Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Watching television broadcast - 'fertile land of numerous shows' [3]

With the skyrocketing boom of entertainment, audience now have a variety of recreational facilities at every night and every weekend. In this regard, belief has it that attending a live performance, namely, a play, concert or sport event is superior to watching television broadcast. In my opinion, I suppose the latter option is more preferable for a couple of reasons.

To begin with, enjoying the performance on television is rather advantageous, both in terms of time and money. Television programmes, for most of the part, technically start timely according to announced schedule. The time for a TV show just takes me about one or two hours; as for a live performance, I am, however, lost to a few more hours for preparation, for a taxi heading to the show and home. Also, enjoying a comfortable sofa at home costs me less than struggling for that at a stadium or a theatre with a expensive but rare ticket. Hence, when it comes to TV broadcast, it represents more convenience.

Furthermore, what makes a crucial difference is the additional information regarding the event via interpretation at home. In actuality, break between two period of a football match offers a perfect time for conversation among experts. It is passionately interesting and useful to listen to professional opinions around the match. This drives me to deepen my criticism ability, having a multi-sided view. Clearly, watching at home rules out disadvantages at a live show, such as limited vision or too noisy a crowd.

In addition to convenience and supplement information, programmes on air are quite variable in options that watchers will never be constrained. Should a live show do not meet my expectation, even disappoint my efforts to get there, I would be neither able to go home early nor move to other shows. This will never be a problem for a television where a vast amount of programmes is showed at the same time. Needless to say, the abundance of option significantly draws watchers' interest.

To sum up, I highly urge that people who like qualified entertainment watch shows or programmes on television. Not only does it offers convenience, it also accompany watchers with useful information. Moreover, television channels bring a fertile land of numerous shows.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL-Whether or not borrowing money from friends is good. [2]

Critical and fundamental to any sound relations is trust, and a precious friendship is no exception. In this regard, belief has it that borrowing money from a friend is somehow a threat destroying the peace among two parties. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the statement for a couple of reason.

To begin with, the ever best friend is the first one to stand by me in any context, more notably in case of plight. In actuality, I sometimes make friends with fair-weather ones due to the complex of society. They are people who, for the most part, come to me because of feeling lonesome or being able to make use of me. A true friend is different since he or she never shows withdrawal when I am in predicaments . Undoubtedly, times of financial difficulty are the best chances that enable me to recognize an authentic friendship.

Furthermore, having close friends means that I deserve the help and protection from them. At school, I am told at all times to behave well and treat peers at my most friendly. The question is, however, what a friendship is forged for, why a companionship is a must for every individual when I force myself not to rely on them in despaired periods. Friendship is apparently another shoulder where we can cry on and supposedly take care of each other. Hence, there exist no reason against borrowing money from a close person.

Finally, asking for financial help is a good signal that strengthens the friendship. Should my friend realize that I am in need of money, yet consistently refuse the fiscal support from them, he or she would be likely to be upset other than feel sympathetic. They easily assume that their role and our friendship make no sense to me, and they are secluded from my affairs. Needless to say, independence is a good thing, though, a little sharing or reliance is necessary to preserve a good relationship.

To sum up, it is imperative that a friendship be protected by ongoing efforts, even involving monetary matters. Not only does borrowing money from friends test the true friendship, it is also a rational action.

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Writing Feedback / Should English be the official language in Asia? [3]

Globalization currently becomes the mainstream development on a world scale, with the ongoing cooperations among various nations. For sometimes, it is suggested that Asians should share the same official language-English- with the rest of the world at the same time. However, I suppose the potential success of the plan is significantly doubtful for a couple of reasons.

For one thing, I do not expect a sizable population of Asia to considerate English to be a formal communication mean with exuberance of joy. Actually since time immemorial, Asian has flourished a diverse systems of traditions and cultures. Different countries gave birth to our own separate languages, and they are sustained primarily drawing on the self-esteem and national identity. An excellent example could be China where international tourists are unlikely to be welcomed at its most hospital unless they are able to speak little Chinese. Hence, achieving the whole continent's consent in claiming English as an official language would not meet much of the reality.

Another obstacle to the prospect of the dominating English over Asia is financial inadequacy as numerous less- developed countries are still in the war against poverty. In hope to popularize English as regionally as possible, more and more native teachers and more and more well-equipped schools must be in practice. This apparently draws to the confused monetary matters in the very era of worldwide fiscal crisis. Should the plan gain its popularity, financial sponsors would be of greater concerns.

Finally, what I put forward is that English should be exclusively in use for only formal and important conferences. It is, in actuality, easier to spread the usage of English for a decent number of population with prevailing educational systems. Moreover, world economy currently witnessed growing trades among countries, which directly foster Asians to adopt English as second or third languages. The quest of being proficient in English has increased than ever imagined. Therefore, choosing English as one of major languages in business would make perfect sense.

In conclusion, granting English to be the primary language in the region of Asia is far from approaching. The fundamental reason is that no country would neglect its nationalism for a western-rooted language, not mention to further financial constraints. What governments should take into consideration is the practice of using English solely in official events.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL- love marriage versus arranged marriage. [4]

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Arranged Marriage vs Love Marriage

Marriage is regarded as a precious relationship that every individual long for throughout life. In some countries, belief has it acceptably that the young must have their marital relations arranged by parents in hope for leading a decent life in terms of both welfare and social status. However, I, personally think a wedding with love brings about good things other than merely a transaction under the banner of marriage.

For one thing, couples living together for love are more likely to protect happiness permanently. In actually, undergoing a prolonged period of courtship enables a male and a female time to entirely understand each other, notably their positive things and weaknesses. A typical example could be a friend of mine who at the moment enjoys a happy family life with her boyfriend of five years. She asserts that getting along well with her fiance was of great importance, allowing her to conceive how the marriage would be and stamp out dangerous illusions about unrealistic romantics. Hence, love and essential preparations from both parties create a guarantee of a lasting happiness.

Aside from the happiness, respect and appreciation are crucial elements which collectively usher in a perfect marriage. It is because they come to each other drawing on a mutual understanding, in an ongoing attempt to build a happy life that spouses are willing to sacrifice his or her self-esteem for the protection of happiness. Also, there would not exist severe cases like domestic violence or divorce. Undoubtedly, equally caring instead of shouldering all duties on a particular one make great sense to marriage.

Another crucial reason as to why my marriage determination should be made on my own is that I have the right to be responsible for my life. The idea that the new generations should pursue our own dreams and follow whatever is right, as long as they do not go beyond moral borders is precisely what the society always clamor. This notion also holds the truth with marital decisions which should be carried on according to the consensus between the couples getting married.

In conclusion, listening to the heart and arriving at one's own matrimonial determination is what individuals should take into consideration. Not only does it consolidate the long-term relationship with happiness and respect, marrying the one I love also reflect my dreams and confidence.