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CobraRose   
Jan 4, 2010
Undergraduate / EMERSON-TITLE OF MY LIFE (Urban Jungle) [3]

HI,
THIS IS THE ANSWER TO A SHORT ANSWER ON THE EMERSON COLLEGE SUPPLEMENT.
PLEASE GIVE ANY ADVICE/CRITICISM=] IT IS DUE TOMMOROW SO I AM TRYING TO FINISH UP.

I STILL NEED TO WRITE AN ENDING 1-3 SENTENCES TO CAP THIS PARAGRApH OFF.
THANKS!!

Much of the work that students do at Emerson College is a form of storytelling. If you were to write the story of your life until now, what would you title it? Why? Please be brief (100-200 words).

Urban Jungle

If I were to write the story of my life, it would be titled "Urban Jungle." Growing up in my house has been like living in a jungle. Not a jungle in the tropical Amazon, for that would be much too peaceful. Instead, the jungle that I live in is urban and is right in the heart of Chicago. This jungle has an abundance of wild animals, or as some prefer to call us, children. We weigh in at the immense number of six, plus my mother and father, which makes us a solid eight. Although there are many people living here, the animals always seem to outnumber us. I believe the current animal count in my home is 11, but don't hold me to that for it is a little difficult to keep up. My house gets pressingly chaotic at times and it is often impossible to find matching socks, but I secretly enjoy the bedlam. I have grown accustom to the way my large family lives. I am used to being called everyone else's name but my own. I also always remember to pick up extra milk, bread, and eggs on my way home from school, and when my dad yells the word "groceries" I run and hide in an attempt to save myself from the stampede of children running down the stairs. Plus, and most important, I have come to realize that our weekly purchase of Lint brushes is beyond essential. All of these customs are part of my life, and I believe that they make me a better and more tolerant person. This tolerance will be of assistance in college, a place full of people, noise, and dirt. I have no idea as to what the term "personal space" means, so living in a dorm will be very feasible.

^ I STILL NEED TO ADD AN ENDING. ANY IDEAS?
CobraRose   
Jan 4, 2010
Undergraduate / Media and Communications, EMERSON COLLEGE-SUPPLEMENT-HELP [4]

Hi, This is a short answer for Emerson College, which is a Media and Communications school. I understand that it definatley needs some fixing up so if anyone has any input or advice it would be greatly appreciated!! Thank you!

A. As you know, the academic programs at Emerson College are focused on communication and the arts. Please tell us what influenced you to select your first choice major and, if applicable, your second choice major. If you're undecided about your major, what attracted you to Emerson's programs? Please be very brief (100-200 words).

If someone were to ask me where my passion lies, I do not respond with activities such as volleyball, reading, playing the piano, or drawing. Instead, my response is always "Words are my passion." For many, a word is just text or a sound. However, for me, a word is the essence of life. For as long as I can remember words have been of immense importance to me. Aside from being extremely reliable, words are flexible and very independent. One can mix and match words and connect them to create a story, am image. I would love to use words and continue telling stories at Emerson College. Thus, I have chosen Journalism-Print and Multimedia as my first choice major. I am confident that by combining my intellectual breadth, curiosity about the world, technical skills, and passion for words, I can make a lasting impression on our eternally growing multimedia world.
CobraRose   
Jan 4, 2010
Undergraduate / Cornell CAS Essay- Finding Nemo [5]

I greatly enjoyed reading this essay! I think it is a great analogy to use Finding Nemo.
Your transitions are also very good.
CobraRose   
Jan 4, 2010
Undergraduate / BU 3 words prompt- "PIN: Polemical, Inquisitive, Nocturnal". [11]

Wow I think this is an excellent essay, and I truly feel like I have learned alot about you after reading it. Try not to use contractions such as " don't" in the first part. And be sure to type out Boston University not " BU"
CobraRose   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Essay: "Franny and Zooey" [5]

WOW! I thoroughly enjoyed this essay! This is the type of essay that interests me. You took something that means a lot to you and has an IMMENSE impact on you, and your sharing it with your audience. This has definatley made me want to read the book, and I also believe it shares alot about you and your character. The vast vocabulary you used is truly great.

Nice work.
Good luck!
CobraRose   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / SU(SYRACUSE) SHORT ANSWER: WHO/WHY INFLUENCED YOU. [3]

SYRACUSE UNIVERSITY SHORT ANSWER #1.
I am uncertain about how I should answer these short answer questions, in a creative way ( my strong suit) or straight forward. This is a pretty basic response, I am not very confident about it, but I do not have much time to keep revising for the application is due on January 1st.

Any comments/advice is greatly appreciated!!
Thank you!!

Who or what has influenced you to attend Syracuse University

#1. I have lived in Chicago for the past 17 years, and for those 17 years I have always felt that my
heart truly lies on the East Coast.From the assortment of colorful leaves, to a hearty Fenway
brat, I long for a little East Coast in my life. I have finally reached the point in my life where I can decide
where I would like to spend the next four years.The East Coast is the obvious general
vincinity I am headed towards. The next decision I get to make is choosing what University or College I would like to attend.
After countless college visits, mounds of magazines and pamphlets, and hours upon days spent on University websites,
I have finally come to a consensus. The answer is Syracuse University. The great location
is not the only factor that has influenced my decision. Syracuse is an academically prestegous Univeristy
where I can put forth my best abilities and truly strive. My passion lies in
Journalism and Communications, and Syracuse Univeristy is the ideal place for me to further my studies in that field.
I would have the opportunity to study and learn while using the materials that the campus and the renound S.I Newhouse of Public
Communications offer me. I am confident that Syracuse Univeristy can provide me with all of the tools that I need
to further my education and career in Communications, while still acting as my new home.
CobraRose   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / A book that has affected you and how - Occidental Supplement [5]

Overall, I think there is a good idea and story behind the essay, but it it longing to get out. The begining is farley strong, but the conclusion is slightly weak...I would consider including how the book really affected you and what you gained from reading it..instead of lingering on the topic of how you did not want to read it...
CobraRose   
Dec 25, 2009
Undergraduate / SYRACUSE SUPPLEMENT: # 2 ( WORK EXPERIENCE) ANY INPUT? [3]

This is my response to question # 2 on the Syracuse Univeristy supplement.
My strongsuit is in Creative Writing, which is basically the opposite of what this short answer requires. I am not 100% confident in this response and I am extremley particular about writing, so knowing me, I will probably never stop rewriting this. If anyone has any input it would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

2. If you have had paid work experience what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?

1. I have always been a motivated person longing for independence and adventure. I gained this independence and adventure when I received my first paid work experience. I have been employed at Plato's Closet Retail store since August of 2008. I work as a Sales Associate which entails me to sell the merchandise in the store and cater to all customers. I am referred to as the "Floor Force" by my fellow co-workers due to my efficient customer service and fast pace. Besides working with customers, I also work as a cashier and manage our storage space in the store. It is my responsibility to keep track of the merchandise that enters the store and the merchandise that exits the store. This calls for me to do inventory once every 6 weeks, requiring me to count all of the merchandise we have on the sales floor, as well as in our storage space, and organizing it according to date. Being the main "Floor Force" of the store, I have developed great communication skills. I have truly gained a knack for working with customers and I do everything I can to please each individual that enters the store. I have learned to always treat people with kindness and I pay everyone with equal respect, even if I am put in a difficult or frustrating situation. I gained independence from putting immense amount of time and effort into my job. I work about 24 hours a week, averaging a six hour shift. I did this while I completed my junior year at (INSERT HIGHSCHOOL) and I continue to work while I finish my senior year of school at (INSERT HIGHSCHOOL). At first, I regarded my job at Plato's Closet as a way of earning extra spending money. However, overtime, it has become much more than just a means of earning extra cash. It has truly become a love and passion of mine and I have gained valuable experiences and important information regarding business and service from it. Working has given me the independence I have always longed for and it has provided me with incredible social and communication skills which I can use in my future, a future that will hopefully be at Syracuse University.
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