Writing Feedback / IBT - Studying abroad studying abroad is rewarding, pros and cons [2]

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Please help me with my essay.

Lots of young people in my country concern about studying abroad. Many of them yearn about achieving academic skills in the developing countries. I also have a exhaustive plan to continue my education in the U.S.A. I think it is a big chance to be independent and it is also a good chance for finding many new job oportunities. On the other hand, I think living in an industrial country may cause alot of rigors and difficulties.

First of all, when you travel to a new country and you are away of family, It is the first time that you understand the value of having your family nearby. You must live independent and this will teach you lots of skills. As a case in point, some of men do know nothing about cooking. First they try to just eat in restaurants; then they find out that eating home-made foods will be more desireable. It will make them more enthusiastic an eager about cooking and foods.

Second, learning fresh technics in the industrial universities followed by job oportunities. In developed country universities have a strong connection to the industry. For example when you finish your study in chemistry, many refineries send invitations to you inorder to hire fresh employees . After several years working, you can travel back to your country and launching your own oil-refinery company.

Third, it is tough to comminucate to native people in the first step. You have no friend in the first, and it can make you frustrated or homesick. that brings lots of social problems for you. You will be more prone to the physical and mental deseases. It can adversly affect your learning process.

To sum up briefly, because of aforementioned reasons, albeit difficults at times, studying abroad is rewarding. The is nessessary to experiance education in developed country and learn their knowledge inorder to rebuild our society opulant.

Writing Feedback / IBT writing - the happiest era in our life is our childhood [3]

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"Which duration of your life was the happiest part ?" To answer this question you should review your life . I agree with that childhood is the happiest time of my life. Children have no responsibility and they have an exhuastive support by their parrents They do not feel any rules against their freedom .In childhood its first time that you can experience lots of new feelings.

When you are child , you have no responsibility and because of that you have no stress .For instance you could not find anybody that ponishes a child for sleeping late in the morning .Our parrents prepared our needs .

Besides , there is no laws that make children denied to do what they wants . As a case in point in my childhood I was free to play games , to eat food, whenever I want . I remember that my bigest concern in that time was that my video games were saved without faults.

The third point is that many things is new for a child. He/she will find the world so beautiful with a lot of unkown objects . For example , I remember my first friend in the kindergarten . After we get friends to each other we had a great feeling . Sleeping on the grasses for the first time is one of the perfect memory in everyone's mind.

To sum up briefly , the aforementioned reasons illustrate that the happiest era in our life is our childhood .We had no responibility and we have lots of free time to do what ever we want .

Writing Feedback / IBT 'the best epoch in everyones life' - college time [5]

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What is the best years in your life ? For answering this question you will need review your life events. In my view my colledge years was the best time in my life because of serveral respects . I learnt lots of social skills synchronous academic lessons. I found my best friends in my college and suffice it to say that my best life events take a place in that duration.

I think college is the first time you can found yourself independent from family and you must make pivotal decissions for your life . Beside you learn lots of new educational tasks , You have a big oportunity to experiance lots of social situation and you will learn how to treat with others. For instance , I remember that in that age I experianced that when you respects others , they will respect you back.

Thorughout my life , I have been lucky to have a lots of good friend and I found massive percents of them in my college .Usually, people in the same college have same race and culture backround and they can understand each other in a better way. As a case in point I my friendship with Erfun ,one of my favorite friends , is made when we were first grade of colledge . From that age we always tell the truth to each other and It makes our relationship so strong.

The primary reason that I love that time so much is that It reminds me lots of perfect event. Due to being energitic in that age , I done lots of fun but jeopardious activites that are my best memories todays. For instance , I took my father car and drove it without licence . I took my friends and we sang all the way to the Western Park .

To sum up briefly , I tend to say that college years are the best time in my life and I think It is the best epoch in everyones life . If you did not go to the college , you miss a magnifisent part of your life .