Writing Feedback / (IELTS) Home schooling vs School education [2]

TOPIC: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Children's education has always been valued by society. Some people believe that parents have the responsibility to teach their children to be good members of society. However, others consider that influence of schooling education children is more important than that of home education. I will discuss both statements and give my opinions in the following paragraphs.

Looking at the statement of the home education, the supporters are positive that home is the place influence children's value which will play a big part of their life. When newborn babies come to the world, parents would become their first teachers. Babies almost share all day long with their parents, such as learning from how to walk to how to speak. Not to mention the value and life-skills they will inherit from parents, like communication and interaction skills. For example, Hoa Chen, my grand-grandma, was a woman who did not go to school even one day but she had a good family education. During World War II, seven innocents were helped by her and escaped successfully from the Laogai, which means reform through labor. She also donated uncounted money to the disabled caused by war after war. It shows how home value influences children and made them useful members of society.

According to the supporters' statement of school education, children can efficiently become helpful members by the cultivation of school education. School is generally an institute that provides academic knowledge and professional tutors. It means that children will be cultivated here with expert knowledge. Whenever children become professionals, they will have the ability to resolve society's problems.

I assume that home education is much more important than school education. Imaging children as a bee, home education is the living instinct, and school education is the wings. Instinct tells a bee how to live, and the wings give a bee the way to realize its dreams. After all, determine the bee behaviors is not by the wings but by instincts. The instinct to be, just like the home teaching to children.

Writing Feedback / Some believe that computers are the most valuable invention in the late 20th and early 21st century [2]

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years

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To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people believe that computers are the most valuable inventions in the late 20th and early 21st century. I absolutely agree with the statement.

For one thing, computers help us communicate with other people from all around the world without the restriction of place. It means that citizens could share and exchange information with people from distinct areas faster and easier. It could effectively minimize the fake news a misunderstanding caused by in-transparented information amongst cities and countries. Moreover, citizens can inspect their governments more successfully, because they could get more reliable news from other countries. It is a helpful way to combat corruption and dictatorship.

I could not imagine the world without computers. They construct the modern world we lived in. A huge amount of information in industrial sectors as well as are in the personal lives are stored on serves. In terms of business, computers assist companies by making their staffs more productive. For example, employees could use excel to makes statistics without a huge amount of counting. As regards personal lives, computers also become a vital tool in several sectors, such as the controlling system of railways, banking, electricity, the arithmetic system of shopping carts.

Moreover, the excellent counting ability of computers has accelerated the development of sciences massively. They shorten calculation time and calculate unlimited possibilities. Its ability can be used in many fields. For example, computers can calculate the boundary of the universe within minutes, while humans need to use months and years to get the answers.

In summary, computers become an essential part of human modern life, thus there is a high chance that world development would severely regress without the advent of computer technology. The invention of computers has not only paved the way for a more equitable world but make people' lives more possible.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TEST II, SEVERAL LANGUAGES DIE OUT [3]

EVERY YEAR SEVERAL LANGUAGES DIE OUT. SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT THIS IS NOT IMPORTANT BECAUSE LIFE WILL BE EASIER IF THERE ARE FEWER LANGUAGES IN THE WORLD.

TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS OPINION?

With the development of globalization, non-dominated languages are being neglected and gradually drift away in history. However, the benefits of having a fewer number of languages still outweigh the disadvantages. I generally agree with this statement, and three main reasons will be addressed in the essay.

If there are fewer languages in the world, the influence of language barriers among humans will reduce. People just need to learn certain languages, then they could communicate with people all around the world. It means that all kind related to translation costing can decrease. Because many businessmen do not need to pay this kind of fee again; the prices of purchases they sought are likely cheaper. The effect could not only benefits buyers but also motivate the transactions of countries. As the transactions in countries are activated; then, the government will have more tax money to strengthen the countries themselves.

Moreover, without language barberries, people could communicate more effectively. Citizens can share and exchange information faster and easier. It could minimize the fake news and misunderstanding between countries cause by intransparent information. Moreover, citizens can inspect their government more effectively, because they could get more information from believable news by other languages to find out the truth once their governments want to hidden somethings. This is the way to prevent corruption and dictatorship which can promote human quality.

Some people are argued that the culture of minor language will die out along with the non-dominated languages. I consider that this is a trend that we could not avoid. What we could do is to record the language and write down the history to perverse the language by our utmost for afterward languages specialists and those who interest people to have resources to search on.

In summary, having fewer languages in the world can accelerate the development of countries and reduced inequality. It benefits humans all around the world.

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