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Name: Byung Kyu Park
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Last Post: Nov 24, 2013
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Bobbypark   
Nov 24, 2013
Writing Feedback / Financing artists from tax payer's money - Ielts [3]

Some people think that government should provide assistance to all kinds of artists (eg. painters, musicians, poets), while some others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

Through the progression of time, the issues regarding the government assistance of all kinds of artists have become controversial. Some think supporting artists is essential while others argue that this should not be the most important sector. It is important to maintain a balanced awareness. As a way of doing so, this essay will weigh different two views as well as reveal a personal opinion.

To begin with, no one can deny that it is important to protect cultural legacy of the country, because the young are likely to learn past history from arts that have been inherited for a long period of time. However, should artists be not financed by the government, it may be obviously to see a number of valuable paints and poems become extinctive. This is likely to cause the loss of cultural legacy of the country. Therefore, from this reasoning, it is crucial to support artists.

However, as with any form of implementation, agreements concurrently exist with disagreements. Even though helping artists with financial problems is necessary, there are a lot of sectors that require desperate support from the government. For instance, in developing countries, they are likely to have the lack of access to drinkable water due to undeveloped filtering system. To remedy this situation, the government should pay more attention to this problem than supporting artists. However, this situation can be avoidable by the fact that as of not helping artists, they would lose their jobs. This could obviously lead to the increased rate of unemployment.

Personally, as of financing artists, this could prevent them from losing their jobs as well as help them keep remaining the cultural legacy of the country. However, assisting developing countries that need to improve their environments should not be neglected for the citizens who deserve to obtain better access to safe water or electricity.
Bobbypark   
Nov 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / Some people think secondary students should study international news as a school subject [5]

Some people think secondary students should study international news as a school subject, but others argue that it is a waste of their valuable school time.?

Through the progression of time, the issues regarding international news as a school subject for the young learners have become controversial. Some think it is crucial for the young to learn social knowledge while others think studying international news could be stressful for them. It is important to remain a balanced awareness. This essay will not only reveal both benefits and drawbacks.

To begin with, no one can deny that paying attention to the world would be helpful for the youth to gain social knowledge. For example, should they only study the subjects, which are given in school, they are not likely to find current issues in the world that could be importantly handled in companies. Therefore, they may miss a lot of social information that is likely to be required in their future careers while spending too much time on studying the subjects, which may be only focused on exams. From this reasoning, studying international news could be essential for students to learn as a school subject.

However, as with any form of implementation, drawbacks concurrently exist with benefits. Students at school are likely to deal with substantial stress from a number of exams as well as subjects. For instance, According to some research, many students in China study more than ten subjects, which are more than what American students do. Therefore, as of choosing international news as a school subject, students are likely to suffer from stress and depression. However, this is realistically avoidable by the fact that reading a variety of the world news could provide the young with a number of advanced terms that could help them enhance their verbal and writing abilities. From this reasoning, selecting the world news as a school subject could result in more benefits than disadvantages.

To sum up, in considering both sides of the argument, it is clear that this essay has revealed the significant supporting reasons for the claim that learning international news could benefit students to gain common sense as well as social knowledge that may be helpful in their careers. The drawback has shown to be limited by the fact that as the young deal with a number of subjects, adding international news would be able to trouble them mentally. This could lead to depression.
Bobbypark   
Nov 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / Some people think that increasing business and cultural contacts have positive influences [7]

Some people think that increasing business and cultural contacts have positive influences on development; others think that it has negative effects on national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Through the progression of time, the issues regarding the increased interaction between countries have become controversial. It is important to maintain a balanced awareness. As way of doing so, this essay will not only present the positive and negative effects of this situation but also reveal a personal opinion.

To begin with, no one can deny the development of technology has had a positive impact on the society such as commutation. For example, as taking flights helps citizens commute easily to other nations, a number of the tourists from different places are likely to come to the country. Therefore, this could alleviate the problem for citizens who desire to learn different cultures as well as languages. Due to this fact, they would be able to save a remarkable deal of money. From this reasoning, the increased interaction between nations is likely to benefit the society.

However, as with any form of implementation, drawbacks concurrently exist with benefits. Due to the different cultures, citizens from different nations may have a different way on behavior, which is likely to lead to a cultural clash. For instance, when it comes to greeting, bowing is the way Koreans do. However, this may be rare to see in Western countries and just hand shaking would be considered a bad attitude in Korea. From this reasoning, different cultures may be able to cause a conflict between nations.

This negative impact is realistically avoidable by the fact that people from different nations could be equipped with various knowledge and skills that can be combined and utilized in the country. This situation would be not only able to help the economy of the country but also help employees share the knowledge and skills with each other.

To sum up, in considering both sides of the argument, it is clear that this essay has reveled significant supporting reasons for the claim that increasing business and cultural contacts have a positive impact on the country for the easy way to learn different cultures and languages. However, its negative impact has been shown to be limited by sharing knowledge and skills between citizens from different places.
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