Writing Feedback / Ielts writing essays on "choices" - are people unable to make decisions due to many choices? [3]

I'm revising my writing skills for the coming exam. Please help with my ideas or grammar. All of your feedback is appreciated. Many thanks.

Topic:

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is a common belief that currently we are living in an era of an array of choices. Compared to life in the past when we had limited resources, I totally agree with this opinion.

On a social level, thanks to competitions between vendors, more and more options are given to us. Let's take business for an example since it produces the most products and services. To be specific, when you want to buy a new pair of shoes, you can think of many brands from luxury like Gucci, LV, and Miu Miu to less costly ones at the supermarkets or local shops. Also, you do not have to come to the store to get your shoes, you can order them online and have them shipped to your place, which is developed to meet the personal demand and satisfaction.

From another angle of view, due to a rise in choices, it takes us more time to consider what we should choose. Particularly, every morning when I wake up, I cannot think of what I want to have for breakfast immediately. Why does this even matter? It is because there is a variety of food stalls and dishes out there to try. And it is as various as that for other issues such as which school to study, which job to apply for or how to make more money. People will give you different answers to these questions, which illustrates the diversity of choices.

All in all, our modern life offers us more options when it comes to everything. However, since we have such a lot of choices, we should consider each one carefully to come up with the best decision.

Writing Feedback / Ielts writing essays on "Artificial Intelligence" and its effect on human [3]

Please help me check this writing. Thanks for your time.

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

computers' contribution for people's life

Computers which are also known as a form of artificial intelligence have played a vital role in our society since they have a huge impact on our lives with broad implications in many aspects. Even though there are still people who are fear of their existence for the reason they can be smarter than us, I strongly believe the benefits given by computers can outweigh the drawbacks.

The first factor to be mentioned is that the computer is the best invention in the scientific field because it helps us facilitate complicated tasks which cannot be done by human. For example, coding and other multi-tasks performed on this artificial machine is by far a lot faster and simpler than by hand or other devices. Therefore, they are undoubtedly the most effective tool to use when it is related to technical work, data, and research.

In addition to that idea, I do not think we have to be afraid of the rise of computers in use because it is us who create, operate and control the machines, not vice versa. We still have to check if they function well and whether they make any mistakes or not. That is why we have QA (quality assurance) engineers to supervise their work. They cannot be more intelligent than human beings since they are under our control.

In conclusion, computers have contributed and supported us so effectively and efficiently not only in our daily lives but in all other fields as well. However, they are still just machines and only able to operate better with the help of human.

Writing Feedback / Popular hobbies and interests as a reflection of trends and fashions [2]

Please help me check my essay. Many thanks.

Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

trendy hobbies?

Many things have been changed within the past few decades, especially in common interests, and they were assumed to reflect the trends or fashions instead of personal hobbies that people want to do in their free time. In my point of view, I only partly agree with this statement.

It is undeniable that popular hobbies are heavily affected by the trends as well as the fashions because they are widespread and novel. These interests are usually introduced by influencers around the world, and as a result, lots of people follow what they did and it then becomes more and more popular. Even if you do not want to imitate, you also do not want to be singled out from a group for being different. For example, everybody at your workplace is all talking about a well-know Korean series or a famous movie at the cinema, it is likely that you will watch it some time. Moreover, chances are audiences copy what actors or actresses dress on screen to look trendy.

But not everyone is fond of something popular since they still stick to their old individual hobbies. They will neglect what people are doing out there and just keep doing what they used to do in their spare time. Particularly, while ebook is so convenient and sometimes free, there are a bunch of readers who still prefer paper books. What is more? Not everyone is using social media, too. I have known so many friends who like sending emails and traditional message texting.

All in all, even though common hobbies are a reflection of trends or fashions, there are still individuals that just simply want to do things they are interested in the relaxing moments. That is why I do not agree with the statement fully.