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Dec 30, 2010
Undergraduate / "playing worst-case scenarios in my head" - Emerson Supp Essay Title Of my Life [2]

Hey guys! I started this essay for emerson on what the title of my life would be. I want to add a little more to it. If you guys could give me some pointer that would be great. Thanks in advance.

I stared into my mother's eyes and for the first time in my life I saw nothing behind them. I knew instantly that something was wrong. As I helped her out of the McDonald's bathroom, fear began to set in. I quickly called an ambulance still not understanding what was going. All I knew is that the person that had been everything to me and had always protected me was slipping through my fingers. After the paramedics arrived, my life was put on pause. Till this day I do not remember what happened next. I remember playing worst-case scenarios in my head, but I do not remember the ambulance ride.

My world came back to reality when I was sitting next to my dad in the hospital and he was informing me that my mom had a stroke. She was alive and stable, but still could not speak or move well. Relief sunk in me, but deep inside there was still that notion that I could have lost the only person that has ever really meant something to me. I was thirteen.

I think that day I grew up into a more mature human being. From then on I took life much more seriously and started to think about other people more than just myself. My life did not have meaning until that point in my life. I realized that I had not done anything that my parents could truly be proud of. That day I vowed that I would do everything with much more effort than I did before. If it was in school, I was going to push myself to get that "A". If it was basketball, I was going to push myself to be the best team player.

So if I were to title my life right now, I would title it "Maritza", my mother's name. She has motivated me to be the best person that I could ever be. Whenever I am stressed about an exam and I feel like giving up, I think of my mom and how she overcame something that could have been much more terrible.

Today, my mom is healthier than ever. My goal is to make my parents proud in every aspect of my life. Emerson College is the next step in achieving this goal. With an education at Emerson, I know that I can go on and have a successful career.
cindykins   
Dec 29, 2010
Undergraduate / 'therapeutic movies' - Emerson College Supplemental Essay [3]

Hey. I would love some feedback on this short essay. Thanks in advance!

The question is why I choice my major.

Movies to me are therapeutic. When ever I have a fight with my parents, or fail an exam or just flat out have a bad day, I turn to a movie. I forget all of my problems with fun movies like Home Alone, Ferris Bueller's Day Off, and the Breakfast Club. I love how movies make you feel like you are a part of the story, and help you forget anything troubling for an hour and a half. So for me having a career in movies would not only be a dream come true but it would be a stress relief. Thus, my first choice major at Emerson is Media Studies. I would concentrate on producing. I know that with the help of Emerson College I will be able to bring more successful films to the world.
cindykins   
Dec 29, 2010
Undergraduate / "embarrassed that I can't speak good Chinese" - Stanford roommate essay [5]

I personally loved this note. I think it was straight to the point and not extremely long and run on. You definitely displayed who you are and I think if your roommate were to read this she would get a really good sense of who you are.

Great Job!
cindykins   
Dec 16, 2010
Undergraduate / "Success is a journey, not a destination." - Transfer to Boston University [3]

Hi. I am trying to transfer to Boston University and I started my essay but I would love so feedback if anyone can give me any. Thanks!

Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

"Success is a journey, not a destination." -Ben Sweetland
Movies are a medium where one can express herself and show her creativity. Movies can portray a vision and open up minds. Movies have the ability to touch someone in a way no other medium can. That is why I want to work in the film industry. In order to be successful, in this industry, I have to obtain the best education. Boston University is definitely my first choice. With its amazing location, internship opportunities and study abroad programs, BU will help me grow as a person and a student.

Boston is not only a beautiful city, but it has become one of the go-to-cities for big Hollywood movie productions as well as television shows. Some examples include: The Departed, Fever Pitch, and Legally Blonde and the successful television shows Boston Legal and Cheers. Therefore, having my home campus right in the middle of all the action would be beneficial. Not only would I be learning in the classroom, I would also get an amazing education by just walking the streets of Boston. In addition, the location of BU will help me with research papers as well as class projects. Boston is a city that will provide a great college experience and a productive education.

Internships are great ways students can experience hands-on work in the field that they choose. Boston University provides wonderful internships in the film industry where I can learn new skills and discover new abilities that I might not know I have. In addition, I would be learning with top professionals in the business, which can be very beneficial by leading to permanent job opportunities or recommendations for higher positions. Internships can also open my eyes to careers in the industries that I might want to pursue. Thus, an internship would be a valuable experience in my college years and in my life.

The United States is the largest market where movies are made, but there are many other countries that produce extraordinary films. With the study abroad program at BU, I will be able to experience different cultures and different styles of making films. More importantly, my resume will be very impressive when looking for a job. This program will help me learn different methods in filmmaking and other cultural issues not known in the United States. Additionally, BU offers a great Los Angeles Internship program where I will be able to work in the entertainment capital of the world. Therefore, studying abroad is a program that I would take advantage if admitted to BU.

Boston University is a remarkable school where I know I can obtain the education I need to later on pursue a career in the film industry. Its ideal location, internship opportunities, and study abroad programs will help me grow as a student and as a person. I hope to be admitted next fall.
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