Undergraduate / 'unique approach to education' - Northwestern Essay [2]

What are the unique qualities of Northwestern - and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying - that make you want to attend the University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?

There are many aspects of Northwestern that make it a perfect university: stellar academics, a gorgeous waterfront campus, quirky traditions like painting the Rock, division I sports teams to rout for. However, it is the McCormick School of Engineering's unique approach to education that is the greatest lure to me. McCormick has a commitment to not only teach the technical and analytical aspects of engineering but also creative and divergent thinking through a "whole brain" education. I know this whole brain thinking will be essential to become an inventor and innovator rather than a simple drone.

McCormick teaches its whole brain education with a variety of ways complete unique to Northwestern. Hands-on engineering is one such way. Northwestern students are taken take out of the classroom extremely early in their college career. While students at other universities have to wait until their senior year or even grad school to work on a major project, Northwestern students are given one during their freshman year. Through McCormick's Engineering Frist program, I will be able to take the theoretical knowledge I gained in class and apply to a real engineering problem for a real company. Through Northwestern various internships, co-ops and undergraduate research, I will have even more chances to do hands on engineering work.

Another way is through a truly broad education. At other engineering schools a broad education simply could be exposing students to the various subfields in a discipline or another branch of engineering. At McCormick however, I would be able to learn across several fields of study and colleges as if I was at a liberal arts college. This is especially important to me as a computer science major since my field cross with other disciplines so often.

Northwestern functions as more than simple place of learning. For four years, it will serve as my home and where I meet new friends. It is this purpose of college that attracts me to Northwestern expansive resident college system. The Slivka College of Science and Engineering excites me particularly. Slivka attracts students with similar interests in engineering, science, and technology as me which makes it a perfect place to meet new friends, find a teammate from Northwestern Design Competition, or start up a conversation up quantum mechanics. Slivka is more than a collection of nerds living together though; it is a tightknit community bounded by shared experiences. Slivka sponsors hundreds of events for its members ranging from lunches to tailgates to dances to movie nights. Slivkans participate in these events to maintain their membership which guarantees that the 130 residents of Slivka Hall share common memories. These shared experiences create the foundation strong bonds of fellowship between members and form the community of Slivka that attracts to this resident college. The Slivka community extends beyond the undergraduate community as well to include graduate students and professors. These Fellows of the college host fireside lectures, peer to professor lunches, and even seminars for credit available exclusively for Slivkans. In addition to the chance to learn, these Fellow events would allow me to get to know my professors on a more personal level and make the entire college experience more personal. Northwestern offers me the chance to be a part of a tight knit and dedicated community and its one of a kind education will teach me to think and analyze like an engineer. It is truly a perfect college experience.

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Undergraduate / 'to refine my computer science skill' - Cornell arts and sciences- comp sci major [3]

College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study. (500 words)

High pitch shrieks blast through my parents' home office. Loud beeps and buzzing join the shrieks to form a head-ache inducing racket. For three minutes, I endure the hellish symphony's assault on my seven year old ears. Finally, "Success!" flashes before me in size 18 bolded Ariel font. My reward for passing this trial, a white screen that covers my computer monitor. Splashes of blue and black form at the top of the screen and expand into shapes and pictures. Three more minutes of waiting and I am sitting face to face with the AOL homepage. The world was at my fingertips. With only a few key strokes, I could access a wealth of information greater than any library. Another combination of keys and I could communicate with someone on the other side of the world at speeds that would make divine Hermes look inefficient. Yet another and I could delve in to fantastical world full of magic and monsters. The power and possibilities of computers memorized me as a child and still do as a teenager.

I knew entering high school that I wanted to take my childhood fascination with computers and create a career. I took classes in everything from multimedia design to computer network working, trying to find my niche in the massive world of computing. I found it my junior year when I took my first computer science class. Computer science was the prefect equilibrium between math and logic for my mind to flourish. Programming problems felt like solving a puzzle and required true intuition. There were no formulas I could plug information into and get the answer. Outside a few basic operations, I had to create everything from scratch to solve a problem. This meant solving problem required a true understanding of how a computer accepts and processes information. But with "a brain that works like a CPU already" -as my teacher described me- this understanding came naturally and code flowed seamless from my thoughts onto the computer screen.

Cornell's College of Arts and Sciences is the perfect place me for to refine my computer science skill. Here I would be able to study under not only the greatest minds in computing but also actual innovators working on groundbreaking research. Through Independent Research or a project-based class such as Robot Learning, I would be able to do my own research and solve a real problem facing the world of computing while still an undergraduate. However, Cornell truly differentiates itself from other top research universities with its expanse of course offerings beyond technical knowledge of computing. Cornell's Department of Information Systems and Department of Technology and Science Studies offer a unique view at computing through a social standpoint and the eyes of the user. Cornell Abroad also offers me a chance to experience a different culture with a different exposure technology and see how that affects the culture's view of it. Cornell's college of Arts and Sciences offers me a unique education that would make me a well-rounded computer scientist.

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Undergraduate / 'the flash of images on a computer monitor' - Cornell engineering essay [8]

ESSAY PROMPT: Engineers turn ideas (technical, scientific, mathematical) into reality. Tell us about an engineering idea you have or your interest in engineering. Explain how Cornell Engineering can help you further explore this idea or interest.

Many of my childhood memories are filled with the flash of images on a computer monitor and the click of typing. Computers mesmerized me with their power and capabilities. I was amazed by technologies like the Internet, which allowed me to view a near endless supply of information and connected me to other computer users from around the globe while sitting at home, or robots, which took information from the digital world and changed the physical one. As I grew older, my appreciation for computers changed from amazement at what computers did to what they could be made to do.

Every month, there are ground breaking innovations in computing. This spirit of advancement is unique to field of computer science. Computers' near infinite ability to be improved feeds this spirit. There are no unbreakable rules of physics preventing the progress of computers. The availability of memory and processing power are the only limits to computer scientist's work. Both of these limits are increasing at an exponential rate insuring that computers scientists' horizon of possibility is always expanding forming the perfect environment for new innovations and inventors.

Also, there is a practicality to engineering, particularly computer science, uncommon to other fields of study. From medicine to business to entertainment, computers are used everywhere and their presences only continues to grow. The widespread use of computers ensures that the general population will benefit from innovations rather than just the PhD holding community. Computer scientists have a unique chance to make society-improving advancements.

Cornell College of Engineering is the perfect place to refine myself into a computer scientist, an engineer, and an innovator. Cornell's world renowned curriculum offers breath in addition to depth. Since computers are used with so many other fields, a board education is especially important for computer scientist. The Study Abroad program offers a chance to broaden my education even further. Through it, I will be able to experience a culture that experiences technology in a different way and gain a greater global perspective for my own work. Cornell's most appealing aspect however is the myriad of research opportunities. Through independent research or a project-based class such as Robot Learning, I will be able to take a real problem facing the world of computing and solve it while still an undergraduate.

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