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Name: sree
Joined: Nov 26, 2013		 Last Post: Jan 21, 2014
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SreeSam   
Jan 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 General Training : Letter to landlord [7]

I hope you could have remember me

- I hope you could remember me

As per the agreement, myself along with my wife supposed to move in by next month 1st onwards.

- As per the agreement, myself and my wife were supposed to move in to the apartment by 1st of next month.

I am afraid I will not be able to occupy the flat as I had agreed.

- I am afraid that I would not be able to keep up my word.

Unfortunately, during my vacation to my native last week in India, I had met with an accident, which causes a severe injury in my back bone.

- Unfortunately, during my vacation to India, I met with an accident where my back bone was severely injured.

Doctor advised me to be in bed rest for at least next two months from now

- Doctor has advised me for two months of complete bed rest.

Due to my physical condition, I have made necessary arrangements in my office to purse my work from home.

- This is not needed to be stated here !

I believe, you don't have any issues with this regard.

- Kindly let me know if you have any concerns with the same.

I hope to move in to your flat at Creams road, starting from next to next month 1st.

- I hope I will be in a better condition to travel by the end of March and I will move in to the flat immediately once am back.
SreeSam   
Jan 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 General Training : Letter to landlord [7]

Sure. This forum helps in improving your writing skills. I am learning a lot from it !!!

You can also go through the task 2 essays which are posted in this forum.
SreeSam   
Jan 21, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - Teenage or Adult life - which brings more happiness in life? [7]

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Happiness is a stage where you relish yourself forgetting all your worries. This may occur during any part of one's life. Some people say it happens during teenages and few argue that it is the adult life which brings happiness. I would say that teenage holds the best moments in which one 'lives life to the fullest' with enthusiasm than the adult life which gets you into the 'cloak of responsibility'.

Adolscence is the fantastic time period to delight every activity or occassion. From thirteen to nineteen is the golden period of life which you cannot get back to. Concentrating to learn new things, having adventures, taking risks and building up new relationships. For instance, you learn new things and have a pleasant time with the maximum friends around and rejoice the whole tenure.

On the other hand, some people argue that adult life is the happiest stage of life. One gets a chance to decide on their own, spend their own money etc., Whenever you are stuck amidst of problems, your spouse is along to help you around. For example, if there is a guy who lost money in his business, his wife can always step in to solve the financial hurdles by taking up a new job where the guy's life is secured.

Having discussed about both the sides, I would say that adult life always means responsible life. When you get into being more responsible, sometimes the level of happiness comes down. Hence, teenage years are the most happiest times of our lives.
SreeSam   
Jan 21, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - Teenage or Adult life - which brings more happiness in life? [7]

Thanks a lot for the comments dumi and fikri :)

Here is the updated one,

Happiness is a fascinating state, where you relish yourself forgetting all the worries. This might occur during any part of one's life. Some people say it happens during teen ages and few argue that it is the adult life which brings happiness. I would say that teenage holds the best moments in which one 'lives life to the fullest' with enthusiasm than the adult life which gets you into the 'cloak of responsibility'.

Adolescence is the fantastic time period to delight every activity or occasion. From thirteen to nineteen is the golden period of life which you cannot get back to, where you get to concentrate on learning new things, having adventures, taking risks and building up new relationships. For instance, you learn new things and have a pleasant time with the maximum friends around and rejoice the whole tenure.

On the other hand, some people argue that adult life is the happiest stage of life. One gets a chance to decide on their own, spend their own money etc., Whenever you are stuck amidst of problems your spouse is along to help you around. For example, if there is a guy who lost money in his business, his wife can always step in to solve the financial hurdles by taking up a new job where the guy's life is secured.

Having discussed about both the sides, I would say that adult life always means responsible life. When you get into being responsible, the level of happiness comes down. Hence, teenage years are the most happiest of our lives.
SreeSam   
Jan 21, 2014
Writing Feedback / (IELTS TASK 2) closing offices to save energy [7]

One of the owners said that the reducing of electricity using in their company

- One of the owners said that the reduction of electricity usage in their company

This will fall their production in a high level, even only one day they stop the using of energy.

- To shutdown their company for a day, in-order to reduce the energy usage might impact the production on a higher level.

As a result, this will affects to the employers as well

employees - I guess you have confused between employers and employees

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