Writing Feedback / Some students decide early in life to pursue vocational careers that involve cooking and baking. [3]

Topic: some students decide early in life to pursue vocational careers that involve cooking and baking. For them, it is better to study their career occupations in high school rather than regular subjects.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that, nowadays, students can make a decision for their future careers. Some people think that students should study all subjects at school, although they have decided. However, I support the idea that students should learn the necessary subjects to assist their chosen vocational career.

First of all, it seems advantageous that students learn subjects about vocation. they can improve and develop their vocational skills at a young age. For example, there are many cooking and baking competitions around the world especially is Master Chef. Master Chef, where provide contester a good cooking environment and enhance the ability to cook as well. This is because students can learn valuable skills, gain experience, and also be instructed by well-known chefs, who are the judges. Besides, it will be easy for students to open numerous opportunities for work in the future. When students start to focus on vocational career from a young age to adults, they have abundant experience. Therefore, it is not difficult for them to find a job.

Compared to subjects, which support student's vocational career, regular subjects at school do not benefit students. In this regard, subjects such as Maths, Physics, Chemistry, and so on are not related to vocational careers. On the contrary, cooking and baking almost depend on technique and experience. Thus, concentrating on the student's chosen subject is more beneficial.

In conclusion, there are a lot of advantages to early pursuing vocational careers for students. For these reasons, students should subject that support themselves to vocational careers.

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Writing Feedback / Topic: Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices is wrong [2]

can children decide about different aspects of life?

Topic: Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

We live in an age when many children can decide what to do about aspects of life. Some people believe that children's decision may lead to a selfish character in their thinking. There is more persuasive that is important to let children choose matters impacting children.

On the one hand, parents allowing children to make their own choice many times can create bad habits. This is due to the fact that children are not able to have consciously appropriate decisions for themselves as a childish age. Moreover, children still have enough soft skills to make a good decision. For example, children tend to choose what they want. About food, kids usually like to eat sweet food, thus, generally, they will not eat any kind of food, except the sweet one.

On the other hand, when children are under parent's observation and control, they can find out the advantages and disadvantages of their decisions. Therefore, in children's thinking, not only appear an awareness of choosing matters but also generate many great personalities. According to experts, children grow up their mind better when they learn valuable lessons when they do something wrong or even good. Let's take on the example of this regard, in western, parents would teach children admitting mistakes rather than rejecting one. As a result, children become responsible for their decision.

In conclusion, giving children accurate instructions can make a good future generation. Parents should be a children's close friend, who can understand and help them be more mature.

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Writing Feedback / The government should sometimes infringe on people's freedom for the security of society. [2]

interference of government to people' privacy

It is a common belief that the interference of government to people' privacy is unacceptable. However, i firmly believe that the government can infringe on people's freedom in order to protect them in serveral emergences and to make sure that safety regulations are obligated.

To begin with, protecting individuals from danger is the first magnitude of government. That is because, nowadays, the crimes are more than before and that go with a lot of risks, which not only threaten to people's life but also influence badly to entire country. For example, in vietnam, there is a command that the traffic police can impose the doubting drivers to stop and check what they are bringing. Although that is intrusive and many people feel it is unnecessary, to control the risks, they have to do that.

In addition, violating people's freedom right is to ensure the safety regulations are followed. Certain jobs can bring danger to each other if the employees do not act safely and responsibly. In this regard, it is important to ensure employees followed safety rules even if their right are intruded during the process. Take an example of the bus or plane driver cases. Their job expect enough responsibility and capacity. Therefore, requiring these people check medical tests is to make sure that are healthy and capable. This is essential to guarantee that these people are not putting lives of others in danger.

To conclude, because the duty of government is to protect people, therefore, every person should understand and follow the government's safety regulation.