Writing Feedback / "Learning is power" - toefl-why people go to colleges or universities? [9]

Many people attend colleges. They think it is necessary to study in colleges for starting to get a job. As a result, people know that getting a good education is most important for their future. However, the main reasons people want to go there include expansion of knowledge and gaining self-reliance.

First of all, when people go to colleges, they expand their knowledge. They choose their major, and then they learn from colleges. If they graduate, they will be a professional of their major. Some say that people can study alone, but that has limitations. For example, if you try to solve a difficult mathematics question on your own, you might not solve it in even a whole day. On the other hand, if you have the knowledge gained from a math class, you could solve it in a very short time. Colleges provide many kinds of opportunities including learning by teacher, peers, getting information from library, and so on, not just for securing a good job. Moreover, People can not live just bread and water. According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, people usually pursue to earn the esteem of the public and to achieve self-actualization beyond deficiency needs. Colleges are places where people are fulfill the demands of living a good life.

Furthermore, in colleges people learn how to live in society on their own. Before they go to colleges, parents or teachers take care of them. However, after they enter colleges, they have to do everything themselves such as washing their clothes, cleaning their room, taking care of bills, and so on. For instance, when they live in the dormitories, the dormitories have rules. They learn how to live in society by following these rules. If they do not keep the rules, they will get penalties, because they are not children but adults. Nobody can do their chores for them anymore, so they have to learn what their responsibilities are. They have to know that making errors and fixing them, is learning, and there are chances before they go to society. Society will not allow their mistakes.

To sum up, learning is power. People who have more knowledge than others can receive more opportunities and benefits. Also, colleges help to achieve self-fulfillment. I am totally sure that going to the colleges help people prepare for going out into society easily.

Writing Feedback / toefl--athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as libraries [11]

University athletic departments should receive the same amount of funding as university libraries.

Some of people say that university do not need to give more money to athletic department. However, I think that university should give athletic department the same amount of funding as university libraries. I have two specific reasons for my opinion. To invest in athletic make students be healty and it improve students' social skills.

First of all, university fund the same amount of money as libraries can make students do exercise more than before. Many students want to exercise for their health, but they can not do it well. Because they are hectic school' subjects and reports, and gyms are not close their dormitory and classes. It make them do exercise hardly. If university set more gyms and exercising place, students can do exerceise more easily. Not only the student stay healthy, but also the students increase achievement of their study. For example, I was that I caught a cold easily, and I was so tired easily when I was in my junior high school. I could not concentrate on my study. When I study, I kept running nose and stuff my nose. I sit over 2 hours on my desk, I could not keep stay their because my back was so hurt. While I started to exercise, I could sit more than before, and my score was increased in my school.

Moreover, sports activities foster students' social skills. Some of sports is one person can alone, but the others need to teamwork such as soccer, basketball, and so on. When they play together, they learn how much important following their rules, and they play the games they learn cooperation. According to some research, people who enjoy playing sports adapt to community more well than people do not enjoy playing sports. This is because enjoying sports people meet lots of obstacles when they play sports with the other, they learn how they solve the problems at that time. Likewise they treat thier problem in their school or work, and they keep a good relationship with their friends and co-workers.

In brief, some people think about funding money to athletic department is waste money, but it will bring to us lots of benefits. I definitely believe that the university invest athletic department as same amout as university libraries attiributes the students' study and their social skills.

Writing Feedback / Qualities of good co-workers - first of all, it is most important how they treat their work. [8]

I'm preparing toefl, can you feedback for me???

"What are the qualities of the good coworker?"

Our job is a second home and our co-workers are second family. We spend lots of time with our co-workers in our places of work. In my opinion, good co-workers have some of certain charateristics. There are willingness and positive attitude.

First of all, I think they have willingness to do work. If they do not want to do work, we can not work together. Because he or she do not finish his or her work on time. It is just his or her own work, it will not affect to us. However, if it is a project, our project will be delayed, and it will impact on lots of aspects such as our team's image made bad, we have to do over time work, and so on. When I had one presentation in my work, I had to prepare with same period co-worker. Thus we divided our subject for searching information before we make a source of presentation. Although one co-worker was so lazy, and she did not get any information until meeting that we made for preparing speech. As a result, we spent more time than we planned, I and another co-worker had a difficult relationship with her.

Also, positive attitude is necessary for a co-worker's good condition. An old saying in Korea is: "one good saying can pay for debt'. We would like to talk to smiling people and we prefer to talk with kind people. Those kinds of attitude or dispositions can mitigate conflict between co-workers. According to in the Ministry laber of Korean, people who have positive minds have less arguements than the others. Because of their attitude, if they create a good image to somebody, they can be forgiven easily. Even though they may have misunderstanding or miscommunication, they can solve the problems through conversing with the other people.

Finally, I believe people need to develop for willingness and positive attitude before they start to do work.