 8 p.m, flows are stable between 100 and 150.

To sum up, the number of passengers at the London Underground Station varies, on average, during the opening hours, from 100 to 400, with some peakes related to office-hours.

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Writing Feedback / Pollution and countries development - IELTS - Writing Task 2 [4]

development correlation with environmental issues

"Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from the way that many countries are developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree?" (min 250 world)

In the modern world pollution is a relevant issue that affect both environment and our health. The issue has been largely debated among civilized countries since it is always has been linked to the industrial development. Indeed, some people believe that this is an unavoidable consequence of progress.

On the one hand, it is certainly true that pollution historically increased in countries that have experienced a growth. For instance, the 18th century Industrial Revolution in Europe was remembered not only for the increase of average population income but also for the increase of breathing deseas due to air pollution. Looking at more recent example, China has experienced a double-digit growth in last years but in parallel it has been considered the primary responsible for the ozon hole in the second millenium.

Nevertheless, it is important to not forget what innovation has done for improving the condition of polluted air, water and soil. Indeed, if it is possible now to drive an electric car, to have biodegradable materials or to produce energy with wind it is only thanks to the development in richer countries. Therefore, there are now some countries, such as Norway or Finland, that could be considered among the richest of the world but that register low levels of pollution.

All in all, I believe that even if the past development was always correlated with increasing environmental issues, now it is possible to put in place some actions to this. However, this will be possible only with collaboration among countries already developed and developing countries: the former should made available new technologies to the latter.

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