Posts by Namta

Namta

Mar 13, 2023

Writing Feedback / The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia [3]

@cxvzfbxdng
I think you should mention to the period of time in the first paragraph. In paragraph 3, you shouldn't use 'and' in the beginning of the sentence. You can use 'after that' or complex sentences to express the details. Similarly, you should utilize 'however' to replace the word 'but' in paragraph 2. If you want to improve your writing skill, you need to practice and read example essays. You are able to learn many things.

Namta

Mar 12, 2023

Student Talk / I'm weak in English, unable to write any composition. What to do? [31]

If you want to learn English, I think you should begin with grammar and vocabulary because vocabulary is a key factor to learn a language successfully. After that, you can watch some videos on Youtube about the topic that you like. You can improve your listening skill when you listen to music and watch videos. Most people believe that speaking is the most difficult skill but I think it is easier than writing.

Namta

Mar 12, 2023

Student Talk / I am a bit shy, when I have to speak in English, I always worry about my mistakes; I lack confidence [33]

Practice leads to success. So I think you should spend plenty of time to practice alone if you are worried about peoples' judgment.

Namta

Mar 12, 2023

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some people spend a lot of money attending cultural or sports events [4]

@painiteeee
I think your essay is quite good. You attempt to use complex sentences and advanced vocabulary. Besides, the way you develop your ideas and you answer the question. However, I think you should use 'in conclusion' for paragraph 4 because it is more formal than 'all in all' or 'in a nutshell'.

Namta

Mar 7, 2023

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - The unintended consequences of social media for young people and their relationships [3]

@Holt
Thank you so much!

Namta

Mar 6, 2023

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - The unintended consequences of social media for young people and their relationships [3]

Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

What is your opinion?

Some people thought that social media such as Facebook or Twitter creates favorable conditions and assists people to connect with others. However, many people strongly believe that social networks breed a lot of unintended consequences for young people and their relationships. From my perspective, I wholly concur with this statement and will analyze this issue in the following essay.

To begin with, social media have detrimental impacts on peoples' communication skills. In this day and age, many teenagers abuse Facebook or Twitter and spend plenty of time online and updating news, even though they always keep their smartphones by their side by dint of being frightened to lag behind and fear of missing out on new trends. In fact, there are numerous studies that illustrate that social media create barriers in practical communication situations, and being scared of talking to strangers is rooted for using social media. Lack of face-to-face interactions is the key factor to devastate personal relationships and communication skills.

Another reason to support the notion is that social networks are associated with a number of issues and potential dangers to mental health. The overabundant use of social media triggers the absence of direct communication forms and outdoor activities which not only weakens social relationships but also poses countless health risks. Some researchers concluded that children utilize social networks more than 2 hours per day who have 50% higher risks of mental diseases including depression, anxiety disorders, and autism. Additionally, children's development, perceptions, and behaviors are impacted by social media sites for the worse. Therefore, it is apparent that social media sites are truly hazardous.

In conclusion, I completely agree that social networks breed many deleterious influences on young people and parents should devise a sound strategy to control the usage of their offspring.