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awakemysoul   
Dec 31, 2012
Undergraduate / The Rubik's Cube ; Common App Essay/ Significant experience/ achievement [4]

Despite never having tried my hand at one, I was willing to give it a shot.
I became obsessed
I was ecstatic about beating the task .
No matter which color or in which location the blocks are
There will be moments when everything
The more time I spent solving the cube, the more I started noticing its similarities with the world: the core never changes.
I came to understand that there are several ways a person can approach a situation, just as there are multiple combinations in which the blocks of a Rubik's cube can be placed before it is solved.

There's always a solution, one just has to keep turning...
The most valuable lesson I learned throughout this experience is that achievements can start from anywhere.
it can be accomplished if one takes the right steps and moves in the right direction.

These are just tips, some things may be better the way they are. Hope this helped nonetheless!!
Good luck, and please help with mine if you have time :)
awakemysoul   
Dec 24, 2012
Undergraduate / My father is a photographer; Common App/Who had a significant influence [5]

I really need help on this essay, as it's too personal for me to show it to someone I know, so any help would be greatly appreciated!!!

Prompt I chose: Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

My father has initiated each of my passions by showing me the importance of all arts. For example, as he is a photographer, every time we see a movie together, he mentions to me the quality of the cinematography, and though I don't know anything about it, when I see a movie without him, I see myself paying attention to the lighting, to the framing and even to the focus, which has not only made me aware of the art of film, but also of my love of film. Similarly, my father always insisted we go to museums when I was younger, even though I would sometimes protest, and each time we would go, I was amazed by his knowledge of art, which has today shaped my interest in art and made me willingly want to go to museums. So I guess I can thank my father for having initiated my interests in such names as Samuel Fuller, Chaplin, Basquiat, Pollock or Dylan, as these are some of the people that have, though it might sound redundant, influenced me to want to become influential.

However, I really wonder how it's possible for someone so intelligent to sometimes be so cruel. My sister and I have become used to our parents fighting over the years, as it has somehow just become usual to us, yet when my parents fight and I feel I have to intervene, is when my father has said the worst things to me. As they are still very foreign to me, I don't know how to explain his actions and words. What I can explain though, or at least try to, is the change that occurs: I never know when he's going to start saying things or acting a certain way, as it sometimes just changes over night, and the words I hear one day are to be forgotten the next day. I don't know if my sister, my mother, or I will ever be able to truly forget them though. These words have in some way equally shaped my interests however, as I have discovered music is the best means to escape them, and though they are very painful, they are what has pushed me every day to try and defy my father in order to never hear them again.

It is thanks to him that I always try to do everything in the most intelligent way possible though I don't even know which way that is, and that I always think deeply before saying something though I realize this could be the cause of my shyness, all in order to prove myself to him. However, I think and I hope I will never succeed. Thus, it's really difficult now to understand if he has had a good or a bad influence on me, but I guess each person's influence on someone can never be entirely good nor entirely bad - I believe it is always a mix of both, just as in this case.
awakemysoul   
Dec 24, 2012
Undergraduate / EXPRESSIONS; NYU Supp - What intrigues you? [10]

"can betray a lie" you can change it to "can portray a lie"
same here: "betraying every emotion" --> portraying every emotion

"an attempt at interpreting"

"Expressions often say more than words do themselves, as they form a medium of communication that never lies, betraying every emotion, every secret hidden beneath the surface." This is just an opinion, it's fine the way it is.

"My mom says that my eyes are very expressive: whether I'm happy, hurt, angry, or even excited, the emotion reflects in my eyes. "

Hope this helped!!
awakemysoul   
Dec 23, 2012
Undergraduate / The School of Rock & my passion for music ; COMMON APP [5]

Ahhh when I read this it made me smile so much cause I play drums too, and I went to School of Rock as well (although the one in Los Angeles)!!

But anyway, I think this essay is very inspirational, and your passion for music comes through very clearly. The only thing I have to say is that at first, we don't really understand what the topic of your essay is going to be, I actually sorta thought you were going to talk about the difficulties of being amidst your siblings who were starting their acting careers. So I think one thing you could do to improve this essay (in my opinion) is to better relate the beginning of your essay and the main topic.

Otherwise great essay and good luck!!! Hope I helped
awakemysoul   
Dec 19, 2012
Undergraduate / I am not exactly sure about what I wish to study ; NYU supp/ Academic interests [3]

Here is the prompt: NYU's global network provides students with hundreds of academic areas of interest for students to cultivate their intellectual curiosity and to help achieve their career goals. Whether you are entirely undecided about your academic plans or you have a definitive program of study in mind, what are your own academic interests? Feel free to share any thoughts on any particular programs or how you might explore those interests at NYU on any of our campuses.

Any opinions/help as to if I actually answered the question or if i should add anything etc would be appreciated!!! Thank you!

As I am not exactly sure about what I wish to study later on, some people might translate that as not having any passions or interests. However, I think it means I have too many. Because so many things interest me, I have never found it possible to be able to only pick one or two things I'm sure about wanting to study. There are just too many things I haven't experienced yet, things I haven't even heard of or people I haven't met. How at such a young age am I supposed to come up with a response to the question "What would you like to do later on?".

That is why I believe the College of Arts and Sciences would be the perfect fit for someone like me, not sure enough yet about my interests to pick a major, but would still have the opportunities to learn and study various and vast areas of subjects, so as to figure out from there what it is that I will want to study.

In any case, I know that New York City and NYU in particular is a place where I will be able to study whatever it is I decide on- whether it will be music, economy, film, writing or something completely different. And this is only possible considering the programs it has in various departments- such as for music, Steinhardt's department of music, or for film, the Tisch School of the Arts- but I will also be able to incorporate all of these passions I have in a very intellectually stimulating place: New York City.
awakemysoul   
Dec 19, 2012
Undergraduate / I indulge in every piece of the performance; NYU Supp/ What intrigues you? [3]

"Being a devoted* music fan"
"when you watch a performer perform" sounds a little redundant, maybe try when you watch a performer sing/dance/
"When an artist pours out their emotions" should be "when an artist pours out his or her emotions" even though it sounds weird

Also, I think at the beginning you should precise what performances you are talking about in particular, because it leaves the reader sort of confused.

Totally agree about music though, great ideas!
awakemysoul   
Dec 19, 2012
Undergraduate / Sibling insecurity and much more -Common App/ Application essay [13]

I think this sentence sort of throws the reader off of the main subject "As a child, I was also a subject to ethnic discrimination and bullying in my school. Back then, I did not know that it was wrong and always thought that I was the one carrying the defect."

It still makes sense without it, so maybe you should take it out or try to incorporate it more into the story, so as it not to seem like you're just adding it into your essay, but thats just my opinion, its completely your choice :)

But otherwise, very good essay overall!!
awakemysoul   
Dec 19, 2012
Undergraduate / NYU supplement "What intrigues you?"- street art [2]

Any criticism/help would be greatly appreciated!! :) also what i should add/take out?

This is the prompt: What intrigues you? Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or place in the world (a film, book, performance, website, event, location, etc.), and explain its significance to you.

After having taken many pictures of this form of art, interviewing artists when they wouldn't run away and trying to understand the history of it for a project, I started to realize that street art has become one of the most powerful methods of communication in our society. This form of art is very interesting in the way that everyone not only can see it, but in fact has to see it, as it is outside and in front of people's eyes. Therefore, anyone and everyone can be introduced to and influenced by art without ever actually going into a museum or an art gallery, which fascinates me very much.

I believe this form of art is in fact a method of communication because by writing, drawing, painting or even taping things, artists are not only expressing their thoughts and ideas, but equally letting these thoughts and ideas be shared by everyone, as they are public. I value this method of communication because it is this type of art that I have always been most fond of- that of Basquiat or Banksy, as it is not only a modern form of art but it also takes great influence from prehistoric art, such as from for example right next to where my parents grew up: the Lascaux Cave in France.

Now, whenever I see street art, and especially when it's done by someone famous, it makes me somewhat happy because I understand the intention of this person and the reason why he decided to expose his art in the street as opposed to inside an art gallery.
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