Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: The American food budget (Pie Chart) [3]

The given pie chart was a survey about the amount of America spending on food in 2002, weighted as percentages.

From the graph, products such as meats, poultry, fishes as well as eggs portioned the biggest amount of a household's entire food expense, around a quarter of all. Dairy products and cereal & bakery made up 11% and 16% respectively. It is obvious that ingredients such as protein, starches products are more favored over the dining table; nearly half of total food budget were on these. The sources of vitamin and cellulose, fruits and vegetables made up 18% of total food expense. Beverages and miscellaneous food account for 9% and 15% separately, almost one quarter of every dollar had put in unnecessary dietary. Fats & oils as well as sugars and sweets made up relatively low expense of 7%.

The overall information does not present any abnormal consuming behavior, key nutrition such as protein, vitamin and fats had also been considered. Consumption on processed food and beverages, such as coffee, wine and tea all becoming increasingly prevalent in modern society.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK1: US Electricity out put during 1970 & 1984 [4]

Given pie charts compare output electricity based on variety sources in the United States between 1970 and 1984.

A glance of the graphs, it is clear that the majority of electricity production depended on exhaustible sources in both years, coal, natural gas and oil portioned 46%, 24.3% and 12.1% respectively in 1970, comprised more than 80% of the whole. Until 1984, although the need for power generated by natural gas and oil drop to half of original demanding, however, the usage of coal rose almost 10 percent. The most remarkable change was the use of nuclear, from 1.4% to made up ten times larger than in 1970. Interestingly, the adoption of hydroelectricity for power generation did not present its renewable value, the hydroelectric power of entire electricity production remained more or less the same in both years, at about 15%.

In conclusion, it is a well-known fact that resources such as coal, oil and natural gas are not always available. Therefore, it is predicted, the employment of renewable energy will become more urgent in the coming years.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: The Consumer Dollar : Where it goes. (Pie Chart) [2]

Thanks to all of the feedback.

The pie chart gives information about Americans' spending pattern in 11 broad categories.

It is obvious that food, drink & tobacco portioned the biggest amount of typical American expenditure, 23 cents per dollar. Dwellings and daily household expenses, each item accounted for 15%, transport and medical care made up 13% and 9% respectively. It is clear the mass of money been put in elements which are the most essential for an individual lives in modern society, total of these comprised a staggering weighting of one's earning, 3 quarters per dollar.

Personal welfare pursuing, clothes and jewelry as well as private business and foreign travel constitute 16% of total expenditure while only 2 % was invested on one's educational development. Religion, charity and personal care made up the remaining 3%.

It is assumed that the rising of living standard cause the personal well-being portioned certain ratio of an individual's total expenditure. Overall the given information does not depict any abnormal consuming behaviors.

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Writing Feedback / Whether save endangered species is a waste of valuable resources [NEW]

Topic:
Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources.
Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences.

Under a situation of finitude sources whether should we save endangered species or not present a dilemma lesson for modern human. Many people may question why spend money and put effort to save them? Even cite extinction is part of natural order, what make them special to be saved since countless species have come and gone. The following essay I will target on some of the reasons why they deserve to be saved.

First, although distinction does occur naturally, unfortunately the accelerating decline of our wild animals is less and less resulted to natural events. Most of dangers to wildlife are from habitat loss and degradation, environment pollution, the introduction of exotic (non-native) organisms, and overexploitation; all generally a direct result of human activities.

Second, conserve endanger species is not an entirely costly business but maybe a profitable action of humankind. Shark is one of notorious endangered species. Nevertheless, according to the recent scientific research carries out, the brain of shark may have constituent which can help human from mental deteriorating, and the venom of snakes has also been researched in medical fields. Protect and conserve diversity of natural is also value for human activities such as education, recreation and the most important is that it balanced the biological chain which is important for ecosystem.

Yet, the strongest argument of persevering endangered species is that all species has its intrinsic value to exit. Furthermore, since we are the only beings who have evolved by natural selection that led to possesses the ability to save the others, shouldn't we proud of this and exert the gift to protect the others?

In conclusion, even if saving endangered species has no readily goodness to us, does not mean it is not related to the whole planet's biological system. It is worthwhile to adopt this kind of action to prevent unforeseen loss.

Any suggestions are welcome. Please help me out. This is my first time to prepare IELTS essay writing, I'm afraid I misunderstood the meaning of the topic, especially I'm confused when should refer to both side, and when should refer to only one side.