FireTiger
Nov 28, 2009
FireTiger
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / 'From panic to self-drive' - Stanford's sense of intellectual vitality. [10]
@Mustafa1991
I understand that you don't like it but I'm not sure how you would say it.
If you remove all the metaphorical stuff, video editing is just...video editing. So I'm not sure how you would approach this topic yourself.
@Mustafa1991
I understand that you don't like it but I'm not sure how you would say it.
If you remove all the metaphorical stuff, video editing is just...video editing. So I'm not sure how you would approach this topic yourself.
FireTiger
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Short Answers -- Marching Band [7]
Lol. I wrote about marching band as well.
I wonder if this says something about the projected 5000000 people who will write about it. O_o
Lol. I wrote about marching band as well.
I wonder if this says something about the projected 5000000 people who will write about it. O_o
FireTiger
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / 'From panic to self-drive' - Stanford's sense of intellectual vitality. [10]
How would you begin this "hype of character traits" or "aura of importance"? What is an example of a first sentence that you had in mind? as that sets the tone and direction of the essay.
Trying to fully understand what you mean. Although I think i may have a vague idea.
How would you begin this "hype of character traits" or "aura of importance"? What is an example of a first sentence that you had in mind? as that sets the tone and direction of the essay.
Trying to fully understand what you mean. Although I think i may have a vague idea.
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / 'From panic to self-drive' - Stanford's sense of intellectual vitality. [10]
Attempt #4- THIS ONE'S FOR YOU MUSTAFA!
Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging. (250-1800 characters)
I create montages, editing videos that are neither required by my school nor by anyone other than myself.
Despite having no classes, no prior experience, and not even practical rationale for studying the art of video editing, I had one day simply decided that I would start experimenting by weaving together tracks and clips. Through hours of reviewing online tutorials and exploring the different transitions that Sony Vegas 7.0 had to offer, I learned the basic steps of editing. I realized that, with no pressuring requirements and the entire collection of free online tutorials at my disposal, the possibilities were indeed endless. My own creativity was at the steering wheel.
One may wonder why I have spent an immeasurable amount of time working with Vegas and its numerous effects and tools, for nothing other than my own satisfaction. After all, how gratifying is the process of gazing into a screen of blank tracks and unfinished projects? But the truth is, I don't see the blank tracks; rather, I see a projected vision of the completed work in front of my eyes. Admittedly, rarely is this vision the same as the final, rendered video. But it's a vision, and that's enough to propel me through the next ten hours of testing and retesting, trying and retrying, alternate endings and innovative introductions. Transitions, zoom, and effects are the tools; my vision is the fuel.
Needless to say, I enjoy the process of creation as much as publishing the end result, a satisfaction that requires no external incentive.
Driven by the truth that there can be no limits to creating art from a series of blank tracks, I believe that, similarly, there can be no restraints on the expansion of knowledge. Discussion, exploration, and experimentation are the tools; my intellectual vitality is the fire.
Attempt #4- THIS ONE'S FOR YOU MUSTAFA!
Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging. (250-1800 characters)
I create montages, editing videos that are neither required by my school nor by anyone other than myself.
Despite having no classes, no prior experience, and not even practical rationale for studying the art of video editing, I had one day simply decided that I would start experimenting by weaving together tracks and clips. Through hours of reviewing online tutorials and exploring the different transitions that Sony Vegas 7.0 had to offer, I learned the basic steps of editing. I realized that, with no pressuring requirements and the entire collection of free online tutorials at my disposal, the possibilities were indeed endless. My own creativity was at the steering wheel.
One may wonder why I have spent an immeasurable amount of time working with Vegas and its numerous effects and tools, for nothing other than my own satisfaction. After all, how gratifying is the process of gazing into a screen of blank tracks and unfinished projects? But the truth is, I don't see the blank tracks; rather, I see a projected vision of the completed work in front of my eyes. Admittedly, rarely is this vision the same as the final, rendered video. But it's a vision, and that's enough to propel me through the next ten hours of testing and retesting, trying and retrying, alternate endings and innovative introductions. Transitions, zoom, and effects are the tools; my vision is the fuel.
Needless to say, I enjoy the process of creation as much as publishing the end result, a satisfaction that requires no external incentive.
Driven by the truth that there can be no limits to creating art from a series of blank tracks, I believe that, similarly, there can be no restraints on the expansion of knowledge. Discussion, exploration, and experimentation are the tools; my intellectual vitality is the fire.
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Stanford Essay #3: Why Stanford is the Right Place For You? [9]
It was good. :) I thought your starting sentences were excellent.
I'm working on the same essay, but I'm at a lack of where to get the "research" for it. People have directed me to the stanford site, but is there a particular place you went to for the information on the School of Humanities and Sciences, etc. ?
Thanks, and good luck :)
PS: Are you doing the art supplement as well? What instrument do you play? Also do you know what time it's due? Is it nov. 30 11:59 or dec 1st 11:59?
PPS: No it's not too short as long as it's over 250 words.
It was good. :) I thought your starting sentences were excellent.
I'm working on the same essay, but I'm at a lack of where to get the "research" for it. People have directed me to the stanford site, but is there a particular place you went to for the information on the School of Humanities and Sciences, etc. ?
Thanks, and good luck :)
PS: Are you doing the art supplement as well? What instrument do you play? Also do you know what time it's due? Is it nov. 30 11:59 or dec 1st 11:59?
PPS: No it's not too short as long as it's over 250 words.
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC Prompt 2: My Undying Passion (sport) [6]
Instead of saying "my passion to win will help me succeed" you might want to rephrase it, ie. emphasizing on how you can keep your cool no matter WHAT's happening, to me it seems like the first version seems like youre betting everything on the winning aspect of it.
Instead of saying "my passion to win will help me succeed" you might want to rephrase it, ie. emphasizing on how you can keep your cool no matter WHAT's happening, to me it seems like the first version seems like youre betting everything on the winning aspect of it.
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Stanford Essay #3: Why Stanford is the Right Place For You? [9]
Oh eww. Nov. 30 11:59 sucks.
And yeah, but I'm a realllly bad procrastinator. And writing isnt my strong point. So it will probably be turned in sometime around 10 pm :/
And I play the clarinet. (Ever heard of that? :P)
PS:
So is "Humanities and Sciences" a subgroup of Stanford's schools? What are all the possible schools // or where is there a list of them? or a place that explains this system?
Oh eww. Nov. 30 11:59 sucks.
And yeah, but I'm a realllly bad procrastinator. And writing isnt my strong point. So it will probably be turned in sometime around 10 pm :/
And I play the clarinet. (Ever heard of that? :P)
PS:
So is "Humanities and Sciences" a subgroup of Stanford's schools? What are all the possible schools // or where is there a list of them? or a place that explains this system?
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / THEATRE AS A CATALYST - UC ESSAY #2 [3]
Acting has given me a drive to shoot for what I want to achieve, and to stop at nothing to achieve it, the strength and tools for balancing a multi-faceted lifestyle, and a passion for excellence.
Something about that seems awkward.
Nice essay nonetheless.
Acting has given me a drive to shoot for what I want to achieve, and to stop at nothing to achieve it, the strength and tools for balancing a multi-faceted lifestyle, and a passion for excellence.
Something about that seems awkward.
Nice essay nonetheless.
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1. scattered thoughts.The workd you come from [8]
Sentences in italics are things I feel need to be changed, but Idk how. I also don't know what to write next.
This essay is suppoesd to be 300 words and atm it is 357. I'm thinking about deleting the first paragraph anyway.
I'm trying to elevate the diction and make the sentences better make it sound somewhat professional but right now its not working. and im just like ughhh
please help, thanks in advance.
PS: I feel like i have a good topic / concept but the wording is just not there right.
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Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. (300 words)
Perspective is the angle with which we view the world. When committed to only one angle, our community as we see it becomes narrow, and subject to the critique of one culture, one set of laws and flaws. Yet as one changes perspective, inheriting various outlooks on life, each new challenge presents an opportunity to __________. [remove whole paragraph?]
A young girl, eating lunch with her friends in the heart of Chinatown, is gently pulled aside. Her mother tells her two words that she is too young to fully comprehend.
"We're moving."
Blissfully unaware, the naïve child asks, "How many friends can I bring?" Her mother responds with a somber yet knowing smile.
For a long time after our move, I felt as if I had been pulled apart: one foot trapped in Chinatown, San Francisco, and the other in San Diego. I could not understand why we were leaving the community that I had known for so many years. I had told my friends that I would be back soon. [remove?]
Not realizing it at the time, I had been attending a school where over 90% of the students were Asian American, and although other races were always welcome, they were admittedly rare. As a community, we had shared one culture, celebrating Chinese New Year with dragon parades and attending Chinese school to learn our characters. Shifting to a community in which ethnic diversity was commonplace, I ironically felt lost and out of place.
Expanding my definition of community had created a new and unforgettable chapter in my life. Although my fluency in Chinese was later replaced by English and Spanish, I eventually grew accustomed to, and appreciative of, the various cultures and perspectives of my new companions. Gaining an admiration for varying approaches to life, I flourished with friends that I now could not imagine my life without. Most importantly, I expanded my perspectives on life, from relationships to daily issues. [i hate this sentence]
This ability to look at things from different perspectives have shaped my dreams and aspirations to become an engineer.Engineers solve problems, often on a global scale.With a broad spectrum of growing perspectives, wegfearbgaewr
[wanted to tie "changing perspectives" into how engineers need to be able to look at problems from different angles. But not just say it like that, instead say it more professional. Bleh.]
I usually write better than this but for some reason this topic is hard for me to express. Or what im trying to say is hard for me to express. idkkkkkk
Sentences in italics are things I feel need to be changed, but Idk how. I also don't know what to write next.
This essay is suppoesd to be 300 words and atm it is 357. I'm thinking about deleting the first paragraph anyway.
I'm trying to elevate the diction and make the sentences better make it sound somewhat professional but right now its not working. and im just like ughhh
please help, thanks in advance.
PS: I feel like i have a good topic / concept but the wording is just not there right.
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Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. (300 words)
Perspective is the angle with which we view the world. When committed to only one angle, our community as we see it becomes narrow, and subject to the critique of one culture, one set of laws and flaws. Yet as one changes perspective, inheriting various outlooks on life, each new challenge presents an opportunity to __________. [remove whole paragraph?]
A young girl, eating lunch with her friends in the heart of Chinatown, is gently pulled aside. Her mother tells her two words that she is too young to fully comprehend.
"We're moving."
Blissfully unaware, the naïve child asks, "How many friends can I bring?" Her mother responds with a somber yet knowing smile.
For a long time after our move, I felt as if I had been pulled apart: one foot trapped in Chinatown, San Francisco, and the other in San Diego. I could not understand why we were leaving the community that I had known for so many years. I had told my friends that I would be back soon. [remove?]
Not realizing it at the time, I had been attending a school where over 90% of the students were Asian American, and although other races were always welcome, they were admittedly rare. As a community, we had shared one culture, celebrating Chinese New Year with dragon parades and attending Chinese school to learn our characters. Shifting to a community in which ethnic diversity was commonplace, I ironically felt lost and out of place.
Expanding my definition of community had created a new and unforgettable chapter in my life. Although my fluency in Chinese was later replaced by English and Spanish, I eventually grew accustomed to, and appreciative of, the various cultures and perspectives of my new companions. Gaining an admiration for varying approaches to life, I flourished with friends that I now could not imagine my life without. Most importantly, I expanded my perspectives on life, from relationships to daily issues. [i hate this sentence]
This ability to look at things from different perspectives have shaped my dreams and aspirations to become an engineer.Engineers solve problems, often on a global scale.With a broad spectrum of growing perspectives, wegfearbgaewr
[wanted to tie "changing perspectives" into how engineers need to be able to look at problems from different angles. But not just say it like that, instead say it more professional. Bleh.]
I usually write better than this but for some reason this topic is hard for me to express. Or what im trying to say is hard for me to express. idkkkkkk
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1. scattered thoughts.The workd you come from [8]
How can I express whhat Ive written in the shortest / best way possible so that I have enough word count to talk about engineering? And whats the best way to tie it in?
I know i need to talk about that part more but tying it in is the hard part for me right now.
Thanks for replying tommy j :)
PS:
if i scrap that last para and start it with this, then it seems too direct..boring...straightforward..undeveloped...blech.
"This same development of different perspectives has shaped my aspirations of becoming an engineer."
D:
How can I express whhat Ive written in the shortest / best way possible so that I have enough word count to talk about engineering? And whats the best way to tie it in?
I know i need to talk about that part more but tying it in is the hard part for me right now.
Thanks for replying tommy j :)
PS:
if i scrap that last para and start it with this, then it seems too direct..boring...straightforward..undeveloped...blech.
"This same development of different perspectives has shaped my aspirations of becoming an engineer."
D:
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1. scattered thoughts.The workd you come from [8]
Should I take out the first paragraph?
And how can i phrase the connection between perspective and engineering?
ps
instead of
"A young girl, eating lunch with her friends in the heart of Chinatown, is gently pulled aside. Her mother tells her two words that she is too young to fully comprehend.
"We're moving."
Blissfully unaware, the naïve child asks, "How many friends can I bring?" Her mother responds with a somber yet knowing smile."
i could put
It amazes me to think of how much I have changed since I left the [whats the opposite of diversity that could go here?] of Chinatown, San Francisco, to the [what should go here?] of San Diego.
Dang but I still hate this sentence because it's so...middle school ish. i hate it but i cant think of what else to write.
Should I take out the first paragraph?
And how can i phrase the connection between perspective and engineering?
ps
instead of
"A young girl, eating lunch with her friends in the heart of Chinatown, is gently pulled aside. Her mother tells her two words that she is too young to fully comprehend.
"We're moving."
Blissfully unaware, the naïve child asks, "How many friends can I bring?" Her mother responds with a somber yet knowing smile."
i could put
It amazes me to think of how much I have changed since I left the [whats the opposite of diversity that could go here?] of Chinatown, San Francisco, to the [what should go here?] of San Diego.
Dang but I still hate this sentence because it's so...middle school ish. i hate it but i cant think of what else to write.
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC Prompt #1. scattered thoughts.The workd you come from [8]
For a long time after our move, I felt as if I had been pulled apart: one foot trapped in Chinatown, San Francisco, and the other in San Diego. I could not understand why we were leaving the community that I had known for so many years. Reassuringly, I had promised my friends that I would return soon.
Although I was unaware of it at the time, I had been going to a school where over 90% of the students were Asian American. Other races were always welcome, yet they were admittedly rare. As a community, we had generally shared one culture, celebrating Chinese New Year with dragon parades and attending Chinese school to learn our characters. We had developed one unique outlook on life. Shifting to a community in which ethnic diversity was commonplace, I ironically felt lost and out of place.
Expanding my definition of community had created a new and unforgettable chapter in my life. Although my fluency in Chinese was later replaced by English and Spanish, I eventually grew accustomed to, and appreciative of, the various cultures and perspectives of my new companions. Gaining an admiration for varying approaches to life, I flourished with diverse friends that I now could not imagine my life without. Most importantly, I applied the expansion of my perspectives to the real world, realizing that there are different ways to solve a problem, and the most effective solutions come from a broad understanding of all factors involved.
In this way, my development of different perspectives has shaped my aspirations of becoming an engineer. Expected to solve problems, oftentimes on a global scale, engineers must frequently approach unique problems from different angles and perspectives. As I work with a global economy, and people of varying ethnicities, backgrounds, and demands, dsagdfsgadfgaghwrh
[what to write?]
[I feel like I'm talking about WHY my background will help in my future, but not HOW it shaped it. Helppp!]
For a long time after our move, I felt as if I had been pulled apart: one foot trapped in Chinatown, San Francisco, and the other in San Diego. I could not understand why we were leaving the community that I had known for so many years. Reassuringly, I had promised my friends that I would return soon.
Although I was unaware of it at the time, I had been going to a school where over 90% of the students were Asian American. Other races were always welcome, yet they were admittedly rare. As a community, we had generally shared one culture, celebrating Chinese New Year with dragon parades and attending Chinese school to learn our characters. We had developed one unique outlook on life. Shifting to a community in which ethnic diversity was commonplace, I ironically felt lost and out of place.
Expanding my definition of community had created a new and unforgettable chapter in my life. Although my fluency in Chinese was later replaced by English and Spanish, I eventually grew accustomed to, and appreciative of, the various cultures and perspectives of my new companions. Gaining an admiration for varying approaches to life, I flourished with diverse friends that I now could not imagine my life without. Most importantly, I applied the expansion of my perspectives to the real world, realizing that there are different ways to solve a problem, and the most effective solutions come from a broad understanding of all factors involved.
In this way, my development of different perspectives has shaped my aspirations of becoming an engineer. Expected to solve problems, oftentimes on a global scale, engineers must frequently approach unique problems from different angles and perspectives. As I work with a global economy, and people of varying ethnicities, backgrounds, and demands, dsagdfsgadfgaghwrh
[what to write?]
[I feel like I'm talking about WHY my background will help in my future, but not HOW it shaped it. Helppp!]
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Stanford Essay #3: Why Stanford is the Right Place For You? [9]
Yeah...it could use a bit of personal touch.
but that is a hard question to answer, because yale and harvard are great schoosl as well
Yeah...it could use a bit of personal touch.
but that is a hard question to answer, because yale and harvard are great schoosl as well
FireTiger
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Chubby Charm - MY COMMON APP ESSAY [7]
"Being a typical high school guy, I cannot deny the fact that he was immature, silly and materialistic. "
FYI, you're saying that you were the typical high school guy. The way you phrased it.
You could say something like..
"Being a typical high school guy, he was undeniably immature, silly and materialistic. " etc
All specifics aside, it feels like you did a lot of reflection on the essay but you might want to bring out more of what it taught you, and how that will affect you in your future life, careers, goals, etc.
"Being a typical high school guy, I cannot deny the fact that he was immature, silly and materialistic. "
FYI, you're saying that you were the typical high school guy. The way you phrased it.
You could say something like..
"Being a typical high school guy, he was undeniably immature, silly and materialistic. " etc
All specifics aside, it feels like you did a lot of reflection on the essay but you might want to bring out more of what it taught you, and how that will affect you in your future life, careers, goals, etc.
FireTiger
Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Nianna was a young girl' - Common App Essay: Influential Person [5]
I like how it's metaphorical, but at times it's a bit confusing to what you're trying to say. Took me awhile but maybe that's just me.
Some sentences were really run-on sentences with improper semicolon/comma usage so if you want to you could review that.
Other than that, nice and creative essay :)
Think you can help me out with my UC essay #1? It's a bit of a mess right now.
Thanks in advance!
I like how it's metaphorical, but at times it's a bit confusing to what you're trying to say. Took me awhile but maybe that's just me.
Some sentences were really run-on sentences with improper semicolon/comma usage so if you want to you could review that.
Other than that, nice and creative essay :)
Think you can help me out with my UC essay #1? It's a bit of a mess right now.
Thanks in advance!
