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Posts by BlessedHands23
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BlessedHands23   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Supplement - Massachusetts College of Pharmacy and Health Sciences [3]

Its a good essay but it is sorta generic. You need to give some more info about wat particularly unique feature of the school appealed to you otherwise, i could just put any other college that and the essay still holds up
BlessedHands23   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Lafayette Supp - Describe an academic or creative interest or accomplishment [3]

Mathematics has always been a subject that I loved. Ever since I was a child I loved Math and always tried to be a step ahead by always trying to learn new topics and go further in the class. In Jamaica to be placed into High School you must take an exam consisting of 4 tests, Math, English, Science and Social Studies with topics ranging from 4th grade to 6th grade. My highest test result was the one for Math getting above 90%. I was then placed into high school and Math was not my strongest subject in my first year. Actually, I ended up failing it and I could not determine the reason but I had to stop worrying and move on.

The next 4 years, my math grade improved significantly, rarely getting a grade below 85, this, in my school was an A. At first I put the blame to my low grade in my fist year on my teacher but he then taught me again in my final two years and I came to the conclusion that it wasn't 100% his fault but I couldn't say that there was no blame on him at all. In the Caribbean the final exams were done in 11th grade, your final year of high school. I did my Math exam a year before, getting a distinction which was the highest grade achievable. Since I did it privately, I had to do it over in 11th grade and I ended up getting the same grade. This came as no surprise to me.

I recently did Advanced Proficiency exams in Math as well as Chemistry, Computer Science and Communication Studies and to my surprise although I passed, Math was my lowest grade and I was very angry with myself. I even tried to query my grade but could not get all the documents in on time so I plan on doing it over this year. I have now realized that the reason why I didn't achieve the highest was not because I didn't know the topics, in fact I understood the topics quicker than most people, but it was because the practice I thought I did was just not enough and I suffered the consequences and learnt from my mistakes and I do not plan to let any time get away from me this year.
BlessedHands23   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Bentley's supplement (personal approach to students) [6]

umm...you can begin it with Since, or Due to the fact that, but since is better, and its a good essay, you answered the question properly and its within the character limit
BlessedHands23   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Colgate Supp Essay - Diversity in our community [4]

Diverse communities can play a big role in a person's life. They can be found all over the world. The Caribbean itself is one with various races and religions coming from it. The island of Jamaica is a diverse community as well. With virtually all the major races and religions living there, it is hard to find an area or community with just only one, as a matter of fact, it is almost impossible.

I am from a Black and an Indian descent so I have multiple traditions. Although I do not participate in the Indian celebrations, I still respect my heritage. In my school there are people of various racial and cultural background, whether they are students or teachers, why, my previous Chemistry teacher was Hindu and told us that she doesn't eat beef and follows her Hindu traditions. My family is a devout Christian family so I am a Christian, more specifically, a Baptist myself and so I do celebrate many Christian traditions, for example, Easter, Lent and Christmas.

People always say that it is good to learn from the mistakes of others and I agree wholeheartedly but I also believe that we can benefit from the achievements of others, more so than the mistakes. When you are part of a minority the achievements made are much more important than the mistakes and this has made me realize that anything is possible and that everyone in the world has an equal place and should be treated as such.
BlessedHands23   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Rochester second short answer: diff. points of view. [6]

In my sophomore year, I loved to do most activities with only one exception: science lab. Our Biology lab required each student to work with others as a group; it meant team work (i dont think its necessary, working in a group already implies teamwork so you never had to state it). In spite of my passion for Biology subject, I could not see the necessity for sharing the work and effort with others. I, who greatly stressed individuality, felt that one would do the 'real' thinking process and the rest would get the same credit for what they did not work for. Although I understood the value of group activity, sharing the amount of work did not bring any feeling of achievement. However in some rare occasions, some groups comprised people who were actually unique and each had something to contribute. I believe such people are Rochester students. With my talents and enthusiasm in the field of my interest, I will contribute to the Meliora: Ever better Rochester community.

Otherwise i cant help you cut down the word limit...nothing is coming to mind but its good nonetheless
BlessedHands23   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Impact of Tennis - Common App Essay [3]

After moving back to the United States(where did you say that u were living there before) I began to play more seriously and fell further in love with the game. Throughout my school years I played in tournaments after school and on the weekendon weekends .
BlessedHands23   
Dec 26, 2009
Undergraduate / Duke Supplement Essay - Why Engineering and why Duke [3]

As a child I never wanted to be the usual doctor, lawyer, fireman etc, I always dreamt about becoming 1 thing, an Engineer, more specifically an Inventor. Growing up on shows like Power Rangers and Transformers and being surrounded by toys like Lego and modern technology like iPods is what made me like the field even more. I would always wonder as to how they could create these. I then decided that I was going to create my very own. After a while I particularly started to like the field of Aerospace Engineering thanks to my love for Physics, Chemistry and Mathematics. This soon died down and I began to move towards careers and majors mainly based on Mathematics like Financial Math.

Then earlier this year Isa Phillips, a well known athlete here in Jamaica, came to my school to talk to the final year students about college and college life and he brought along a friend of his who talked about the various black inventors. This was where I found back my love for engineering. His speech about how black people made a much bigger impact on the world of technology than most people thought and with inventions like the Traffic Light, the Toilet and even the Super Soaker water gun is what particularly re-inspired me and I thought if these people can make a change so can I as a fellow black man and become the next best inventor in the world.

I always heard about Duke but never really paid attention until my final year when I was browsing through colleges to apply to and I saw Duke and realized that it is a high end school and that Pratt is one of the highest rated engineering schools in the U.S. What really caught my eye was the fact that Duke is not as old as most colleges but its reputation is one that would rank it above many older universities and put it on the same ranking as a Harvard or a Yale. This means that Duke must have been doing something good over the years and are producing the best of the best in the world and I think the home of the Blue Devils will be the place for me as I pursue my engineering degree while being an active member of the various extracurricular activities that it has to offer, like Soccer, Circle K and many more.
BlessedHands23   
Dec 26, 2009
Undergraduate / Bentley's supplement (personal approach to students) [6]

One of the prime factors that compelled me to apply to Bentley University is its personal approach to students. As I live in Hanoi ,(change the way you being this sentence) thousands of miles from Waltham, I was thrilled when Bentley offered me what I thought was an impossible - an interview with an admission officer. What I derive from this fact is that the school attaches great attention to individuals and is willing to spend more time and efforts to get to know each applicant.

The university composes of highly competitive, resolute students who are willing to take the opportunity of excellent education the school providestake the opportunity of the excellent education that the school provides . Bentley's graduates are, thus, intelligent, well-rounded, inquiring minds, who benefited all advantages of an advanced business curriculum, exceptional liberal arts schooling and the emphasis on technical skills. Moreover, Bentley's heterogeneous community would help me gain knowledge about different cultures and perspectives - an essential if I want to use my business skills in a global context.
BlessedHands23   
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / 'My first instrument' - Common App Essay, Topic of my Choice, Music [3]

Music has always been a love of mine. Like every other child, I started listening to music at a young age but it wasn't until I grew older that I found that I had a deep passion for it. Growing up in my home, I was always surrounded by music. My mother taught piano and my father had a deep love for music of the 'Soul' and 'RnB' genres and would constantly play them. Since my mother taught piano the house always had children with the similar interest in music that I had, or whose parents forced it upon them.

My first instrument was the recorder which I started to play at about the age of eight and was part of my church ensemble for about a year performing at various church events and services, but soon realized that it was not the instrument for me. I then found my knack for playing the piano at about the age of nine and began lessons with my mother. I would then take a yearly exam, administered by the Associated Board of The Royal School of Music (ABRSM), to assess my ability and determine whether or not I should go up a grade or repeat the current one. During my years of lessons I moved from Preparatory level to Grade 5 in piano and music theory and even skipped a grade. Now I play for recreation and stress relief and plan to one day continue my lessons and go the highest level.

Over the last two years I performed at various locations. My most memorable ones were my Grade 11 luncheon, my churches musical evening and most recently my father's funeral. When my father died, I found it hard at times to get things off my mind and when I would play the piano I would feel better. During the service there were various tributes given by various family members and since I found it hard to go up and speak I made my tribute in the form of an appropriate RnB genre piece and since then every time I think about him or am just feeling down I go to the piano and let my fingers do the talking. Music, especially piano, has impacted on my life greatly and I could not imagine going without it for even a day.
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