jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Opinion on using social media networks at offices. [5]
Thank you for your advice Mr.Holt. I'll check it carefully.
Thank you for your advice Mr.Holt. I'll check it carefully.
jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Ielts Writing task 2 : Studying abroad - Discuss both views [5]
There is another drawback that can be mentioned : mental health. Students who are studying abroad usually feel lonely and stressful. They sometimes become depressed if these emotions keep lasting for a long time.
Your ideas were great.
There is another drawback that can be mentioned : mental health. Students who are studying abroad usually feel lonely and stressful. They sometimes become depressed if these emotions keep lasting for a long time.
Your ideas were great.
jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Opinion on using social media networks at offices. [5]
Thanks a lot for your comment. I'll check it carefully.
Thanks a lot for your comment. I'll check it carefully.
jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Opinion on using social media networks at offices. [5]
Topic :
Do you think managers should trust employees to use time wisely, or do you think it is smart of companies to block access to some sites? Provide reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays, many offices apply strict rules on workers, some of them even forbid their employees from using social media networks and websites such as Facebook. In fact, this helps worker to pay attention highly on their duties. Supervisors and managers are worry that those websites can stop their workers from finishing assignments and starting conversations with friends. It may reduce effective hours in working environment and disturb other workers doing on processes. They understand perfectly the drawbacks of being neglected which can lead to negative feedback from customers, deadline lateness, profit recession of a company, ...
According to my opinion, managers shouldn't trust employees to use time wisely, because this decision can be seen as a threat to the whole company's profit and work efficiency but blocking accesses to those websites completely is not necessary. Due to the development of internet and social media networking, it't couldn't be deny that social media websites like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, ... do not only act as entertaining tools, they are places to find the potential costumers. They can be a very effective environment for users especially business man to explore and develop relationships with consumers. Base on the experience that app developers provided, buyers can communicate with sellers, be notified of the latest trend or products, promotions, ... They can also write comments, reviews, express their feeling or opinions on products helping suppliers aware of their mistake and how to provide a better service. There are a lot more advantages of social medias providing to industries, more and more people are using them to shopping, finding feedback, consulting providers for products' information, ... Customers require a more quickly and convenient purchasing methods which are now provided excellently by social media networks. Through these websites, thousands of questions and reviews appears just by clicking a button, thousands of questions for providers are sent by potential consumers. Workers should always be online in order to post answers, new contents and solve problems.
Managers should only forbid their employees on chatting and doing their entertaining activities by blocking accesses by personal accounts or allow workers to use these sites at specific hours. Prohibitions create a more stressful working atmosphere - one of the most common reasons for lowering their working efficiency. Social media networks should be utilized as a modern type of market and connection between producers, business and consumers, ... Depend on the final result of business activities, fields and concept of duties, managers can create a suitable solution for using social media networking. In conclusion, blocking social media sites is not considered a good solution to improve profits. On the other hand, It can be counterproductive. Allowing employees to use it with supervisors and logical restrictions is seen as a better way not only helping to increase revenue but also working spirit.
Topic :
Some companies block their employees from using social media networks and websites such as Facebook.
Do you think managers should trust employees to use time wisely, or do you think it is smart of companies to block access to some sites? Provide reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays, many offices apply strict rules on workers, some of them even forbid their employees from using social media networks and websites such as Facebook. In fact, this helps worker to pay attention highly on their duties. Supervisors and managers are worry that those websites can stop their workers from finishing assignments and starting conversations with friends. It may reduce effective hours in working environment and disturb other workers doing on processes. They understand perfectly the drawbacks of being neglected which can lead to negative feedback from customers, deadline lateness, profit recession of a company, ...
According to my opinion, managers shouldn't trust employees to use time wisely, because this decision can be seen as a threat to the whole company's profit and work efficiency but blocking accesses to those websites completely is not necessary. Due to the development of internet and social media networking, it't couldn't be deny that social media websites like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, ... do not only act as entertaining tools, they are places to find the potential costumers. They can be a very effective environment for users especially business man to explore and develop relationships with consumers. Base on the experience that app developers provided, buyers can communicate with sellers, be notified of the latest trend or products, promotions, ... They can also write comments, reviews, express their feeling or opinions on products helping suppliers aware of their mistake and how to provide a better service. There are a lot more advantages of social medias providing to industries, more and more people are using them to shopping, finding feedback, consulting providers for products' information, ... Customers require a more quickly and convenient purchasing methods which are now provided excellently by social media networks. Through these websites, thousands of questions and reviews appears just by clicking a button, thousands of questions for providers are sent by potential consumers. Workers should always be online in order to post answers, new contents and solve problems.
Managers should only forbid their employees on chatting and doing their entertaining activities by blocking accesses by personal accounts or allow workers to use these sites at specific hours. Prohibitions create a more stressful working atmosphere - one of the most common reasons for lowering their working efficiency. Social media networks should be utilized as a modern type of market and connection between producers, business and consumers, ... Depend on the final result of business activities, fields and concept of duties, managers can create a suitable solution for using social media networking. In conclusion, blocking social media sites is not considered a good solution to improve profits. On the other hand, It can be counterproductive. Allowing employees to use it with supervisors and logical restrictions is seen as a better way not only helping to increase revenue but also working spirit.
jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Video games are very popular with children, but what about parents? [3]
Thanks a lot Mr.Holt, I'll notice.
Thanks a lot Mr.Holt, I'll notice.
jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: The internet or newspaper? [7]
There are some other reasons as the development of technology, smartphone has became more commonly to users, reading news on devices provides a very convenient experience, newspaper can be read anywhere, anytime without bringing papers around; e-news is easy to share and send to other people; environmental problems (producing paper process, printing and storing old newspapers, ...)
There are some other reasons as the development of technology, smartphone has became more commonly to users, reading news on devices provides a very convenient experience, newspaper can be read anywhere, anytime without bringing papers around; e-news is easy to share and send to other people; environmental problems (producing paper process, printing and storing old newspapers, ...)
jamieyang1011
Dec 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / There is an increasing trend for people to live alone. [7]
I think the reasons could also be high living cost, fear of giving birth and rising children, love for freedom or maybe obsession from relationships in the past,... and this trend can be seen as both positive and negative at the same time.
I think the reasons could also be high living cost, fear of giving birth and rising children, love for freedom or maybe obsession from relationships in the past,... and this trend can be seen as both positive and negative at the same time.
jamieyang1011
Dec 16, 2020
Writing Feedback / Video games are very popular with children, but what about parents? [3]
As a teenager, I used to be a child who loved playing games. However, when I grew up, I realised the effects of video games on children and understand the reason why parents always dislike it. It's true that many parents try their best to keep video games away from their babies because they read thousands of article about the negative sides of playing games. They started to feel the same with their children. Their lovely child, their babies appear to be isolated with the rest of the world, they only focus on their phones, computers. Kid then try to ignore all the thoughts, speechs of their parents. Games make them become more violent, bad-tempered, naughty people. In addition, games can be addicted, so parents usually worry that their children will become crime, doing anything even illegal actions to fulfill their desire playing games, for example rob the bank to have money buying apps' features. On the other hand, game can be a very effective relaxing tool. Playing games with limited time speding helps children to make themselves comfort and enlarge the imagination. Nowadays, games are not entertaining products, they can be a network to connect people around the world. Gamers can have friends who share the same hobby with them. With the development of the society, children who wants to become professional gamer can also make end meet from it. In short, according to my opinion, playing games can also have positive and negative effects depending on the way people think about it. Even though it is very harmful and can be addicted, they are good ways to entertain if children play them under supervision of parents.
the effects of video games
As a teenager, I used to be a child who loved playing games. However, when I grew up, I realised the effects of video games on children and understand the reason why parents always dislike it. It's true that many parents try their best to keep video games away from their babies because they read thousands of article about the negative sides of playing games. They started to feel the same with their children. Their lovely child, their babies appear to be isolated with the rest of the world, they only focus on their phones, computers. Kid then try to ignore all the thoughts, speechs of their parents. Games make them become more violent, bad-tempered, naughty people. In addition, games can be addicted, so parents usually worry that their children will become crime, doing anything even illegal actions to fulfill their desire playing games, for example rob the bank to have money buying apps' features. On the other hand, game can be a very effective relaxing tool. Playing games with limited time speding helps children to make themselves comfort and enlarge the imagination. Nowadays, games are not entertaining products, they can be a network to connect people around the world. Gamers can have friends who share the same hobby with them. With the development of the society, children who wants to become professional gamer can also make end meet from it. In short, according to my opinion, playing games can also have positive and negative effects depending on the way people think about it. Even though it is very harmful and can be addicted, they are good ways to entertain if children play them under supervision of parents.
