Writing Feedback / The number of television sales annually from 1996 to 1999 [4]

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The bar graph describes the fluctuation the number of television sales among in 1996 and 1999. It gives us the announcement of the development of the sales each year.

In 1996, selling television was only 6 million units and it rose to 8 million units in 1997. There was an increase significantly in 1997 to 1998 started from 8 million going to 11 million units. However, reducing had happened in 1998 to 1999 by the difference of valuable sales was 1 million televisions.

Overall, we can see this bar chart which the lowest sale occurred in 1996 by 6 million units and sales in 1999 were the highest sales with sales of 11 million units. An increase in sales occurred generally from year to year except in 1999, television sales dropped slightly.

The given bar graph illustrates television sales which happened from 1996 to 1999 based on the number of sales annually.

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Writing Feedback / 'prophet Adam' - famous person from history [9]

If you could travel back in time to meet a famous person from history, what person would you like to meet? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Travel time is an activity which is absurd in this era. When I hear travel time, it reminds me of several films like Back To The Future, Terminator, and Doraemon because they are my favorite movies. We need machine time to do that and in fact, it is a tool that I dreamed when I was a child. If I had had machine time and opportunity to travel back in time, I would have chosen to meet prophet Adam. I extremely want to talk with him in that I have several question making me curious.

As we know, some people want back to the past seeing that it is an interesting matter. Personally, I will meet and create conversation with prophet Adam if I can travel across the time and space. Firstly, I am anxious to know about heaven. In my belief, prophet Adam is a first human on this our planet, but before he lived on earth, he had ever stayed in heaven. Then, he lived with angles, genie, and Satan. Furthermore, I just have a desire to find out illustration about the situation and condition in heaven. Secondly, In the story, prophet Adam was driven out from heaven by reason of he broke promise given by God. Satan is the cause of it all inasmuch as it succeed to make prophet Adam to do its persuasion that was deceiving prophet Adam by telling him to eat fruit which has been forbidden by God. God knew about it and chase away him from heaven directly. Accordingly, I want to ask about the taste of that fruit from heaven, which made him fall to the earth, for the reason that I want to find out whether the fruit was delicious or not. The last is about his wife as we know that prophet Adam was not live alone in this soil. He lived with a woman created by God and she was on duty to accompany prophet Adam. However, I still confuse about her names since she has several name different such as Hawwa, Eva, Chava, and Hava. Consequently, I hope he can tell me the name of his wife actually.

Nevertheless, several people do not like what I have said because they think I am a person that does not believe in the existence of God and it is contradicted in religion. Also, other people is possible to say that all of this has been written in the scriptures and it does not need in question anymore.

The aforementioned evidence examines that a famous person whom I desire to meet is prophet Adam inasmuch as I want to know about heaven, the fruit, and his wife name.

Writing Feedback / Early children formal education - kids need to play making them happy [4]

Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Other believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two view. Which view do you agree.

Children are the hope of the nation because several of them will work in government in the future. Hence, they must study to get many knowledges for their lives in the future. Personally, young children should spend up their time to play with their friends. In the following paragraph I will present my reasons to support my opinion.

As we know, kids need to play making them happy, especially young children. They have not needed to study yet because children only need to have a good time. I think we should let them do something what they want, but aside from that, we also have to give attention because if their parents are careless with their children, it will make the children to be mischievous. Furthermore, brain of children is not strong enough to study a lesson. It is caused by their brain that is still in development stage. For instance, my cousin, who is 4 years old, only likes playing with their toys and playing with their friends. His parents have tried to teach my cousin some useful lessons, but it does not work at all. It shows that little kids are not ready to study and they only want to play something that is interesting. Beside that, young children need to take rest longer than adults. They will be able to get sick if we force our children to learn many lessons which they do not want. Hence, I think young children better spend their time playing than studying.

However, several people do not agree with my opinion due to they assume playing is not good for children. Parents want their sons and daughters to spend their time to study something that is important because they want to have smart children. Consequently, they try to enroll their children in formal school or courses like English or Mathematics at very early age. A few parents have opinions that the children own good memory and playing only makes they are lazy to study.

Given this evidence, it can be seen that I feel the younger children should spend their time for playing, but when they are old enough to get a lesson, they have to study hard.

Writing Feedback / The 21st century; world always changes - technology, transportation, and humankind [4]

This world always change and and it forces people to follow that change. In 21st century, there are many different things compared to the previous era such as technology, transortation, and people.

Firstly, in the past, people only had a little technology. However, nowadays, technology is growing fast. For example, today, there are many kinds of television. You can find television with 3 dimensions. It is obvious that technology in 21st century is better than handred years ago. There are many new technologies like cell phone, internet, and robot and they are really help us. Therefore, technology gives many benefits for many people in 21st century.

Next, as we know, people in this earth need transportation for helping their activities. Now, there are many kind of transportation that are around us. For example, in my hometown, people can go wherever they want easily because many transportation are available and it is cheap. This example shows that transportation is developing rapidly in 21st century. Moreover, we can find car with high speed and plane which can fill many people. So, I think transportation is one of things that useful for many people in nowadays era.

The last is humankind. It is different between people in the past and people in the present. For example, several years ago, many people on this planet had low education, but, today, almost all people have had good education. It shows that human beings are always changing. Furthermore, The differences of people can also be seen through style of fashion and style of hair. Thus, it causes characteristic of people different too.

In short, the world always changes especially technology, transportation, and humankind.