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Name: hueminh nguyen
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Mar 21, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantges: Conveniece foods [6]

I think you should bring your opinions to two paragraphs in the middle of the essay. It will make your opinion clearer without affecting other parts. It will also make your opinion more connected to each other.
Mar 21, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages? [5]

I think your essay is good overall, but I think you should put clearer examples in two paragraphs in the middle. And I do not know what do you mean but in the first paragraph of the middle, you say "

By way of illustrations, a variety of local businesses, such as hotels, restaurants will benefit from the increasing number of foreign travelers. Also, more job opportunities will be created, which will help to solve the question of unemployment." It does not concern anything about your second idea.
Mar 21, 2020
Writing Feedback / Because wild creatures are on the brink of extinction so that there is no point in protecting them [2]

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century...

Some people say that because wild creatures are on the brink of extinction so that there is no point in protecting them. I do disagree with this statement.

Save animals never is a waste of time. First, they are rare, unique, and limited to the world due to their particular origin. As a result of that, they should be loved, respected and maintained. Imagine these animals are your children, who to your perspective, always are the most valuable and significant thing in your world, and you will do everything to bring up and save them. Do the same things with wild animals. Second, they entertain us. Like other animals, wild creatures make us happy, relaxed and maybe, with their origin, they may be more attracted and cared?

Endangered species do not only diversify and popularize our world but also make a contribution to a country where preserves these animals. They make our world more beautiful and diverse, make the nation develops more in tourism and culture and honor its value heritage. A recent statistic from a university in Japan shows that the rate of visitors come to their country has increased due to swans, japan monkeys, and so on. Furthermore, they help scientists discover more things about medicine. Many reports have shown that some wild animals can produce their own cells or bacteria, which protects them from diseases and these compositions also proved to cure cancer and chronic diseases for people.

In conclusion, wild species play a very important role in many fields like agriculture or medicine and embellish our globe. They should be protected as soon as possible.
Mar 21, 2020

1. Your essay is not an essay, it is just some paragraphs from your task requires because you do not have the beginning and conclusion, which is the most important parts in an essays

2. I do not think music and films are cultural activities, you should talk clearly what they exactly are.
3. you should have more examples and in each paragraph, do not just show your opinion. It will be less real and ambiguous.
Dec 17, 2019
Writing Feedback / Discussing both views about the influences what children watch and the amount of time they spend on. [2]

tv impact on kids

Discussing about watching television, people have many opinions about it. While some people think that the content of the programs have an impact on them, I believe that both sides influence their behavior.

On the one hand, the length of the time spend watching exerts an impact on the way they behave. They may not pay attention to the time, which can bring on watching addiction. They even do not eat, do hygiene, do exercises,...and really concentrate on what they are watching. More serious, this leads to their communicative ability, so they find it hard to talk or play with other people. Children would feel discouraged from having real interactions with people around them if they spend too much time in front of the screen.

On the other hand, I still hold a strong belief that what children watch influences their behavior. Nowadays, with the development of technology, there are more and more kinds of new things on television, which attracts children very much. If they found something interesting or fit with their hobby, they may always think about it even it is a short program/video, and they would do their works as fast as possible to watch it. Worse, they may make children be addicted, and some kind of programs they like but bad, unwholesome to the society cause children to immoral, unaware behavior.

In short, both of them have big influences on children, and parents should take care of them more for a healthy lifestyle.