Writing Feedback / 'government is in charge' - equal numbers of male and female students [2]

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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It goes without saying that the discrimination between girls and boys has led to university subjects. This is to say that, many majors have been eliminated for the girls to study at universities. However, recently there is a widespread belief that both genders must have the equal right in studying what they are eager for. This essay will argue the reasons of my strong agreement with this belief.

One of the factors which deserves my attention for this reasoning is that the females' right , in this society, is ignored whereas It is declared that girls must have the same right as boys. A good illustration of this is education. Indeed females do not have chance to study some majors , Electricity, for instance, while they may have as much talent and interest as males. It is believed that the culture has resulted in this issue which , undoubtedly, should be revised in this modern society.

An instinct factor that should not be neglected is that just giving chance to females to get graduated in eliminated subjects is not adequate, they should be guaranteed by job opportunities. To be more precise, in spite of giving the girls their own right to study what they are into , some career opportunities should be created so as to pave the not only girls', but also boys' way to soar to the peak of success.

All in all, There are a lot of debates over the mentioned issue. Nevertheless this is the government who is in charge of doing what is best. It would be practical if some actions are put into practice in order to alter the culture from elementary schools. In this way ,possibly, many our problems may fade.

Writing Feedback / All cats are gray in dark- Nowadays people pay much more time and money on appearance [8]

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Recently, one of the biggest people's concerns is how to look. This has resulted in the rate of cosmetic surgeries and cosmetics use which have been in rise markedly. The statistics in this regard indicate the high percentage of spending money and more importantly the time regarding looking a million dollars. This essay will argue the reasons of my agreement with this issue.

To begin with, for one reason, nowadays the signs of cosmetic surgeries can be seen in one's, mainly, face. In Tehran city, if we take an example, the number of people had surgery is a noted figure that is increasing day after another. For another, it does not seem to be highly common to have one without any make up seen. Evidence for this is provided by the related news; Iran has got a huge amount of cosmetics consumption over a period from 1383 to 1391.

According to the following widespread proverb accepted by almost everyone "all cats are gray in dark" it can be got that the personality is superficial than the look. As a result, some actions must be taken to make people care about their character more. A good illustration of this might be the advertisement and media by helping people not to get estranged from their identity as a human kind. This is to say that, whereof media has a quick impact on people, firstly some shows can be dedicated to the surgeries' harm and secondly some shows for paving the way of people to care about their personality, simultaneously.

To summarize, there is no denying that the mentioned factor is ostensible in most societies. If the humans keep on having this trend, they would possibly forget, by far, one of their most important features of theirs in life which is personality, not the appearance. To be more precise people cannot live without having relationship with each other; therefore they need an acceptable character as a tool to live, not a flashy look. "Beauty is only skin deep."

Writing Feedback / Some people believe in co-educational classes and others believe in segregated ones [3]

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Some people believe in co-educational classes and others believe in segregated ones. Discuss.

There is no denying that, there are lots of debates about segregated and co-educational classes among, particularly, adolescences and youth about being quite partial of co-educational ones, whereas, mostly parents seem to be opponent in contrast with their children. This opinion possibly rises from the culture or mainly from their being worry about their children's future life. I agree up to this point but this is not how I see it. In this essay I will state the reasons of my strong preference for co-educational classes.

This can be attributed that, one of the most important factors affects my mind is the ability to communicate which can be achieved by these sorts of classes among both genders. One related explanation might be that, the individuals in this atmosphere are forced and taught to not only defend their ideas and beliefs but also protect themselves invisibly, whereby; they tend to have an admissible and satisfying self-image of one, while the ones in segregated classes seem to be self-conscious and have less confidence where both genders are.

We can see beyond any doubt that reaching success and surpassing the far larger statistical population help one to have a satisfactory self-esteem and self-confidence. A further reason behind this trend is that they acquire to get accustomed to the society they will enter afterwards.

On the whole, there were just some listed pros of co-educational classes above which reveal these classes' well and good; I would dispute this, though. Although there can be some faults with this reasoning, I wish to have these kinds of schools seen more and more