Undergraduate / Forrest Gump/Biology/new environment; NYU Sup /Intrigues/Academic interest/Why NYUAD? [3]

Here are my NYU supplements, please tell me which one do you think is better(Number 1), and the logically or gramatically awkward places.

You can choose one of this to comment, feel free to be blunt.

Thanks a lot!

1. What intrigues you?

Forrest Gump, a character who showed me the beauty and wonder of life. I can still recall that unforgettable scene. Once in Vietnam, he rushed back into the bush under fierce bombardments to find his friends. Regardless of the falling bombs around him, he kept running, with no fear. The wounded on his back, one by one, narrowly got out of death. Perhaps he is foolish and reckless, yet with his naĂŻve belief in life and love for his family and friends, he lives a better life than anyone else.

After watching, I sitting on bench, touched and awed at Gump's eventful and colorful story. I felt an impulse of giving my Mom a big hug, for she has taught me, accompanied me all through my life, but I never showed her my gratitude. His belief inspired me to value every single thing I encounter. No matter it is good or bad, each of them has made who I am. Bad things surely are frustrating, but whenever I think of giving up, the rigid but sincere smile of Gump emerged in my mind, saying his famous quote "Life was like a box of chocolate, you never know what you're going to get". Then, once again, I got the strength to keep it on, to chase for the dream, as Gump does.

2. Academic interest?

Vividly I remembered, once hiking on a mountain. I saw a bee collecting nectar on a flower. Out of curiosity, I sneaked close and looked at its work. Seeing the tiny pollens covered all over the bee [...]

Undergraduate / "Love for biology and environment"; NYU Supplement, What is your academic interest? [6]

A. NYU's global network provides students with hundreds of academic areas of interest for students to cultivate their intellectual curiosity and to help achieve their career goals. Whether you are entirely undecided about your academic plans or you have a definitive program of study in mind, what are your own academic interests? Feel free to share any thoughts on any particular programs or how you might explore those interests at NYU on any of our campuses. 1500 Characters

The mystery of our living environment, the life of each unique creature and how human get along with them, this is a question relating to our future and also the most intriguing knowledge to me. In junior high school, first time learning about the origin of life and the development of Earth, I noticed my love for animal and natural environment immediately. Each time, when I saw the "behaviors" of animals and plants I learned in class, truly happen on mountains, in parks, even the small garden in school. I was amazed and excited, uncontrollably having an impulse of sharing this finding to all people, to show them the wonderful things around us, which has long been ignored by most.

The understanding of Mother Nature teaches me to look at the world with curiosity and a whole new viewpoint. Propelled by my passion, I chose to attend the class focusing on medicine & biology in high school, where I learned to conduct my own biological experiments and the logical methods of research. Also I took part in a variety of activities, like mountain-climbing, beach-cleaning and club, gradually building up my knowledge on different kinds of creatures and ecosystems. After three years in high school, being more determined to pursue my love for natural environment, I believe NYU, a university with connection to the world, and advanced research opportunities, will be the place where I can bring myself to the next level.

I try to talk about my love to explore the wilderness and Mother Nature.
I want to make it look more sincere and passionate, please tell me how you see my work. Be as critique as you can!!

Really appreciate it!

Writing Feedback / 'Guitar is my friend' - Essay on my hobby of playing guitar [4]

Here is my essay. 139 Words long, 820 Characters

Pluck the strings in order, thumb, index, ring, middle, and all over again. After the prelude, the rhythm follows, with a pick in hand, strum without restraints, just play out whatever tunes pop up in my mind. Guitar is my friend. When worn-out by the stress of life, frustration in school, or disagreement with family, it's always the best remedy. My hands are on it, my fingers shift naturally on different frets. In that very moment, listening to the harmony of six strings and humming the tunes in my mind, my mind sifted through all the complication of life. While playing, I can't help but smile uncontrollably and follow the rhythm. The happiness and music helps me regain my strength and reset myself back in order, forget all the negative emotion, and carry on plucking thumb, index, ring, middle.

I try to write it in a really sincere way, so I really need others' review to see if I have made it.
Just share your first thoughts and tell me your ideas, please be critique.
And do I have to make it longer to use up all the space, if yes, what things need further description?
Really appreciate your help!!