midorimido
Feb 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 - A Wind Turbine for Harnessing Renewable Energy [8]
could you please to tell me more detail about "more" function?
could you please to tell me more detail about "more" function?
midorimido
Feb 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / "Your generation will be the one that changes everything" - ENG101 [3]
Hi wassupwoodsie,
If you want to compare your live with your parents, I suggest you to separate different case in different paragraph. It is make your essay more easy to read.
Overall, your grammar good enough.
Hi wassupwoodsie,
If you want to compare your live with your parents, I suggest you to separate different case in different paragraph. It is make your essay more easy to read.
Overall, your grammar good enough.
midorimido
Feb 5, 2015
Student Talk / UK universities- Are Overseas candidates interviewed by universities? [4]
As I know, some universities will ask you about:
1. university will ask you about your qualification
2. your experience in organizations and job
3. why you choose that university
4. your planning in that university
5. your purpose
As I know, some universities will ask you about:
1. university will ask you about your qualification
2. your experience in organizations and job
3. why you choose that university
4. your planning in that university
5. your purpose
midorimido
Feb 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / International education; most significant current project to process humanizing mankind to the point [6]
Hi Muzakki, let me try to comment your writing.
be careful, after thus must be subect+verb.
I think, produced is not compatible with next sentence
Hi Muzakki, let me try to comment your writing.
International education is the most significant current project to process humanizing mankind to the point. For this reason, studying aboard is becoming more popular in recent years and thus to generate a great deal of discussion.
be careful, after thus must be subect+verb.
Such a choice has produced a drawback for students as the language barrier can be a problem when they should be involved in local community
I think, produced is not compatible with next sentence
midorimido
Feb 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 - A Wind Turbine for Harnessing Renewable Energy [8]
The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.
The diagrams show the construction of wind turbine and where it can be placed. The turbine consists of blades, wind sensor which is used to manage speed and direction, and generator. The process starts when a wind blows through the blades. As a result, the blade is turned around by wind. As the air is turning the blade, the wind sensor will recognize speed and direction which is connected to a generate. When the wind is sensoring speed and direction, it will inform computer operator about direction and angle of blades.
The tower can be placed on the hill, and in this case the tower can be installed under the sea. However, wind turbine tends to be lower and less wind strengths only 100 kilowatts, so landcapeis not spoilled. Alternatively, the tower can be placed on the hill where the wind aremaximum strength and more electricity can be generated. In general, while the wind turbine appears to be a simple way of harnessing renewable energy, its instalation may cause a number problems related to its location.
The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.
The diagrams show the construction of wind turbine and where it can be placed. The turbine consists of blades, wind sensor which is used to manage speed and direction, and generator. The process starts when a wind blows through the blades. As a result, the blade is turned around by wind. As the air is turning the blade, the wind sensor will recognize speed and direction which is connected to a generate. When the wind is sensoring speed and direction, it will inform computer operator about direction and angle of blades.
The tower can be placed on the hill, and in this case the tower can be installed under the sea. However, wind turbine tends to be lower and less wind strengths only 100 kilowatts, so landcapeis not spoilled. Alternatively, the tower can be placed on the hill where the wind aremaximum strength and more electricity can be generated. In general, while the wind turbine appears to be a simple way of harnessing renewable energy, its instalation may cause a number problems related to its location.
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midorimido
Feb 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Wind Turbine Generates Energy Power for Harnessing [IELTS - TASK 1] [3]
try different word.
I suggest you not to use overall in process. Try using at the first glace
While the tower is made from steel, the blades are manufactured from either fiberglass or wood. In addition, these parts are connected to a generator which can generate 1.5 megawatts energy power. Also, a wind sensor is installed on the top of generator which can measure the speed and the direction of wind when the blades are turned around by blowing wind
try different word.
Overall , it is clear that while it is a simple way to generate energy power by using natural source like wind, its installation will be by far the most difficult in some extent related to its location.
I suggest you not to use overall in process. Try using at the first glace
midorimido
Feb 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / The turbine construction consist of two main features: a steel tower and a fiberglass or wood blades [3]
You make the flow sentence easy to read and attactive word can be adapted in sort paragraph. At the firs glace, I can see that you have potential to take ielts test on march.
The higher location of the turbine, the stronger wind which come to, and more electricity can be generated.
while the machine appears to be a simple technology, it effectively harnesses renewable energy.
You make the flow sentence easy to read and attactive word can be adapted in sort paragraph. At the firs glace, I can see that you have potential to take ielts test on march.
midorimido
Dec 23, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 - Personal saving as a percentage of personal income [3]
The table compares the proportion of personal salary devoted to saving in seven countries; Canada, France, Germany, Italy, Japan, UK and USA in three time periods. It is measured in percent.
Overall, it can be seen that almost all of percentage of personal saving in seven countries decreased, while UK increased from 1970 to 2000.
By 1970, Italy had the highest saving rate of 29.5%, followed by France with 18.7 and Japan with 17.6%, while Canada had the lowest rate with 5.6%. A closer look at the data reveals that in 1990, Italy was still the leading country, through its saving rate had declined to 17.6%, whereas in Canada, the saving rate had almost doubled to 11.5 and Germany was stabled with 13.6%.
By 2000, only three country; France, Japan and UK had rose from previous year. Morover, France and Japan were at same level led with 13.6%. Personal saving in Canada dropped dramatically to 1.9% and It was the lowest saving rate. Germany and USA remain decrease, 11,8% and 4.0% respectivelly.
The table compares the proportion of personal salary devoted to saving in seven countries; Canada, France, Germany, Italy, Japan, UK and USA in three time periods. It is measured in percent.
Overall, it can be seen that almost all of percentage of personal saving in seven countries decreased, while UK increased from 1970 to 2000.
By 1970, Italy had the highest saving rate of 29.5%, followed by France with 18.7 and Japan with 17.6%, while Canada had the lowest rate with 5.6%. A closer look at the data reveals that in 1990, Italy was still the leading country, through its saving rate had declined to 17.6%, whereas in Canada, the saving rate had almost doubled to 11.5 and Germany was stabled with 13.6%.
By 2000, only three country; France, Japan and UK had rose from previous year. Morover, France and Japan were at same level led with 13.6%. Personal saving in Canada dropped dramatically to 1.9% and It was the lowest saving rate. Germany and USA remain decrease, 11,8% and 4.0% respectivelly.
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