Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming? [2]

The problem of worldwide rising temperature

Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming?

In the recent past, worldwide rising temperature has changed the climate and brought severe natural disasters which has influenced thousands of population tremendously. Despite the arguments from several people still do not attach importance to it, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate the reasons behind my standpoint.

First point which I consider to be vital is rising sea level caused by global warming could bring an unimaginable catastrophe in the future. As far as I know, higher seas restrict not only the activity of human beings but also flora and fauna. An increasing number of people, for instance, who live in low-altitude area would lose their livelihood, settlements and become climate refugee potentially. Meanwhile, polar bears are dying out currently if the ice and snow still keep melting. Several vegetation is not able to live under the surface of water due to lack of the air as well.

Equally importantly, worldwide rising temperature also leads to more frequent drought. Heat restrict proper conditions for crops to grow. Regions, where folks are capable of cultivating is getting smaller dramatically. As a result, it would be absolutely more population on the edge of starvation. In addition, under such extreme living circumstances, the food chain and ecological balance are destroyed step by step. Eventually, all the aforementioned problems would possibly bring about an enormous vicious circle threatening to the world.

In summary, these symptoms of global warming will be even worse if we do not put efforts on finding connected solutions. In contrast, if we could take more actions immediately, such as passing environmental friendly bills or reducing carbon footprint, we may have a great chance to cease the imperil of global warming.

Hallo Mr. Holt, hope this time I did not change the prompted discussion and could be worth scoring. If I used wrong words or improper sentences, please let me know. I really want to improve my English writing skills!!! Thank you very much and best regards :)

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods? [3]

Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.

Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.
Do you agree or disagree?

The issue of should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods is certainly a controversial one. Despite the opinions from some people suppose it is relatively appropriate, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate two principle reasons why my view is on the opposite.

One point which I consider to be absolutely vital is that school is like a lesser society which offers an environment for students to nurture their social interactive ability. Students, for instance, could learn how to cooperate together in order to complete reports efficiently. In addition, they could also learn how to cope with obstacles while confronting misconception. Therefore, if schools still decide to group students separately, students would definitely lose the opportunity to interact with different types of other students and to improve their interpersonal communicative competence.

Further and even more importantly, I am of the opinion that every student is distinguished and have different talents in various fields which may even not be opted as a school subject. Such as on one hand, some of the students may be fond of going outside and photographing rather than calculating geometry and algebra. On the other hand, some of the students might be noisy and unconcentrated during a biology class. Nonetheless, they could immerse themselves immediately into an incredible fascinating world of hip-pop music. Hence, separating students would only hurt them badly and could even deteriorate present circumstances.

In conclusion, I believe that every student is unique no matter how many A or F they can obtain in an exam. As a result, I personally do not agree with the idea that disruptive school students should be categorized specially and taught individually.

Hallo dear members, I plan to participate in IELTS in this August. This essay is my first IELTS essey and my goal is to score at least brand 6 in task 2 after a three moths writing practice. Is that possible for me after you guys read my Task 2 above. Best regards:)