Writing Feedback / IELTS: mobile phone; "Iron man" / "Weichat" - destroy social interactions? [8]

1 Some people argue that the technology such as mobile phone (cell phone) destroys social interaction. Do you agree or disagree? (100109)

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Recently, there has been a social concern in regards to whether mobile phones have a negative effect in our social communication. Indeed, mobile phones have been widely used for people of all ages, bringing convenience and entertainment into our life. However, as far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with the view that this great invention causes many social problems.

In the first place, spending too much time on phones may exert adverse effects on social life. In the first place, as people increasingly tend to focus and relay on phones, they may lose their interest on daily activities like meeting with their friends so that distraction may be developed during study or social activities. Moreover, continuous use of mobile phone may damage both eyesight and physical posture of the children.

Furthermore, there are many types of games available in the phone and many of them are very aggressive in nature such as "Iron man". In those games, children are rewarded for being more violent, and this violence is repeated again and again. For instance, many games involve children helping their character to kill or shoot, which many lead to increased aggressive feelings, thoughts and behaviours. Therefore, the hardship of communication may be developed.

However, other people may perceive this issue from different viewpoint. With rapid development of the internet, people are able to enjoy quick electronic communication via internet. For instance, as lots of chatting apps available online such as "Weichat", people tend to send instant messages free of charge by using their phones rather than face to face communication. Therefore, mobile phones have shortened the distance of communication.

After having considered all the problems that I have discussed above, we can finally draw a conclusion that although mobile phones brings convenience of communication, they also contribute to some social problems.

Letters / IELTS: Letter to foreign country friend, starting an import-export business [6]

One of your friends in a foreign country is starting an import-export business, and he has asked you to recommend a product from your country to him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

1. Say what product you want to recommend to him
2. Tell him where he/she can get this product
3. Explain why you want to recommend this product

Dear Mr. Robert.

I was very pleased to receive your letter after quite a long time and I was also happy to learn about your new business venture. I am here to offer you any support you need from this end, dear friend

As you know, I am living in a mainland city so that the forestry is very thrive in my hometown, which result in a prosper timber chair trade.

In the first place, it is with ease to find local chair factories, mainly located in the city, in the area. I am willing to find their phone numbers for you to contact them.

Furthermore, the local timber chair on several aspects is excellent. Firstly, all the material is sourced from local trees so that the chair product can afford more than five hundred kilos. Moreover, the cost of local labour is relatively competitive in comparison to that in other countries. Therefore, it is profitable to import our chairs and sale in your country.

Lastly, I can guarantee the quality of the product and feel free to contact me if you would like to know the details about the chairs. Hope your business will be successful in the future.

Best regards,
Shigang xing

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Parents are the best teachers? Use specific reasons and examples [6]

This is for taks 2 in a ielts exam. thank a lot for any corrections.

Question
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Recently, there has been a social concern in regards to who is the best teacher for children's education. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree with the view that the school teacher is the best option for children's education. My arguments will be discussed as follows.

In the first place, teaching staff are professional in terms of promoting children's professional skills and have more time to stay with them. For instance, in many countries, children are required to stay at school for five days out of a week, in which teachers can impart theoretical knowledge and practical skills to students to help them improve their intelligence. As a result, skills and knowledge such as computer operation will help children to prepare for their future career.

Furthermore, teachers have also played an important role on children social skills. First of all, school teachers are most qualified and experienced on identifying peer conflict and reducing aggressive behaviours. Therefore, children will develop important life skills such as learning personal boundaries, facing future problems and learning important conflict resolution skills. Besides, such positive peer relationships will also aid in the development of communication based social skills, which can enhance academic achievement that helps secure a bright future and brings higher opportunities of success in life.

Last but not lease, Compared with teachers, parents do not have enough time to spend with their children. Nowadays we are facing a global economic crisis and it is necessary for both parents to work, hence there is not enough time for them to teach their children. Therefore, it was impossible for them to be a good teacher

In conclusion, teachers are the best for children's education due to the fact that school educators not only contribute much on children's professional skills, but they can teach their students important social communication techniques in order to survive in this competitive world.

Letters / IELTS test: newspaper letter - "best neighbor in the area" competition. [8]

The local newspaper is holding a "best neighbor in the area" competition. Write a letter to the newspaper to recommend your neighbor for this competition. In your letter,

1. Introduce yourself
2. Say whom you are recommending
3. Explain why this neighbor should be the winner of this competition

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter with reference, my neighbor Mr. Robert, to the competition organized by your news paper, "Best Neighbour In The Area"

I am a resident in 88 Hill street and I have been living in this neighborhood for 20 years. I got to know Mr. Robert many years ago after I had just moved in this area. His excellent characters on several aspects such as enthusiasm and kindness took me by great surprise. In the first place, he always helps an old lady living nearby cross the road, which makes him late to go to work. Secondly, I have never met a young person so kind to teach new migrants English free of charge.

Now, Mr. Robert is intending to apply for your prestigious competition for a chance to win that title. It is both my pleasure and honor to write this recommendation letter for him, and I guarantee the truthfulness of all that I have said about him. Thus, I wish to recommend my immediate neighbor Mr Robert to win this title because I have a strong belief that he would be the most suitable candidate for the same and please feel free to contact me if you have any further questions.

Thank you for your kindness, and your prompt attention to this letter would be highly appreciated.
Yours Sincerely,
Shigang Xing