tormented chap
May 13, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay. International music vs traditional ('music is vital to us') [6]
What do you mean by International Music?
What do you mean by International Music?
tormented chap
May 13, 2012
Writing Feedback / With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more info... [2]
Due to rapid growth of technology nowadays , great and sophisticated deviceshad been created . The growing technology has spread its tendrils to various fields, from educations to industrial . In e ducation, technology has provided students nowadays with electronic devices like iPad or iBook, where students can learn more information and learn it faster than before. Therefore, I staunchly agree that with the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly.
Besides, technical and mechanical knowledge in these days enable the creation of electronic dictionary, where students no longer have todepends o n the thousands- paged dictionary. In fact, students can search words through electronic dictionary which is much faster compared to flipping pages in the dictionary. Other than that , edu cational games, created through technology, has provided a platform for students to study online without getting bored.
Undoubtedly, technology has constantly showered the world with complicated, yet useful creation which literally helped millions of people, either in their education or daily chores.Thus, I agree that with the assistance of technology, students these days can learn more information and learn it more quickly.
Besides, technical and mechanical knowledge in these days enable the creation of electronic dictionary, where students no longer have to
Undoubtedly, technology has constantly showered the world with complicated, yet useful creation which literally helped millions of people, either in their education or daily chores.
tormented chap
May 12, 2012
Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay "Work by hand OR machine" [9]
From day first,man has been striving to make his life comfortable.Over the centuries,people have thought of comfort as the ultimate goal of their lives.To achieve this end,they have used both their mental and physical energies regularly.Now,the human race has reached a stage where it can utilize a lot of things,quite effectively,for its own purpose.A major portion of these things is composed of the machines that man has been able to invent by using scientific techniques.With the advancement of technology,a question has arouse whether these machines are capable of doing the day to day activities of humans or man should do his work by his own bare hands?I m of the view that machines can perform a lot of activities more suitably and perfectly than human.
*Its only the opening paragraph...I will write the rest later.*
From day first,man has been striving to make his life comfortable.Over the centuries,people have thought of comfort as the ultimate goal of their lives.To achieve this end,they have used both their mental and physical energies regularly.Now,the human race has reached a stage where it can utilize a lot of things,quite effectively,for its own purpose.A major portion of these things is composed of the machines that man has been able to invent by using scientific techniques.With the advancement of technology,a question has arouse whether these machines are capable of doing the day to day activities of humans or man should do his work by his own bare hands?I m of the view that machines can perform a lot of activities more suitably and perfectly than human.
*Its only the opening paragraph...I will write the rest later.*
tormented chap
May 12, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS- SHOULD FOREIGNERS RESPECT LOCAL CUSTOMS OR VISE VERSE [5]
You have a very good say on the subject but I think you should have done it in 2 paragraphs or a maximum of 3.The conclusion is good and can be made better.
You have a very good say on the subject but I think you should have done it in 2 paragraphs or a maximum of 3.The conclusion is good and can be made better.
tormented chap
May 9, 2012
Writing Feedback / Gay marriage should not be legalized because it destroys the meaning of family [3]
Well,I am of the view that there should be freedom and liberty for everybody.It will be like depriving people from their rights if we ban or try to ban gay marriages on the ground that its immoral or anything.I personally feel that it will give a positive edge to one's personality if he gets the man of his choice so gay marriage should be legalized.
Well,I am of the view that there should be freedom and liberty for everybody.It will be like depriving people from their rights if we ban or try to ban gay marriages on the ground that its immoral or anything.I personally feel that it will give a positive edge to one's personality if he gets the man of his choice so gay marriage should be legalized.
tormented chap
May 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'he must not cheat..' -Write a paragraph about qualities you want from your ideal man [3]
No man in this world is perfect.Every person is born with some defect and shortcoming.Shortcomings which none of us is willing to accept.Shortcomings that we don't like to be in our partner,co-worker,colleague or any other relation.Everybody wants to have the friend of his choice.A friend,whose personalty proves an amalgamation of one's ideal traits.I am no exception.
I want my ideal person to have the qualities of intelligence,sincerity,loyalty,courage,valor,self-confidence and integrity.To me,these are the most important ingredients which I will want from my ideal person.
No man in this world is perfect.Every person is born with some defect and shortcoming.Shortcomings which none of us is willing to accept.Shortcomings that we don't like to be in our partner,co-worker,colleague or any other relation.Everybody wants to have the friend of his choice.A friend,whose personalty proves an amalgamation of one's ideal traits.I am no exception.
I want my ideal person to have the qualities of intelligence,sincerity,loyalty,courage,valor,self-confidence and integrity.To me,these are the most important ingredients which I will want from my ideal person.
