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Name: Nguyen Vuong
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Last Post: Jun 16, 2019
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nguyenvuong   
Jun 16, 2019
Writing Feedback / Investing on the arts is a waste of money - Agree or disagree? [3]

debate over financing the art projects



Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?


Recently, there has been a debate over whether governments should finance art projects because investment in this field is thought to be not paying off. As a citizen, I strongly disagree with the statement that investment in the arts is just a waste of money.

First of all, arts in general have always been an significantly important part of our lives. Arts are not merely entertainment. They embody the wishes and hopes that we otherwise could not express in any other ways. Music, for example, is scientifically proven to be able to make us feel emotionally better. Furthermore, it is definitely not true that these investments do pay off. Take the US for example. The music industry contributes more than one billion US dollars to the country's economy annually.

What should be discussed is how these projects should be invested and financed. It is definitely not a right decision to build a multi million dollars theatre house. Instead, the money should be spent on the projects such as giving scholarships to students who has got the talent or support cultural arts projects to reserve the culture of a community. Give the fund to where it is needed is a way to promote and better our cultural life.

It is important that governments should understand how a society works. Building schools, hospitals or upgrading other public services always remains the top priority, but they also should not overlook other things such as arts, which can contribute to the cultural well-being of the people.
nguyenvuong   
Jun 16, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 Essay about the best way to tackle environmental problems [4]

Hello,

Your essay is very well written. The only thing I would comment about is the amount of words. There are more than 500 words here and I dont really think it is possible to write this much in 40 minutes. It is recommended that we should produce a not more than 280 word essay for Task 2 so try to be concise.
nguyenvuong   
Jun 15, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing T2: living in a small family unit or building an extended family? [2]

what is better - small or big family?



IN many countries today, people in big cities either live alone or in a small family units, rather than in large family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

Nowadays, people in large urban areas tend to live on their own or build a nuclear family rather than having an extended family because of the benefits they think it may bring. Some people, on the opposite side, argue that there may be some negative aspects we should also look at when pursuing this trend.

It is undeniable that living on one's own have some great benefits. Living alone gives one the freedom to make their decisions without asking for the permission from their parents. Living alone can be supported by the idea that we will learn to take care of ourselves and be a full grown-up. This trend actually has been followed by a major group of people, especially young ones. In recent years, it has been estimated that more than forty percent of young people in big cities on their own or with their small families.

This trend, however, is not heavily supported by the pro-family people. Living alone or with few members actually means that we have no one to lean on when in hardship. It even makes people less sociable and may cause stress in some ways. Also, these people argue that those often live alone are young people. If we live alone who would take care of our aging parents. This seems to be a very concerned issue in many countries.

To conclude, it is difficult to say whether it is a positive or negative trend. Judging it depends on the situation and the choice they people want to make with their lives. However whether is a one-member family or a three generation home, one must feel happy with their lives, which is the ultimate goal of building a real family.
nguyenvuong   
Jun 15, 2019
Writing Feedback / Task 2 - Townsfolk either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large family groups [6]

Hello. here are some comments:

- Not sure if it is good to start two body paragraphs with "on the one hand" in the first and "in the other hand" in the following. This phrase should be used in only one paragraph to support a statement.

- In the conclusion let alone the meaning, it should include at least two sentences.

- an issue cannot bring any benefits, can it? and also why did you use in past tense?
nguyenvuong   
Jun 14, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - Fair Judgement - the best way to reduce crime is by giving longer prison? [3]

Judgement must be fair and just



"Some people think the best way to reduce crime is by giving longer prison sentence. Other, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce it. Discuss both views and give your opinions"

Reducing crime is one of biggest national concerns of many countries. Some people argue that those committing a crime will not likely to do it again should they be sentenced a harsher punishment such as serving a longer jail time. While this argument can be agreed on, others think that there can be more human and alternative ways to tackle this issue.

It is undeniable that if one commit a crime, they should be punished; and the punishment depends on how dangerous the action is. A large number of people, however, think that if the punishment is not harsh enough in many cases. If the sentence is not just and satisfactory, it cannot be a good lesson for those who make serious crime such as murder, rape, or terrorist acts, etc. They believe that a harsher and fairer should be made to prevent these kind of actions in the future.

While the above-given argument can be true, others think that instead of focusing on the sentence, we should find a way to stop it from happening. In many developed countries, the number of prisons is significant less than those in developing world because the efficient involvement of governments, schools, and family in educating the younger generation on what is bad and good. It is widely believed that those who are well educated will not likely to make illegal and harmful actions.

To conclude, I believe that it depends very much on the situation to make a fair judgement. If the action is judged as extremely dangerous, the criminals must get a deserved sentence. Likewise, we can give a way to those who make illegal actions unintentionally to realise their mistakes and to start it over again. Whatever the judgement may be, it must be fair and just.
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