gmad06
Oct 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'optimum utilization of available resources' - Inequality between rich and poor nations [6]
I think you have good ideas for the prompt, targeting the leaders of poorer nations as a reason behind a country's poverty.
However, I think you need to reorganize the flow of your essay to make it more logical to read.
you need not to mention every possible way to fix the gap issue, just stick to what is aligned to the causes you have
mentioned in your main paragraphs.
hope this helps...
I think you have good ideas for the prompt, targeting the leaders of poorer nations as a reason behind a country's poverty.
However, I think you need to reorganize the flow of your essay to make it more logical to read.
you need not to mention every possible way to fix the gap issue, just stick to what is aligned to the causes you have
mentioned in your main paragraphs.
hope this helps...