Writing Feedback / IELTS: Increase in overweight and decrease in health - Causes & Measures [2]

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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

The world has seen an increase in people's weight level along with the deterioration of health for a few decades, which has affected the whole society significantly. This essay will analyze the main reasons to this problem and the key to deal with.

Apparently, many culprits are to be blamed on this issue, some main of which are improper foods and unhealthy living habits. It is clear to see that in the busy modern life, a multitude of people state their preference for junk food rather than home - cooked foods by dint of time saving and convenience. However, such foods as hamburger, pizza and spaghetti contain high proportion of fat and cholesterol but are lacking in mineral and vitamins, while fresh vegetables and other farming produces are usually ignored. Therefore, the fact that more people, particularly in developed countries, have suffered from heart diseases and obesity is unavoidable. Besides, soft drinks provide much glucose we to our bodies, leading to sugar blood and overweight as well.

Obviously, the time has come for us to figure out some solutions to this matter. As the major reason is inappropriate sorts of food, the question is to make people aware of the essential role of healthy diet and consciousness of unhealthy food. Equally important, encouraging them to use more fresh food from agriculture and less genetically modified food to improve their health conditions through advertisements, health programs and social contests of food and diet. Moreover, the governments should motivate fast food companies to make progress in producing harmless products to serve the population.

In conclusion, it is unhealthy ready - food that mainly cause to higher average weight and lower levels of health. We should altogether try to prevent it by using nutritious food to improve our physical and mental conditions.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Negative effect of modern life's pressures on family life [6]

Some people believe that pressures of modern life are having negative effect on family life. Do you agree or disagree?

The modern life has blown a new trend of working and living in big cities. However, some people blame its pressures for negative effects on family life, with which I partly agree.

It is clear for all to see that a number of families have suffered from spiritual burdens it brings. To keep up with the rat race of life, parents are supposed to execute enormous workload to earn for living, which takes up most of their time. Especially, some businessmen who usually leave home early and come back late have no time to see their children, let alone to gather and relax with the family. Besides, heavy stressful workload also leads to depression and exhaustion for cities dwellers and mental and physical deterioration is more likely to happen. Moreover, focusing on their own work makes people desperate and less close, resulting in reduce in family sentiment.

Nonetheless, such drawbacks are not unavoidable. It is possible to find some urban residents that live happily in modern environments of cities. Those persons know exactly how to manage their time budget efficiently and balance between life and work. Some of them are willing to give away a part of work to have more time for taking care of their children, which brings them peace in the noisy life. Equally important, they succeed in taking advantage of modern life, say, information technology and entertainment, to relax themselves and their family. As their regards, stress of modern life is not considerable in compared with the joy it brings.

All in all, modern life has both positive and negative effects on family life. Therefore, people should have reasonable time management to balance the both impacts.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Too much emphasis on examinations [5]

Question: Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
With a common view to judging the students' quality, nations have different ways to approach the issues. However, in some countries, examinations deem to be emphasized heavily, leading to limitation for teachers and exceeding pressure on young pupils.

With regards to teachers, this method plays a considerable role in their work. People can hardly find out a better assessment than through testing and examining students which gives a frank and objective results. Not only do grades indicate how much the students' effort is but they also helps teachers with categorize them in comparison with other students. Nonetheless, examinations bring the teachers high pressure including building the tests and marking them. For instance, in most Vietnamese schools, each class has lots of students, meaning that teachers have the equal number of test to rank. That is the problem of heavier workload along with higher pressure. Nevertheless, teachers are not the only patient of too much emphasis on testing.

Students, particularly the the young ones, are worse affected by enormous quantity of test during school time. No sooner do children start attending primary schools than they have to struggle against the enemy named tests. Crammed with many a subject and different types of examination, it is not overstated that studying turns out to be a burden for kids to bear that may result in kids' depress and health deterioration. Despite the counter - productive effect, evaluation apparently still contributes to the students life and career. The grades expose their great endeavor at school and shall be a recognition of a hard - working process.

All in all, important role of tests and examinations is undeniable in education systems. However, governments and schools should take advantage of the method of an appropriate level to balance its pros and cons.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS;It's important to support artists,but important things should get priority [2]

Some people think any money the government spend on supporting the artists (painters, musicians, poets...) would be better than other important things? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
Spiritual culture is of great importance that presents the human civilization. The fact that artists who have enormous contribution to this are supported by the government is necessary. However, it should not be over judged than other important things in life.

It is undeniable that artistic products have a magnificent value in our life. Artists may be considered one of the parents giving birth to them. Firstly, without musics, paintings, poets and novels, life deems to be a day without light that makes you blind in spite of your good eyes. Not only do they brighten and beautify this world with their wonderful lyrics, rhythms and colors but they also imparts the messages that teach people to live, love and devote. It would be impossible for anyone not to feel responsible for the environment when listening to the song "Earth", or learn to dedicate for his country after reading the novel "War and Peace". The impact those things leaves on our thinking and action is obvious. As a matter of course, the persons creating them ought to be motivated.

Nevertheless, it is neither the spiritual factor that builds up the whole world nor the only target that the society needs to achieve. All nations have set their developing goals consisting of sustainability, productivity, welfare and on top of that, the human beings development. That is, artists are a minor group of people needing support from the governments. Is entertainment demand necessary for the poor while their basic needs such as foods, housing and medical care have not been met? This fact in many a developing country raises a big question for the authority to deal with. Only when material conditions are improved do the impoverished pay attention to their spiritual life. Even in some rich nations, the budget for artistic field does not account large part in the government's expenditure.

In conclusion, despite the importance of artistic products and their authors, other significant issues like environment and people should be put on priority to make a better world.