Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

Thank you for the concern and yes its impossible to stop anyone from copying the ideas but I do have my name on my post and the time stamp to prove that it's my original work and not theirs.

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

No one has any thoughts about this paragraph? Please I only have 4.5 hours till I must hand it in

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

So here is my conclusion I actually don't think its very well done but I'm hoping someone will help me with it. The deadline is in less than 22 hours as of now. Any help would be very good. Thank you in advance

Please include any additional information about yourself that you would like the Admissions Committee to consider when reviewing your application. (500 words max.)

High school has given me a good introduction to how business works. It has given me real life experience and allowed me to set a goal for the future. Through my business courses I have been able to understand the fundamentals of business. Leadership, teamwork, communication, decision making, and being competitive are a few of the business attributes I have acquired in the duration of my high school years. Being in the Sauder School of Business will help me further expand my knowledge and enable me to reach my ambitious goals.

The courses I have taken are accounting, entrepreneurship, marketing, macroeconomics and business computer applications. Each course came with a major project. However, accounting, entrepreneurship and macroeconomics were the most significant. In accounting I had to do book keeping for a company that the teacher made up. I was given invoices from the virtual company to book keep. This was good experience because I was doing what accountants do as a daily job. Entrepreneurship gave me many of the attributes listed above. The major project was to create a business plan from scratch. It required leadership, teamwork, communication and decision making. I was the leader of my group in making the business plan. As a group we decided on making a business plan for a café company. We chose that because we knew it'd be easy to get a loan for it and it's not as complicating as other businesses out there. In macroeconomics we were taught about buying and selling securities. This led the teacher into doing an activity that involved the stock market. The class was to compete in a real-time stock exchange simulation. In one month my portfolio has grown 528%. The most memorable moment from my business courses would be competing and winning in the stock exchange game.

My dream career would be finding a financial company that is successful and widely known around the world. After graduating from the Sauder School of Business I want to pursue in accounting

as a start to gain experience. I would like to climb my way up the ladder and become the CFO of the company and then create my own financial company. I believe that this would be a wise choice because I know I will have clients and I would have the experience and connections necessary to run it. When the business is successful I plan on establishing a private foundation that will donate to the countries that can't afford education. My goal would be to create schools and hire teachers to provide education to the countries in poverty. I strongly believe that education is the key in getting countries out of poverty. My dream goal may be ambitious but I feel confident that I can make it a reality.

I feel confident that I have the traits, ambitions and experience to be accepted. I hope in my stay at Sauder I will learn more about business, taught discipline and maybe even make some good business connections.

Writing Feedback / "What is love?" - It's the beauty of a rose, yet often vile as her thorns [7]

lol wow Andrew you are an amazing writer. You should be a moderator. Thank you so much for all that info. I wish I had your talent in writing.

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

Would anyone know what kind of topic I should start with for the concluding paragraph? I actually have no idea what I should write about. Any examples or suggestions?

Undergraduate / University of Calgary Biomedical Research Program Admissions Essay [4]

I think that the first sentence well at least this part "The Biomedical Program is by far my ideal choice, but if it was no longer a viable option," isn't needed as the question already asked you what you'd do if you weren't accepted. That way you can shave off a few words as surpassing the word limit is very serious. I think that some universities don't even bother to read it because you couldn't follow rules. Well that's my opinion good luck.

Undergraduate / "Qualities that make me successful in bachelor of science"-Deadline in >24 hours [10]

Lol well that's ok Kevin thank you so much anyways. I'm glad to see I didn't make too many mistakes so I'm pretty happy.

Undergraduate / "Qualities that make me successful in bachelor of science"-Deadline in >24 hours [10]

Would you also say that i should write more about qualities than real life experiences on the first one?

Undergraduate / "Qualities that make me successful in bachelor of science"-Deadline in >24 hours [10]

lol anyone? sorry for being pushy just the supplement is due in 6 hours.

Undergraduate / "Qualities that make me successful in bachelor of science"-Deadline in >24 hours [10]

Hi thank you so much Kyu but I used real life experiences because I think the university wants to see examples of those qualities. I am not too sure about it either perhaps someone else may know for sure. If anyone knows how I can improve it'd be great. Thank you in advance and Kyu I'll be sure to take a look at your essay in a bit.

Essays / Thesis Statement Critique/Review - Anthropology (Introduction of the plough) [6]

Is the whole thing you put there the thesis statement or only the first sentence? I was taught to have your thesis statement only 1 sentence long. If the whole thing is your thesis try to sum it up in one sentence

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

I have corrected the first question but if I can get some insight on the 2 other questions it'd be perfect. I'm feeling very unconfident right now. I'm relying on my supplemental to get into university. Any kind of help would be much appreciated. Sorry if I sound impatient and rude just I'm panicking a little because it's due tomorrow night.

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

How about the other 2 questions do you think they're fine? Especially the second question I'm scared I didn't fit the topic correctly

Graduate / Working for Fujitsu Consulting India - active leadership role at profession [3]

I find the second paragraph quite weak. "I understood that this project could not be completed if I depend on one or two major resources that are familiar with all modules. So I had to involve all my team members. Also we had limited resources. In addition we had no time to recruit new resources and train them. Also I understand that I would be difficult to meet the deadline if I share the work randomly to my team members as many of them are not familiar with all the modules." You should revise some words such as "so" and "also" in the beginning of sentences. Using also once to start a sentence is okay but 2 in a row is not a good idea and the word "so" should be avoided in essays.

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

"What makes a good leader" UBC Business Supplemental

This is my full supplemental with all 3 questions. Any help on them would be very nice. Thank you all in advance.

Describe what leadership means to you. What qualities do you have that make you a leader? (200 words max)

READ ABOVE

Describe and evaluate one experience, during the last four years, that has significantly influenced your academic goals. (200 words max)

My dad and I were watching an episode of how successful entrepreneurs live their daily life and how they contributed to the world. I was very impressed at how much leadership they possessed to create an internationally known business. Bill Gates has been my idol ever since because he's the most successful businessman in the world and also donates to his own private foundation to enhance health care and reduce poverty globally. After watching I have been dreaming that I will one day become a successful entrepreneur, and at the same time create my own foundation to help the world and the less fortunate. I donated to the Starlight Foundation of Canada for the terminally ill and never felt better because I know that I had made a child's day. I believe business would be right for me because I enjoy having a leadership role. Being the manager of my school store taught me that being a leader means I'll need to make some hard decisions. One time I had to decide whether to do the promotion before the Christmas break or after. I decided to do it after the break and I think it was the right choice.

Please include any additional information about yourself that you would like the Admissions Committee to consider when reviewing your application. (500 words max.)

In my high school years I have taken five business courses which gave me a lot of valuable information. I've taken an accounting course, marketing course, business computer applications course, macroeconomics course and entrepreneurship course. In those courses I have learned how to create spreadsheets, charts, balance sheets and even a business plan. I hope to make it into the Sauder School of Business and boost my business knowledge even more. After graduating from the Sauder School of Business I hope to utilize the valuable skills that I've learnt to start up my own business. I have a dream that I will one day create a business that's not only successful but will be able to contribute to countries in poverty. You can call me ambitious but I plan to open up a café and slowly expand to many destinations around the world. With the vast amount of knowledge I will have gathered I hope to turn the café into a successful café chain. When the company prospers, I hope to create my own foundation. My mission would be to create schools and provide teachers in places with poverty. I believe that education is a vital key in getting countries out of poverty. I feel confident that I have the traits, ambitions and experience to be accepted. I hope in my stay at Sauder I will be learn more about business, taught discipline and maybe even make some good business connections.

Essays / Thesis Statement for A Separate Peace Chapter 1-3 [3]

I think its a good thesis however the sentence seems to be run on. Perhaps make it shorter. I think you can end the thesis after the word "instinct".

Essays / Psychology Opinion Paper (pointers/suggestions needed) [3]

Topic could be how the brain controls our wants and needs

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

Thank you so much Kevin and I have corrected my paragraphs however, I surpassed the 200 words limit with 210. Do you know of something that I can cut off so it doesn't surpass the 200 words limit?

Writing Feedback / Technical Article: How GNU/Linux differs from Unix [4]

Never use the word "so" when writing an essay or try not to. Especially, as the first word of a sentence

Undergraduate / essay about more people prefer living alone than in the past [7]

I think that using a real life example or even an anecdote might be good

Undergraduate / 'Each course ended with a major project' - Describe what leadership means to you [18]

What kind of details am I missing? Examples would be great thank you in advance