Dbooker
Jun 8, 2020
Writing Feedback / Lifelong lessons - Personal Eperience essay for CBEST. [4]
Hi :)
I really hope one day I could write as good as this essay.
Hi :)
I really hope one day I could write as good as this essay.
Dbooker
Jun 8, 2020
Scholarship / Malaria elimination target. Essay for AAS - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution? [5]
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Hope one day I could have such a great writing skill as yours!!!
Hi :)
Hope one day I could have such a great writing skill as yours!!!
Dbooker
Jun 8, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: Essay about fast food is becoming increasingly popular in most countries. [5]
Hi :)
This essay is very good! However there is a mistake that I just discovered.
I once again restate my view that----Everyone knows conclusion is the paragraph for candidates to restate their opinion and summarize ideas from paragraph one and two. Therefore, you don't have to write this sentence. It's a little bit redundant.
Hi :)
This essay is very good! However there is a mistake that I just discovered.
I once again restate my view that----Everyone knows conclusion is the paragraph for candidates to restate their opinion and summarize ideas from paragraph one and two. Therefore, you don't have to write this sentence. It's a little bit redundant.
Dbooker
Jun 8, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS：Essay about people change the jobs frequently [4]
Hi :)
1. Despite of the fact that -----------In spite (Despite the fact that)
2. You should use a better structure when writing task 2. (Introduction---Body1---Body2---Conclusion)
Hi :)
1. Despite of the fact that -----------In spite (Despite the fact that)
2. You should use a better structure when writing task 2. (Introduction---Body1---Body2---Conclusion)
Dbooker
May 26, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming? [2]
Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming?
In the recent past, worldwide rising temperature has changed the climate and brought severe natural disasters which has influenced thousands of population tremendously. Despite the arguments from several people still do not attach importance to it, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate the reasons behind my standpoint.
First point which I consider to be vital is rising sea level caused by global warming could bring an unimaginable catastrophe in the future. As far as I know, higher seas restrict not only the activity of human beings but also flora and fauna. An increasing number of people, for instance, who live in low-altitude area would lose their livelihood, settlements and become climate refugee potentially. Meanwhile, polar bears are dying out currently if the ice and snow still keep melting. Several vegetation is not able to live under the surface of water due to lack of the air as well.
Equally importantly, worldwide rising temperature also leads to more frequent drought. Heat restrict proper conditions for crops to grow. Regions, where folks are capable of cultivating is getting smaller dramatically. As a result, it would be absolutely more population on the edge of starvation. In addition, under such extreme living circumstances, the food chain and ecological balance are destroyed step by step. Eventually, all the aforementioned problems would possibly bring about an enormous vicious circle threatening to the world.
In summary, these symptoms of global warming will be even worse if we do not put efforts on finding connected solutions. In contrast, if we could take more actions immediately, such as passing environmental friendly bills or reducing carbon footprint, we may have a great chance to cease the imperil of global warming.
Hallo Mr. Holt, hope this time I did not change the prompted discussion and could be worth scoring. If I used wrong words or improper sentences, please let me know. I really want to improve my English writing skills!!! Thank you very much and best regards :)
The problem of worldwide rising temperature
Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming?
In the recent past, worldwide rising temperature has changed the climate and brought severe natural disasters which has influenced thousands of population tremendously. Despite the arguments from several people still do not attach importance to it, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate the reasons behind my standpoint.
First point which I consider to be vital is rising sea level caused by global warming could bring an unimaginable catastrophe in the future. As far as I know, higher seas restrict not only the activity of human beings but also flora and fauna. An increasing number of people, for instance, who live in low-altitude area would lose their livelihood, settlements and become climate refugee potentially. Meanwhile, polar bears are dying out currently if the ice and snow still keep melting. Several vegetation is not able to live under the surface of water due to lack of the air as well.
Equally importantly, worldwide rising temperature also leads to more frequent drought. Heat restrict proper conditions for crops to grow. Regions, where folks are capable of cultivating is getting smaller dramatically. As a result, it would be absolutely more population on the edge of starvation. In addition, under such extreme living circumstances, the food chain and ecological balance are destroyed step by step. Eventually, all the aforementioned problems would possibly bring about an enormous vicious circle threatening to the world.
In summary, these symptoms of global warming will be even worse if we do not put efforts on finding connected solutions. In contrast, if we could take more actions immediately, such as passing environmental friendly bills or reducing carbon footprint, we may have a great chance to cease the imperil of global warming.
Hallo Mr. Holt, hope this time I did not change the prompted discussion and could be worth scoring. If I used wrong words or improper sentences, please let me know. I really want to improve my English writing skills!!! Thank you very much and best regards :)
Dbooker
May 26, 2020
Writing Feedback / Problems caused by aging population and some solutions to solve it [6]
Hi:)
1. Now government ... aging populations ----which are better for the problem of aging population
2. should be taken into ... ----should be considered seriously
3. aging populations have lots of effect on a number of problems.------contribute to numerous
4. the cause offast-growing old increasing aging population getting worse and worse dramatically.
Hi:)
1. Now government ... aging populations ----which are better for the problem of aging population
2. should be taken into ... ----should be considered seriously
3. aging populations have lots of effect on a number of problems.------contribute to numerous
4. the cause of
Dbooker
May 25, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods? [3]
Dear Mr. Holt,
Thank you for giving me so many useful advice that I could use in the coming days. Though I was a little bit frustrated with the result, it seems to be I still have a large space to improve my writing skills. I will keep practicing. Today I just finished another Task 2 essay and I hope this time I did not change the prompted discussion and could be worth scoring. Any way, if there are any improper way which is used in my essay, please just let me know. Thank you very much!
Best wishes:)
Dear Mr. Holt,
Thank you for giving me so many useful advice that I could use in the coming days. Though I was a little bit frustrated with the result, it seems to be I still have a large space to improve my writing skills. I will keep practicing. Today I just finished another Task 2 essay and I hope this time I did not change the prompted discussion and could be worth scoring. Any way, if there are any improper way which is used in my essay, please just let me know. Thank you very much!
Best wishes:)
Dbooker
May 24, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods? [3]
Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.
Do you agree or disagree?
The issue of should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods is certainly a controversial one. Despite the opinions from some people suppose it is relatively appropriate, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate two principle reasons why my view is on the opposite.
One point which I consider to be absolutely vital is that school is like a lesser society which offers an environment for students to nurture their social interactive ability. Students, for instance, could learn how to cooperate together in order to complete reports efficiently. In addition, they could also learn how to cope with obstacles while confronting misconception. Therefore, if schools still decide to group students separately, students would definitely lose the opportunity to interact with different types of other students and to improve their interpersonal communicative competence.
Further and even more importantly, I am of the opinion that every student is distinguished and have different talents in various fields which may even not be opted as a school subject. Such as on one hand, some of the students may be fond of going outside and photographing rather than calculating geometry and algebra. On the other hand, some of the students might be noisy and unconcentrated during a biology class. Nonetheless, they could immerse themselves immediately into an incredible fascinating world of hip-pop music. Hence, separating students would only hurt them badly and could even deteriorate present circumstances.
In conclusion, I believe that every student is unique no matter how many A or F they can obtain in an exam. As a result, I personally do not agree with the idea that disruptive school students should be categorized specially and taught individually.
Hallo dear members, I plan to participate in IELTS in this August. This essay is my first IELTS essey and my goal is to score at least brand 6 in task 2 after a three moths writing practice. Is that possible for me after you guys read my Task 2 above. Best regards:)
Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.
Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.
Do you agree or disagree?
The issue of should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods is certainly a controversial one. Despite the opinions from some people suppose it is relatively appropriate, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate two principle reasons why my view is on the opposite.
One point which I consider to be absolutely vital is that school is like a lesser society which offers an environment for students to nurture their social interactive ability. Students, for instance, could learn how to cooperate together in order to complete reports efficiently. In addition, they could also learn how to cope with obstacles while confronting misconception. Therefore, if schools still decide to group students separately, students would definitely lose the opportunity to interact with different types of other students and to improve their interpersonal communicative competence.
Further and even more importantly, I am of the opinion that every student is distinguished and have different talents in various fields which may even not be opted as a school subject. Such as on one hand, some of the students may be fond of going outside and photographing rather than calculating geometry and algebra. On the other hand, some of the students might be noisy and unconcentrated during a biology class. Nonetheless, they could immerse themselves immediately into an incredible fascinating world of hip-pop music. Hence, separating students would only hurt them badly and could even deteriorate present circumstances.
In conclusion, I believe that every student is unique no matter how many A or F they can obtain in an exam. As a result, I personally do not agree with the idea that disruptive school students should be categorized specially and taught individually.
Hallo dear members, I plan to participate in IELTS in this August. This essay is my first IELTS essey and my goal is to score at least brand 6 in task 2 after a three moths writing practice. Is that possible for me after you guys read my Task 2 above. Best regards:)