Writing Feedback / Not only mother is giving her time and energy to nourish and raise children [3]

Prompt - Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as mush as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Why fathers parenting are less appreciated? One major answer to this is fathers tend to have responsibilities which take him away from their children. This has brought the fact that mothers are more responsible for bringing the children up. Although in dynamic society it is not only man takes the economic control of the family but also the woman. Therefore racing children has come to a stage where both parents equally take part in.

However in some cultures and countries, mothers are more involved in bringing up children while fathers hold the financial burden alone. This leads them to spend a little time with their children, resulting a weak father-child relationship. Nevertheless it is also believed that women are more domain to decide to have children or not, fertilizes this situation furthermore. Anyhow I believe that this opinion is outraged. In the sophisticated world equipped with modern technology, father is powerful as mother to decide to have children.

But undoubtedly the natural process where woman holds the baby in her womb for almost a year, gives the mother to attach with the infant more dearly and emotionally which built a great foundation to her relationship with the child. Althought for the better psychological and physical development of the child father should also take an equal part in their life. To facilitate that father can share more joy by doing activities such as playing with them, read to them, go picnics and camping etc.

Anyhow to conclude this with my personal opinion , I believe that how much fathers are not involved to parenting, when children grow up they realize that it was not only mother who gave her time and energy to make them nourished and built but also their farther.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - 'the chart also predicts the proportions in 2040' - quantity of the population aged 65 [3]

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Prompt - The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph illustrates the quantity of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 to the present as well as to the future up to 2040 in three different nations.

It is evident that in 1940 the aged population over 65 was below 10 percent in all three countries while USA depicted the highest value of 9%. After that the proportions of USA and Sweden increased to a peak in 1980, where USA represented 15% while Sweden was also managed to come near to that point. During this period Japan showed a slight draw back, by keeping the same position between three countries.

However the chart also predicts the proportions in 2040 which are contradictory to the past. According to that Japan bears the highest amount over 25% while Sweden and USA are in that order respectively. The transition of Sweden over USA showed before 2000, and it is predicted to be the same till 2040. In contrast Japan shows a slow increase until 2030, when the values starts to rocket to the highest point in 2040.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: learning a foreign language early has benefits for an individual but not for the culture [2]

Language is the most prominent way of communicating each other. Different cultures use different languages. The language that parents inherit you is the mother tongue. Accept that all other languages become the foreign language. In Sri lanka Sinhala is the mother tongue, English has become the most needed foreign language.

Some experts believe that primary school is the best place to begin learning a foreign language rather than secondary school. I believe it has both good as well as bad aspects

Learning a language is not like learning some other subjects. The more we practice a language, the more we get better. Since the mind of a primary child is fresh, it is easier for them to learn new words and enrich their vocabulary. It is not something child leans because they have to. They will also learn how to pronounce those words properly. Children in young age are not shy as teenagers. They say things out loud even though they don't know the meaning of it. These children benefit the slow and longer version of learning a foreign language, which adults will never have.

On the other hand this may leads some problems too. Mother tongue is the first language we learn. It is more important for the thinking process. It has to be rooted well for the better development of the brain. By trying to include another language in early age, children may get confused. Child might not be able to draw a line between his mother tongue, and the foreign language. By not distinguishing the different between those languages could leads the child to not to learn both languages properly. In secondary School there mother tongue is strong, that they know if there are learning another language.

In a different scenario if child lean the foreign language better than the mother tongue, mother tongue can become extinct, this is a main problem in Sri Lanka nowadays. Sri Lanka is the only country which speaks "Sinhala". But the necessity has given the "English" language the more concern.

Therefore in conclusion I believe learning a foreign language; in primary age has benefits as an individual, but as a nation it might have bad effects to the culture.