Writing Feedback / It is believed that society evolves faster if poeple will break the chain of past traditions [2]

Prompt:

Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessor

It is believed that society evolves faster if poeple will break the chain of past traditions. I agree with this belief because of several reasons which will be listed in this essay.

First and foremost, old traditions are sometimes will not express views of younger traditions. For example, the notion about that young poeple must listen to their parents before choosing their lovers has been prevalent in Asian countries. Adhering to this rools can bring some issues in future family since poeple who will be bounded up together will not know each others prior to the wedding. This can lead to luckluster relationship between partners and have negative impact on their childrens. In addition, in some situations our old traditions are so deap-seated that we shun to think about other ways to do a particular job. For instance, it is not a secret that youth have to seek assistance from olders since it is often believed that the latter has more life-experience and wisdom. Hence, there are a lot of cases when youngsters did not speak up, albeit they had a better solution to a problem.

Second think which I should mention is that diversity of traditions can bring new ideas and spark the beginning for the breakthroughs. Many studies have shown that new idias are established when poeple commence somethink new from their counterparts and not in a cluster of poeple who do the same thinks like them. Furthemore, homogeneity of poeple will affect the environment in which they reside, thus their future objectives and plans. Going out the box and doing somethink unique will help to succeed in the world where people often connected to beliefs which they accept with out any doubts and do not want to taste them

To sum up, I see no reason to obey traditions which are established in the past since they can be incompatible with modern movements.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 The chart shows the number of international students in the USA by subject. [2]

international students number by subject

The line graph provides information about the amount of overseas students and which subject they choose in the years from 2000 to 2004.

Overall, business and management is prevalent whereas social science and life science has the lowest number of enrollments by students. Engineering with mathematics and computing are somewhere between.

In 2000 the subject business and management had 100.000 students which will flactuate during 4 years, first goin up to 120.000 in 2002 adn then declining to 105.000 approximetly in the end of the period. The mathematic and computing classes saw a noticeble rise from 55.000 in 2000 to 70.000 comparing to the engineering which dropped to 65.000 from 75.000.

Two last subjects with the lowest quantity of scholars are social science and life science which are stayed the same with 40.000 attendees where only after 3 years in 2003, social science experienced an increase in number of students to 55.000 roughly.

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Writing Feedback / The chart illustrates the amount of international students in the USA and from where they came [2]

IELTS TASK 1
The chart shows the number of international students in the USA by subject and country

(I wrote only first chart so there is no information about subject)

The chart illustrates the amount of international students in the USA and from where they came during the period of four years.

Overall, the amount of Indian students is the highest whereas the amount of students from Mexico, Turkey and Thailand and Indonesia is the lowest and have not experienced any changes.

In 2000 USA saw large increase in the amount of students from India whidh overtook both Korean and Chinese students reaching 80.000 from 40.000 in four years. The figure for students from Japan and Taiwan declined with 10.000 less students in the end for both countries respectively.

Other counties including Thailand, Mexico, Turkey and Indonesia stayed the same with the exception of students from Korea where it saw tangible rise from 40.000 to 52.000 approximately.

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