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sushiking   
Apr 1, 2014
Essays / Confused on list of sources and what order to put them in [4]

Hi, I'm not sure what you're asking. Are you asking about guide for references list (List of sources) or in-text citation?
Normally, referencing guide is arranged in alphabetical order based on the authors' name.
sushiking   
Apr 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison; Compare & Contrast [2]

The instruction is to compare and contrast between Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison in academic style.

Science and technology has contributed significantly in the society. Invention such as incandescent light bulb, which was created in 1879 by Thomas Edison, provided convenience to people and is still widely used (The Oxford Companion to United States History, 2001). Through the persistence of scientist in the nineteenth century, a large number of device had been invented during that period of time and has brought remarkable improvement to the society. This essay will examine the lives of two famous scientists in the nineteenth century, Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison. It will first detail their early lives, then describe their contributions to the society and finally emphasize on their recognition.

Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison had different biography before their significant discovery. With regard to education received, Albert Einstein was different from Thomas Edison. Albert Einstein received formal education where he spent his secondary education at Aarau in Switzerland and entered Swiss Federal Institute of Technology in Zurich at 17 year old (A Dictionary of Scientist, 1999). Thomas Edison, on the other hand, was expelled from his school due to his constant questioning in his class and received informal education during his childhood life where he was taught mostly by his mother (The Cambridge Dictionary of Scientists, 2003). When childhood behavior was considered, both Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison showed enthusiasm and curiousity towards different science field. For example, Albert Einstein was excited with theoretical-physical conceptual project whereas Thomas Edison showed early interest towards explanation of how everything works, specifically the principle behind a working mechanism. Other than that, in term of childhood experience, Albert Einstein differs from Thomas Edison. Thomas Edison worked as a newspaper seller and food vendor on the local railroad at the age of twelve (Encyclopedia of American Studies, 2010). He learnt telegraphy and worked as a telegraph operator during the American Civil War (The Cambridge Dictionary of Scientists, 2003). On the contrary, Albert Einstein spent most of his childhood life in school education and served in Swiss Patent Office in Bern after his graduation from Swiss Federal Institute of Technology (ibid).

The contributions of Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison is still applied in various field in the society. When comparing between Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison, an aspect which should be considered is the field they contributed to. Albert Einstein contributed mostly in the field of Physic where he explained Brownian motion, photoelectric effect and the special theory of relativity which was further derived by him to obtain equation e=mc2, relating mass and energy (The Cambridge Dictionary of Scientists, 2003). On the other hand, Thomas Edison contributed mostly to the society with his invention of incandescent light bulb. To be more precise, the light bulb is more applicable in the society compared to the theories and principles introduced by Albert Einstein. In term of application of their contribution, Albert Einstein's special equation, e=mc2, was more applicable in specific field, Physic, in which electricity was generated through the understanding of the equation and nuclear chain reaction. With regard to Thomas Edison, his invention of the incandescent light bulb is considerably more applicable in a wide range of field. In other words, the light bulb is significantly more accessible by the public compared to Einstein's Physic theories.

Scientists of the nineteenth century should be remembered and appreciated for their contribution towards the world. It is generally accepted that both Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison are famous scientists. In term of Nobel Prize, Albert Einstein received one for his contribution to the field of Physic ( The Oxford International Encyclopedia of Peace, 2010). Although Thomas did not receive a Nobel Prize, he was known as 'the Wizard of Menlo Park' due to his amazing invention of light bulb and phonograph (The Crystal Reference Encyclopedia, 2005). Other common type of recognition include publishing of books about both scientists.

To summarize, both Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison were well respected as great scientist who did not give up when facing difficulties such as failure in experiment or poor family background. For example, Thomas Edison faced numerous failures when he was inventing the light bulb. However, he persisted and went through a significant amount of trial and error testing before finding the suitable material to be used as filament in the light bulb. As a conclusion, both scientists came from a relatively poor childhood environment, yet their persistence in their career lead them to their remarkable discoveries.
sushiking   
May 15, 2012
Writing Feedback / Don't stereotype - One should never judge a person by external appearance [NEW]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

" Don't judge a book by its cover ". From the adage, it is clearly shown that we should not judge a person by it's external appearance. Although some may oppose this thinking, however, I strongly agree that this dictum has its own point.

External appearance is not consistent. By this I mean, through cosmetics these days, a person can change his or her appearance easily. To be more precise, a person can change his or her external appearance easily. However, what doesn't change is his or her heart and inner personalities. No matter how a person alters his or her external appearance, his or her mouth is forever speaking what lies in the heart. Therefore, we should not depends totally on external appearance to judge a person.

People nowadays tend to be stereotype. A person who has a stern face and tattoo will be considered as someone bad. Meanwhile, a person who dresses up neatly with a friendly smile that lit up the entire being will be considered as someone good. In my view, all these assumptions are completely unreasonable because what we see on the outer surface doesn't really reflects his inner attitudes and personalities.

Inner appearance is what matter the most in one's life. To sum up, I strongly agree that one should never judge a person by his or her external appearance.
sushiking   
May 11, 2012
Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay "Work by hand OR machine" [9]

I think the first paragraph is good. Better than the first one.. :)

This is the main reason whyTherefore I likeprefer to work, using machine. (In early days, there were no machines no technology was developed as today so people used to work by hand.) I don't think you need this...

In my view, doing work by machine is much more convenient and faster

Albeit these machines are part of expenses, it's worth it as those machines save times

I am in the habit of using these machines. I cannot imagine my life without machines. It will be hard to live without machines. ( This won't helps in your score, please don't write this )

Devices like computer, Xerox machines and Scanner these are machines which are very useful in our daily office works

Be careful with all those grammar mistakes and sentence structures.. Thanks
sushiking   
May 11, 2012
Writing Feedback / With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more info... [2]

Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Due to rapid growth of technology nowadays, great and sophisticated devices had been created. The growing technology has spread its tendrils to various fields, from educations to industrial. In education, technology has provided students nowadays with electronic devices like iPad or iBook, where students can learn more information and learn it faster than before. Therefore, I staunchly agree that with the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.

With the invention of iPad and iBook, students no longer need to study through textbooks. Just some touches in those devices could get the students towards the topics they are teaching in the class. This could literally boost the enthusiasm in students to study and bring tremendous amount of pleasure in studying. Despite that, students will be more eager to learn and less likely to snooze in class.

Besides, technical and mechanical knowledge in these days enable the creation of electronic dictionary, where students no longer have to depends on the thousands- paged dictionary. In fact, students can search words through electronic dictionary which is much faster compared to flipping pages in the dictionary. Other than that, educational games, created through technology, has provided a platform for students to study online without getting bored.

Undoubtedly, technology has constantly showered the world with complicated, yet useful creation which literally helped millions of people, either in their education or daily chores. Thus, I agree that with the assistance of technology, students these days can learn more information and learn it more quickly.
sushiking   
May 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'The exploration and development of safe alternative to fossile fuels' -My IELTS [10]

For this, many people and governments think that replacing these types of fuels with clean energy resources must be viewed as the most important concern in the world

In my own opinion, this matter is undoubtedly one of the most crucial problems in these days since it can impact our lives in various facets. which will be discussed in this essay .

So fast. I'm taking my IELTS on the 9th of June... Wish you luck.. :)
sushiking   
May 4, 2012
Writing Feedback / education system to the development of a country [3]

First of all, policies of development and management of the government critically affect to the prosperity of a country

In addition, Vietnam has attracted a large amount of foreign investment cash flow, estimated 11 billion USD in 2011, which brings profits to companies, increases amount of taxes paid for the government and also create more jobsopportunities for workers.

A country that has good diplomacy can get benefits tobenefits both politic and economy
sushiking   
May 3, 2012
Writing Feedback / I prefer moving in search of a better place, rather than staying in one place [NEW]

Question: Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support you opinion.

The thriving development of technology has brought along all kinds of transportation medium that allows human to travel a long distance in just a blink of an eye. However, some people just like to stay in one place, while some like to move from places to places, looking for a more conducive environment and community. Personally, I prefer moving in search of a better place.

Life, as we see it, could be compared to a storybook. Without a climax in the story, there is no way that the storybook can be a good one. Similarly, people should live their lives to the fullest by constantly pursuing the things they want.For instance, a better job, house, community and even climates. Life will be meaningless if we just stay in one place, watching the sun rises and sets everyday without a single minor changes in everything around you.

Besides, the technology nowadays has brought us all kinds of transportation whether through air, sea or land. Consequently, it will not be a burden to travel from places to places as the contemporary transportation system has constrained the, huge wide world before, into a much smaller one, where people can just travel around the world in, approximately, 80days.

People should learn to live their live, exploring and experiencing different kind of circumstances. To sum up, I prefer moving from continents to continents in search of another place because there's still a whole new world waiting for me to be explored.

Please leave comments and you opinion on how can I improve my essay.. :) Did I off- topic..?
sushiking   
May 3, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'Finding my Mother' - TITLE BASED ON "A MEMORABLE DAY" [3]

In the year of 2011, one summer day, I decided to do research to see if I can find more information on my missing mother of ten years ( who had been missing for ten years )

My husband and I were very excited and were looking forward towards the trip that we both had planned to leave as soon as possible.

my mother was left to do most of the household chores and to pay most of the bills.

She seemed to consistently have an inviting aura about her anytime she walked into a room. (so, she had this inviting aura when she walked into a room?)

This is all I can.. :) Thank you.. Hoe this helps..

Hehe..
sushiking   
May 2, 2012
Essays / Starting an essay on too much attention to the personal lives of famous people [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

Any ideas on how should I write this essay piece? Thank You..
sushiking   
May 2, 2012
Scholarship / 'Training in the USA is essential for my future' - Study Objective [2]

I would like to study in USA so that I could complete a Master's degree program in order to achieve proficiency in my career. There is no doubt that United States is experienced in creating famous novels all over the world. Thus, I will like to study Creative Writing in USA to enhance my writing skills. Creative Writing is the field that I liked and wanted to make a career in. A master's program on Creative Writing in the USA will definitely helps me to get valuable international experiences, working skills, and grow professionally and personally.

You should pay more attention to your sentence structure and how you arrange all the point so that it doesn't looks messy... :) Just my opinion. Thank You..
sushiking   
May 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS: What are some important qualities of a good supervisor(boss)? [NEW]

IELTS: What are some important qualities of a good supervisor ( boss )? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important.

Being a good supervisor is not as easy as we thought. A good supervisor will need to have abilities and skills that partakes elements of leadership and management. Besides, a successful supervisor is surely one who listen to the heart of his or her employees and receives feedback as a step towards improvement.

An important quality that a good supervisor should have is leadership. Leadership is the ability to lead and guide others by showing examples and demos. One of the world greatest leader is Steve Jobs. Despite his wonderful ideas and strong management skills, he is now considered a legend in the history book of leaders. Steve, a man who always keep to his own fashion by wearing black shirt accompanied by a blue jeans every time when he go on stage, had showed his great leadership skills in managing the Apple Inc. which thrives over the past few years under his governance.

Furthermore, a good boss should have the quality of " action always speaks louder than words". He or she should always be the one who acts first in any circumstances to show examples to employees. In the other hand, a leader who only knows to criticize and does nothing is of no use and is not qualified to be a leader. A leader should be one who takes the lead like a shepherd leading his or her sheep.

Leaders are everywhere, waiting to be discovered. However, good leaders aren't that easy to find. To conclude, great leaders are absolutely essential to guide and to lead humankind towards a better and harmonic life.

// Please comments on how I can improve my essay, Thank you.
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