Undergraduate / My Escape; Common App; Experience of failing [2]

My revisionof my Common App Essay, this was said to be redundant and too long.

I tried to make some modifications, please tell me your opinions about the content, and If you feel the sentences are weird,
no matter in logics or grammar, feel free to say it bluntly. Thank you!!

My Escape
Looking at my classmates making their presentations confidently, frustrations and regrets engulfed me. Not feeling jealous but remorseful, I despised myself letting the chance slip out of my grip, but all was in vain.

In the Biology Club I attended in the tenth Grade, freshmen students needed to do their own research, to get the qualifications for leading the club the next year. Propelled by my strong interest in the activities of the club and passion for bird-study, I made up my mind to amaze everyone with my work. For the following two months, I buried myself in stacks of books, and collected related information from the Net. I made this job my top priority in life, but only to be shocked by the stunning truth later.

Time slipping away, it was then that I found I was actually getting nowhere in my work. This research would decide my future school life and such stress had become an obstacle that stopped me from making the first step out. Naively, I chose escaping as my solution. I expected the countless "Tomorrow" to be my remedy and succumbed to my own laziness while faced with difficulties. When I finally noticed the reality, the time had run out, and I could do nothing but let go.

After the presentation, other than frustrations, I started to recall the time when preparing for the research. What caused me to run away from the challenge? It was not a tough task. All I needed was a constant endeavor; however, what I had done was just relentless pondering and planning, never had I really put it into real practice. And such passiveness has caused my failure. Warned by this experience of significant failure, I got to know myself better and changed the passiveness I once had.

In the new semester, resolved to be more spontaneous, I pushed myself with a belief--"Do it, I may fail; but escape, I won't even get a chance to fail" I strived to find myself opportunities to work as a volunteer or participate in sports contest, and gradually my life became busy with different tasks and activities, along with more difficulties. However, this time I finally dared to confront them. Regardless of the result, I put every effort to the things I was doing. Indeed, very tiring, but the joy of pursuing and progressing every day has made me more confident towards challenges. Whether failed or succeeded, I could feel a great sense of achievement, because I had no regrets. And this was all I needed to know to keep going.

Thanks to the failure, I detected my problem, and picked up the positive attitude that has made my high school life colorful with numerous intriguing events and activities. The lesson I learned from my escape propelled me to pursue my own ambitions with courage and enthusiasm. There was a time, when challenges got near, I ran away, but now, I am running towards them.

Undergraduate / "My Escape"; Common App; The Experience of failing and how I changed! [5]

My Escape
Looking at my classmates showing their presentations confidently, frustrations and regret engulfed me. Not being jealous but remorseful, I asked myself" Why give up?"
I tried to recall what caused my failure, but all were in vain.

In the Biology Club I attended in tenth Grade, First-year students needed to do their own research, for the qualification of leading the club next year. Propelled by my strong interest in arranging the club and passion for bird-study, I made up my mind to amaze everyone with my work. For the next two months, I buried myself with dozens of books, eagerly collecting information from Net, making this project my top priority in life, but only to be shocked by the stunning truth.

Time slipping away, it was then I found that I had been lying to myself with my effort. Almost nothing of my work has been done. The significance of this research, deciding my future school life, was such that I hesitated to make the first step. Escaping into the shelter of procrastination seemed the best solution, expecting the countless "Tomorrow" to be my remedy, compromising to the ambition I had. Indulged in the temporary relief, it gradually led me into the depths of despair.

After the presentation, except frustrations, I started to recall the time when preparing the research, what caused me to run away from the challenge? The whole thing was not hard. It just needed a constant endeavor; however, all I did back then was just thinking and planning, never did I really work to make it happen.

Aware of my lack of real practice, I finally resolved to change myself. The loss was such that I swore never would I regret for my passiveness ever again. And this oath has made all the difference.

To make up for my spare time in new semester, I forced myself to seek opportunities in school like voluntary works or sport contests. At first, I was still restrained by my old laziness and passive attitude that the evil in my mind lured me to give in, to escape from the problems. Once again, I hesitated, should I let go and run away, or clench my teeth to overcome.

While in a dilemma, I told myself, "Do it, I may fail; but escape, I won't even get a chance to fail" Because of this naĂŻve belief, I finally learned to grasp the opportunities around me. No longer I lived in fear of failing; instead, I do whatever I can, no matter what result will be. Perhaps I won't succeed, but I knew, I wouldn't regret, and that was all I need to know.

Now I stop pondering the likelihood of succeeding or worrying about the bad results. Before any kinds of "plans" can stop me, I will step out to pursue. Thanks to my Escape, I learned to be courageous and positive towards life. Before, when challenges got near, I ran away, but now, I run towards them.

This is my common app essay, I feel like it is not that deep. It needs a bit more feelings.

Urgently need some advice and feedbacks now!! Be as critique as you can! Thank you!!

Undergraduate / About Movie "Forrest Gump"; NYU Supplement What intrigues you? [7]

Following are 2 questions on NYU supplement, urgently need Help!!
I wrote about "Forrest Gump" for the first one. I want to make sure if it is impressive enough.
Please be critique and share the feeling after reading it! Really appreciate it.

1.What intrigues you?
Forrest Gump, a character who has shown the possibility and the beauty of life. He wasn't smart, yet he always tried his best to do things well; he wasn't sly enough to fit in the cunning world, yet he came through everything with honesty and love. Never did he look down on himself, with the support from his family and friends, and most importantly, himself. The naĂŻve and simple thinking pushed him forward to fight his own destiny, finally changing the impossible to reality. Gump broke the restraints on him and ran freely on the road of life.

This is a movie made me speechlessly sitting on bench, touched and awed at Gump's eventful and colorful life. A question popped up in my mind, "What life means to you?" Perhaps I am controlled by my fate, but as Gump said, "Life was like a box of chocolate, you never know what you're going to get". Everything can be a gift in life, and it may come in many forms, maybe as challenges or obstacles. I choose to see it differently. Each ordeal in life brings me to the next level, making me grow and adding up some seasoning to my life. Gump taught me to live with positive mind and confidence, as he did, I don't hesitate to pursue my dream. Even it seems impossible, it can be laughed by others; however, life is just like a box of chocolate, who knows?

2. Why NYUAD?
I spent four years of my childhood in Myanmar, my parent's home, and received the education in Taiwan. With these experiences, I am lucky enough to view different cultures and find my love of exploring them early in my life. The thrill of being in a new environment, learning local traditions, tasting exotic cuisine, seeing the colorful life of other culture is so intriguing that I always have the dream of stepping up to the global stage. And NYUAD is the stairway to fulfill it. It has the diverse student body and the location in the crossroad of the world, plus the emphasis of global citizens and chances of foreign study. I know in here, I will really become who I want to be and get closer to my dream.