Writing Feedback / The chart below give information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010. [2]

education levels by genders and age range

The bar chart and pie chart illustrates the percentage of education levels by genders and age range in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010. The information is provided surrounding three different education levels are University Degree, School Certificate and No Qualification.

Overall, the age groups embrace an aggregate of University Degree's education level in the bar chart was primarily colossal of five age items. Furthermore, University Degree has a massive number of majority proportion from 21 to 35 age range (76%). In addition, there is a subtle difference between Scholl Certificate and No Qualification at over 75 age. Slightly more people who were without certificated than men and women have a diploma in school( 72% and 3% respectively).

In terms of School Certificate, out of the five age ranges, in each proportion from 16 to 75 age ranges which have slightly fluctuated 15% and 20% respectively. Moreover, it has corresponded percentage of both genders (33%). Compared to, No Qualification's aged 16 to 50 was one and the same percentage is 9%.

Regarding the pie chart, No Qualification has the highest percentage of educational certification that any genders were achieving with all age.

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Writing Feedback / The given figure shows the birth rates during the period from 1920 to 2000 in China and the USA. [2]

birth rates in china and usa

The figure is given shows the birth rates during the period from 1920 to 2000 of China and the USA.

Overall, the fertility of the USA was highest in 1950 reaching a peak of 15 per cent compared to the rate peak at the same rate in China in 1935. In addition, both nations saw considerable fluctuation that also has sharply decreased since 1960.

The birth rates of China was dramatically decreased from 1935 to 1940 (15% and 5% respectively) compared to from 1940 to 1945 in the USA was plunged to low of just 5 per cent. On the other hands, China's birth rate was not changed at 5 per cent. Both in the USA and China was followed by a period of exponential growth in 1950 (20% and 15% respectively).

In contrast, since 1950, China fell abruptly the next five years to under 10 rates, whereas, in the USA was sharply decreased to under 15 rates.
A glance at the graph provided reveals some striking similarities from 1960 to 2000. Furthermore, the birth rates of both countries have fluctuated between 5 and 10 respectively since 1970. The fertility's lowest in China was becoming less than behalf of 5 per cent in 1980 and 2000. (206 words)

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Writing Feedback / [Task 1] The following tables show the average age of students at a college. [3]

correlation of certificate and diploma with student's age

A glance at the table provided reveals a number of the average age of students at a college is different between the certificate and diploma.

Out of the five ages, the highest percentage on certificate and diploma belongs to the student's age from 15 to 25 and from 25 to 35 respectively. Furthermore, the age of both proportions have the lowest percentage is 45 and over.

Regarding in the table, the percentage of students have aged from 15 to 25 with certificate education is scrutiny higher than other on the same proportion compared to the diploma, simultaneously, diploma education has highest from 25 to 35 than others its level( 79% and 62% respectively). Both the certificate and diploma have fluctuated between 17% and 18%.

In terms of the certificate, the percentage of student's age from 35 to 45 is 1% on this as opposed to exactly 2% at 45 and over. On the other hand, the diploma has massive rate fluctuation between 35 to 45 and more than 45 age group of students at a college(20% and 1% respectively). (179 words)

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Writing Feedback / The table reveals the threefold of national consumer expenditure category [2]

CONSUMER SPENDING IN SOME EUROPEAN COUNTRIES

The table below gives info on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table reveals the threefold of national consumer expenditure category that was spending to the different countries(Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, Turkey) in 2002. Regarding the table, the value of food, drunk, and tobacco made up an overwhelming majority of the category.

Overall, the leisure and education's value was lowest and did not exceed 5,00%. Spain with the lowest percentage is 1,98%. Turkey is the country with the highest percentage in this field is 4,35%. In terms of the source of the table information, Italy was predominantly expenditure (9,00%) in clothing and footwear as opposed to other countries, meanwhile, which have not fluctuated over 1%.

It is evident from the information provided that Turkey and Ireland had far the high number of food, drunk, and tobacco as the preponderant supplier and made up 32,14% and 28,91% respectively.

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